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Please Critique My Sales Page

by Kash
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Could someone please critique my sales page? It is linked through the 'Recommended' menu on the blog in my sig file and throughout many posts.....

Thanks
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  • Profile picture of the author artwebster
    Well, it is long, it never seems to get to the point and lost my interest within a few lines. Anabolic shotgun - sounds like a multi tipped hypodermic solution to me although it is claimed to be drug free.

    Try telling it the way it is - a long sales letter like this won't work unless you are aiming it at the tiny part of the market that reads and buys the latest releases.
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  • Profile picture of the author ken_p
    hi there,
    i took a look at your page, and i think that the content is ok. its just the layout and design of the page that needs more work. its sort of giving me the unfinished feeling..:-)
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    • Profile picture of the author Zack Lim
      Hi Kash,

      You might want to improve the layout and design of the page so that it will looks more professional. Look at your competitor's website which is selling well and you can model after their layouts.

      I will feel that the best thing that you can do is to drive some targeted traffic to your website and track the sales conversion. Test it and you will know the results.

      Hope my humble contribution helps

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  • Profile picture of the author Michael Franklin
    Hi Kash,

    Good start! It just needs some polishing.

    Be sure to split test your sales page at all times.

    Create two versions of your sales page and set it up so that only one variable is different. Then, after you see a clear cut winner, change another variable to try and improve your opt in percentage even further and keept split testing.

    Three things before you start split testing:

    1) Put your Headline ("Warningersonal Trainers...) on top. Also the letters are crowding into each other.

    2) Work on trimming some of the text in your copy. Your sub-points are good but try not to have so much text in between the sub-points.

    3) Try to get some testimonials from current customers and place them throughout your sales page.

    Good Luck!
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  • Profile picture of the author zulfnore
    In agreement with the above responses I would like to add this: Font type doesn't do it for me.

    Consider reducing the length of the sales letter and change the font type to either Verdana or Arial - Your font ype is Times New Roman and is not a choice I would go with for a sales letter.
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  • Profile picture of the author Kash
    thanks for the tips. It's my first shot at it, but I'll be tweaking everything =)
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