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Can I Get Some Brutally Honest Opinions?

by Ouroboros
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Despite a lot of pre-occupations in the REAL world lately, I've finally found my passion and started a marketing campaign.

My problem is that I've chosen a highly competitive niche and decided to take a 'devils advocate' approach so it's going to be a while before I begin to see results. You'd never know it from my progress so far, but there is method in my madness.

What I'm asking is this, would some of you experienced article marketers take a look at my blog and article submissions and comment on the quality? They aren't my best efforts but the best I can do with my limited time lately.

My reasoning is... that why I wait to see results and build up some traffic, I may need to freelance as a writer to get some pen money. I'm currently not working as my elderly mother needs a primary care giver right now.

The URL's are not IM related and I have nothing to gain by posting them other than your criticism, this is not self promotion so please don't penalize me. I'm simply asking if you think my writing style is something that might be developed into a marketable skill.

Please take a look at:

http://hydrogen-gas-saver.info
http://www.squidoo.com/stats/traffic...gas_saver_faqs
http://ezinearticles.com/?Hydrogen-G...er?&id=1319257

I know it's a lot to ask but I would appreciate your opinions.

Thanks,
Stephen
#brutally #honest #opinions
  • Profile picture of the author RebeccaL
    The quality looks good to me. I'd make your Ezinearticles submissions at least 400 words. Anything less looks rather short.
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    • Profile picture of the author Ouroboros
      That was rather short, but it's the one that's getting the most views and clickthru's... my other eza's that are longer are getting views, but very few clicks
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    • Profile picture of the author lakshaybehl
      Originally Posted by SunTzu82 View Post

      Try working on your prose a little. Some of your sentences run on, and your writing is erratic. It feels like you're speaking at me and not to me, but other than that it seems like you have some good information to offer.
      I'd agree with that!

      Originally Posted by longroad View Post

      The quality looks good to me. I'd make your Ezinearticles submissions at least 400 words. Anything less looks rather short.
      Length is not really the matter as liong as you are able to put across the message that you are trying to convey.

      I'd add here that if you could replAace some words within the text with some other words which basically have no meaning in the dictionary (generally created by putting together a word and another word) and create images in the minds of people .... Like I did this one: "The Brimlock Breach", it would make you stand out and get your article read till the end.
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      • Profile picture of the author Ouroboros
        words that have no meaning in the dictionary?

        wtf has that got to do with anything?
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        • Profile picture of the author SpicyRobby
          Hi Stephen,

          You may want to remake the bullet points on this page Hydrogen Gas Saver into headlines or at least make the font size bigger. I mean those questions marked with 1), 2) etc. It will be much easier to scan them.

          But overall - great job. And by the way - I'd seen your site on the Net one day when I did some research about this whole save gas thing!:-)

          Rgds,

          Robert
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          • Profile picture of the author Michael Dominic
            I think everything looks pretty good. As for your writiing, I think it's decent. Keep writing and doing research about this particular niche. Knowledge will make everything flow better.
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  • Profile picture of the author SunTzu82
    Try working on your prose a little. Some of your sentences run on, and your writing is erratic. It feels like you're speaking at me and not to me, but other than that it seems like you have some good information to offer.
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    • Profile picture of the author Anthony Robinson
      Stephen,

      I agree with SunTzu, your writing style and/or prose needs some work. Your article doesn't seem to flow very well. If you want some real help on this, check out Steven Wagenheim. He's a fellow warrior and has some excellent products on article writing. Site looks good, sorry to hear your mom's not doing well.
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