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Implemented suggestions - please review

by KristieDean
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Hi guys,
I implemented many of the suggestions that were made on my sales page. I have two sites I'd like you to look at just to see which one you do like best. Thanks again for your help! As a coach, I've really benefited from your marketing help.

Here they are:
Reformat Your Life1
or
Reformat Your Life2

If you could just tell me if you like 1 or 2 more it would really help. Thanks again.

Kristie
#implemented #review #suggestions
  • Profile picture of the author AEC
    Hi Kristie,

    Personally I liked #1 the best.
    I thought the colors were a bit more pleasing to the eye and I liked the header on that one the best. Seems more personal to me when the picture of the person is looking at you and smiling.
    I liked the new year special price too.
    That is my opinions for what they are worth.
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  • Profile picture of the author JustinP
    I vote for #1
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  • Profile picture of the author scortillion
    Number 1 is better, but here’s a little suggestion. Widen your page. That will get more of your material above the fold, and more material on the persons screen so they don’t have to scroll. If your visitor has to do ANYTHING you may lose them.

    Also work on your main heading too. Try to make it something that has a hook in it, something that makes me want to read more. Right now I look at it and have no need to read more, make me want to find out more about what your main heading is saying to me. Also pick out one or two words and highlight them or underline them to draw my attention, make these words pull me into the rest of your page.

    Hope this is helpful.

    Over all GREAT improvement over the first draft! Way to go.
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  • Profile picture of the author scortillion
    Something like this:

    Escape Your Deadend Life!
    9 Steps To Transform Yourself Into the Person You Were Meant To Be!

    Try to use a number, like 7, 9, 11, or 21, avoid those ending in 0 or 5. See this want's me to find out what those 9 steps are. And don't worry about offending someone with the Deadend Life comment. Those are the people you want!

    This is just a suggestion... come up with a few headings and run a poll and see what those on WF think of them...

    Good luck
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  • Profile picture of the author masterofinternate
    Hey Kristie,
    Visited in both but I also go for #1.This seems better.Try to pay more attention on these two.You can find a brilliant result.
    Wish you all the best.
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    • Profile picture of the author Fino
      I liked #1 best
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    my vote is for #1
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  • Profile picture of the author Jason Carter
    Hi,

    I would try and build some credibility into the headline.

    Example. . .

    Famous life coach Kristie Dean who has helped over 1.200 people transform their lives can show you how to start living your dream life . . . starting right now!

    Later,
    Jason
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  • Profile picture of the author KristieDean
    Originally Posted by KristieDean View Post

    Hi guys,
    I implemented many of the suggestions that were made on my sales page. I have two sites I'd like you to look at just to see which one you do like best. Thanks again for your help! As a coach, I've really benefited from your marketing help.

    Here they are:
    Reformat Your Life1
    or
    Reformat Your Life2

    If you could just tell me if you like 1 or 2 more it would really help. Thanks again.

    Kristie
    Those were some great suggestions guys! Sorry it took me so long to respond; I've been marketing the book on Facebook and got caught up in it.

    My head is swimming with the great ideas, and I'm about to go try to implement them! Thanks again.
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  • Profile picture of the author KristieDean
    I made several of the changes that you suggested! Thank you so much.
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  • Profile picture of the author JasonTai
    Number 1 pulled me in more. The color layout of number 2 put me off.
    Although the picture of the man facing away near the bottom of the screen seemed like a very stock photo and almost felt more added into your site then part of it. Maybe try to find something that is more you. In a way you are selling yourself not only your product.
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    • Profile picture of the author Michael Shook
      Is it really going to be 17 dollars for only the next 48 hours?

      If that is not the case, perhaps some other scarcity tactic might better serve the veracity of your sales page.
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      • Profile picture of the author KristieDean
        Originally Posted by JMichaelZ View Post

        Is it really going to be 17 dollars for only the next 48 hours?

        If that is not the case, perhaps some other scarcity tactic might better serve the veracity of your sales page.
        As of right now, it is. Once the site goes officially "live" I plan to run the special for 48 hours, although I might lower the price to that. What other scarcity tactic would you suggest? Thanks!
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        • Profile picture of the author Michael Shook
          Originally Posted by KristieDean View Post

          As of right now, it is. Once the site goes officially "live" I plan to run the special for 48 hours, although I might lower the price to that. What other scarcity tactic would you suggest? Thanks!

          Sorry, I did not realize it was not live. If its not live, then there is no issue with it and that will work fine.

          I am not a super believer in scarcity tactics online, unless it is something like

          "Get your copy now, while the price is still only $xx.xx"

          That could work out for a product that is always live.
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          • Profile picture of the author KristieDean
            Originally Posted by JMichaelZ View Post

            Sorry, I did not realize it was not live. If its not live, then there is no issue with it and that will work fine.

            I am not a super believer in scarcity tactics online, unless it is something like

            "Get your copy now, while the price is still only .xx"

            That could work out for a product that is always live.
            I really like that! I may change it to that. Thanks!!
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    • Profile picture of the author KristieDean
      Originally Posted by JasonTai View Post

      Number 1 pulled me in more. The color layout of number 2 put me off.
      Although the picture of the man facing away near the bottom of the screen seemed like a very stock photo and almost felt more added into your site then part of it. Maybe try to find something that is more you. In a way you are selling yourself not only your product.
      The photo is of a real person. And the other picture is of me. So, I'm not sure which picture you are talking about (unless it was the book cover?)
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