Please Critique my first ever made sales page

The graphics and general layout of this sales page look great. However, the English used in the text is not of a high standard and detracts from the overall appeal of the sales page. Here is an example:


For those who have English as a first language, this copy reads poorly. The rest of text on this page is of much the same standard.

As you are targeting the English-speaking countries, to present such copy is like entering a foot race and shooting yourself in the foot at the start.

There are a number of claims on this page indicating that fluency with English is common in the Philippines. However, the copy does not support this. As well, if the copy is not of a good standard, this indicates to the reader the low standard of work that can be expected from this source. This is a particular concern when the product being offered is an outsourcing service.

Fortunately, there is an easy remedy - simply get an experienced and competent proof reader or editor to check the text on your sales page before it goes "live". Better still, employ a good copywriter.

The presentation would then look much more professional.

Ivan