Selling mobile sites [cool report]

newuser_2 · 2nd Oct 2011, 08:26 AM

I just made this report last night. I will be calling up more business owners and telling them that I just emailed them some useful information regarding their business.

I would like to get some feedback on this before I start using this:
Mobile website report

*This report is like a presell to business owners, where I am getting them to understand the value of having a mobile site.

Also, let me know what you think of this video:

Mobile Website: Why your business needs it -...

Hackbridge · 2nd Oct 2011, 11:10 AM

I saw the video for Google Ads which is interesting, but when I read some more it's a brief couple of paragraphs. Is that the report?

Thanks

Brian

deum · 2nd Oct 2011, 12:06 PM

hi im a bit confuse here!

you are mobithinking.com or google or youre trying to sell mobile to clients?

Im actually launching a new mobile division as well as an advertising plateform so we may exchange "nice to know" infos!

Yann L. Trebaol MBA, LLB
Y.Trebaol@elookmedia.ca

For those of you who are interested in mobile design and services, that will be a pleasure to answer your questions.

frujid · 2nd Oct 2011, 01:01 PM

Originally Posted by Hackbridge

I saw the video for Google Ads which is interesting, but when I read some more it's a brief couple of paragraphs. Is that the report?

Thanks

Brian

The full report is the link at the bottom that says "Continue reading here" and takes you to another page with mobile content. I think it gets to the point of what your trying to achieve, but I would also add your phone number at the end so the client doesn't have to search for it. They may want to contact you right away after reading (if its not in your signature).

I would also give them a call immediately once it was sent out. Good work.

WillR · 2nd Oct 2011, 08:33 PM

For me this 'report' does not really grab my attention if I were a business owner. The very first headline should be something that immediately pulls the reader in. "Upgrading Your Business With Smart Phones" is a very weak headline in that it does NOT include any benefit of having a mobile site or any disadvantage of not having a mobile site. A good headline should focus on the main advantage, disadvantage, or both and should really hit them hard and make them want to continue reading on.

I also think the video is a little cheesy if you are trying to present yourself as a professional business. Also the design of the webpage is far too simple. Remember you are trying to sell someone web design - if they see this page they are not going to be too confident in your web design skills. First impressions count massively. If you were a professional suit salesmen would you turn up to work in shorts and a t-shirt?

I like the comparison of the regular and mobile sites together, personally I would put them side by side and then beneath I would use a list of bullet points that explain the advantages of having the mobile optimized website available for mobile users.

TJ Rose · 2nd Oct 2011, 11:25 PM

Please tell me you don't show businesses that video you posted.

KyleGolemMedia · 2nd Oct 2011, 11:37 PM

Originally Posted by TJ Rose

Please tell me you don't show businesses that video you posted.

I agree with TJ here. I wouldn't think it to be very professional or positive to show this to a business owner.

newuser_2 · 3rd Oct 2011, 06:22 AM

No worries I am not showing that video to business owners, for I just wanted some opinions on it.

To me though its unprofessional the information he's presenting is right on.

gacott · 4th Oct 2011, 10:48 AM

Tough crowd, I liked the video.

Garret

Ricardo-Acosta · 5th Oct 2011, 04:25 PM

the information on your video is fine its just the image you portray is not a business friendly one, so I say keep the info change the image of your self to a more professional one (not a suit and tie ) and you should be good to go

midasman09 · 5th Oct 2011, 05:17 PM

Too many Stats....not enough of..."what's in it for me"!

Ya gotta GRAB EM....tell em QUICKLY....WHY they should continue watching (benefits to them) and....HOW they can get in touch with you to get what you're offering!

Just my opinion.

Don Alm...."professional Attention Grabber from waay back"

EvanBeck · 7th Oct 2011, 02:47 PM

Originally Posted by gacott

Tough crowd, I liked the video.

Garret

Very tough, but that is probably OK. Lots of experienced people in this forum, but yes...brutally honest.

EvanBeck · 7th Oct 2011, 02:51 PM

Originally Posted by newuser_2

I just made this report last night. I will be calling up more business owners and telling them that I just emailed them some useful information regarding their business.

I would like to get some feedback on this before I start using this:
Mobile website report

*This report is like a presell to business owners, where I am getting them to understand the value of having a mobile site.

Also, let me know what you think of this video: Mobile Website: Why your business needs it - YouTube

The points in the video are all very good. I think the presentation style is what people are discussing.

TWalker · 7th Oct 2011, 04:26 PM

The video content and message itself is great. A majority of business owners would not take serious a guy with a big orange cap on sideways.

But having said that it would depend on your target market as well. There are markets that wear big orange sideways caps.

:-)

xtirpata · 7th Oct 2011, 04:38 PM

Yes, the video content's OK, it's the presentation that's a bit too wacky, IMHO.

I think you need to be taken seriously and they might think that you're the guy in the hat!

(

are you?)

trumpador · 7th Oct 2011, 07:26 PM

Content is decent. Presentation style...well maybe in the US but here in Oz, I doubt you'd get many leads with the style of the vid.

You can be quirky, fun yet still be professional. As an example Epipheo Studios creates vids that are educational, fun and professional. Not that I'd expect vids like those, but I merely point out the style of their vids.

I note, that you have already changed your headline to state what they will get from your service. This is good.

Also, the vid makes an assumption that your audience knows about and uses GA. From the start, I thought the vid was talking to biz owners who want a mobile site etc.

Ps. I'm a n00b in Warrior Forum so take my comment with a pinch of salt.

deum · 7th Oct 2011, 07:51 PM

Pretty funny and witty

lots of good content

good potential on youtube

Mobileico · 9th Oct 2011, 03:00 PM

30 year old man in a cap turned sideways, t-shirt, graffiti...when talking about serious money from a serious client, what's not to love about this video? if you want to sell to skateboard shops or hip hoppers, this video is perfect. Honestly, it won't work for the majority. Hopefully you will be the voice behind why should they buy from you. The video should be more professional that's more pleasant to view. I really felt that the guy had a good message, very true, and I think other than the graffiti, his special effects were great. I believe he just missed an important mark; business owners don't want missed marks, they want information and inspiration. Here is a better video on YouTube that you could probably use -

Mobile Technology 2011 - clean version - YouTube

. take care of yourself and great luck

Technology · 9th Oct 2011, 03:57 PM

I agree the message is decent, but that is about it!

InternetJon · 9th Oct 2011, 04:50 PM

Originally Posted by Mobileico

30 year old man in a cap turned sideways, t-shirt, graffiti...when talking about serious money from a serious client, what's not to love about this video? if you want to sell to skateboard shops or hip hoppers, this video is perfect. Honestly, it won't work for the majority. Hopefully you will be the voice behind why should they buy from you. The video should be more professional that's more pleasant to view. I really felt that the guy had a good message, very true, and I think other than the graffiti, his special effects were great. I believe he just missed an important mark; business owners don't want missed marks, they want information and inspiration. Here is a better video on YouTube that you could probably use - Mobile Technology 2011 - clean version - YouTube. take care of yourself and great luck

Hah, I've seen this video before. I'm happy to know they made a clean version, the last one had a very harsh way of explaining what happens to you on Mt. Everest.

Mobileico · 9th Oct 2011, 10:43 PM

@InternetJon. yeah, I know right. I had to be careful what I shared. It's funny how that one four letter word can be so effective as to keep people from watching the rest of the video or wanting your services.

2nd Oct 2011, 11:10 AM	#2
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deum MOBILE MANIAC Join Date: 2011 Location: Montreal - Toronto - CANADA Posts: 59 Thanks: 4 Thanked 4 Times in 4 Posts	Re: Selling mobile sites [cool report] Share on: hi im a bit confuse here! you are mobithinking.com or google or youre trying to sell mobile to clients? Im actually launching a new mobile division as well as an advertising plateform so we may exchange "nice to know" infos! Yann L. Trebaol MBA, LLB Y.Trebaol@elookmedia.ca For those of you who are interested in mobile design and services, that will be a pleasure to answer your questions.

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WillR Digital Marketer War Room Member Join Date: 2010 Location: Australia Posts: 12,475 Thanks: 1,984 Thanked 8,187 Times in 4,079 Posts	Re: Selling mobile sites [cool report] Share on: For me this 'report' does not really grab my attention if I were a business owner. The very first headline should be something that immediately pulls the reader in. "Upgrading Your Business With Smart Phones" is a very weak headline in that it does NOT include any benefit of having a mobile site or any disadvantage of not having a mobile site. A good headline should focus on the main advantage, disadvantage, or both and should really hit them hard and make them want to continue reading on. I also think the video is a little cheesy if you are trying to present yourself as a professional business. Also the design of the webpage is far too simple. Remember you are trying to sell someone web design - if they see this page they are not going to be too confident in your web design skills. First impressions count massively. If you were a professional suit salesmen would you turn up to work in shorts and a t-shirt? I like the comparison of the regular and mobile sites together, personally I would put them side by side and then beneath I would use a list of bullet points that explain the advantages of having the mobile optimized website available for mobile users.
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newuser_2 barnett War Room Member Join Date: 2009 Posts: 66 Thanks: 14 Thanked 7 Times in 3 Posts	Re: Selling mobile sites [cool report] Share on: No worries I am not showing that video to business owners, for I just wanted some opinions on it. To me though its unprofessional the information he's presenting is right on.
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Ricardo-Acosta Ricardo Acosta War Room Member Join Date: 2009 Posts: 69 Thanks: 72 Thanked 9 Times in 9 Posts	Re: Selling mobile sites [cool report] Share on: the information on your video is fine its just the image you portray is not a business friendly one, so I say keep the info change the image of your self to a more professional one (not a suit and tie ) and you should be good to go

5th Oct 2011, 05:17 PM	#11
midasman09 Banned Join Date: 2009 Posts: 1,279 Thanks: 7 Thanked 1,525 Times in 531 Posts	Re: Selling mobile sites [cool report] Share on: Too many Stats....not enough of..."what's in it for me"! Ya gotta GRAB EM....tell em QUICKLY....WHY they should continue watching (benefits to them) and....HOW they can get in touch with you to get what you're offering! Just my opinion. Don Alm...."professional Attention Grabber from waay back"

7th Oct 2011, 04:26 PM	#14
TWalker HyperActive Warrior War Room Member Join Date: 2010 Posts: 316 Thanks: 39 Thanked 48 Times in 31 Posts	Re: Selling mobile sites [cool report] Share on: The video content and message itself is great. A majority of business owners would not take serious a guy with a big orange cap on sideways. But having said that it would depend on your target market as well. There are markets that wear big orange sideways caps. :-)

7th Oct 2011, 04:38 PM	#15
xtirpata Active Warrior Join Date: 2007 Location: Australia Posts: 51 Thanks: 21 Thanked 11 Times in 8 Posts	Re: Selling mobile sites [cool report] Share on: Yes, the video content's OK, it's the presentation that's a bit too wacky, IMHO. I think you need to be taken seriously and they might think that you're the guy in the hat! ( are you?)

7th Oct 2011, 07:26 PM	#16
trumpador Active Warrior Join Date: 2011 Posts: 48 Thanks: 17 Thanked 9 Times in 6 Posts	Re: Selling mobile sites [cool report] Share on: Content is decent. Presentation style...well maybe in the US but here in Oz, I doubt you'd get many leads with the style of the vid. You can be quirky, fun yet still be professional. As an example Epipheo Studios creates vids that are educational, fun and professional. Not that I'd expect vids like those, but I merely point out the style of their vids. I note, that you have already changed your headline to state what they will get from your service. This is good. Also, the vid makes an assumption that your audience knows about and uses GA. From the start, I thought the vid was talking to biz owners who want a mobile site etc. Ps. I'm a n00b in Warrior Forum so take my comment with a pinch of salt.
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7th Oct 2011, 07:51 PM	#17
deum MOBILE MANIAC Join Date: 2011 Location: Montreal - Toronto - CANADA Posts: 59 Thanks: 4 Thanked 4 Times in 4 Posts	Re: Selling mobile sites [cool report] Share on: Pretty funny and witty lots of good content good potential on youtube

9th Oct 2011, 03:57 PM	#19
Technology Banned Join Date: 2011 Posts: 29 Thanks: 4 Thanked 6 Times in 6 Posts	Re: Selling mobile sites [cool report] Share on: I agree the message is decent, but that is about it!

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