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need help - is this a good salespage?

by djrico01
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hi there,

i have written an ebook that i want to sell, of course
i have created a salespage hosted @
Code:
best-homepage-ever.com
is this a good site and will it sell something?

need your opinion!

thanks in advance
  • Profile picture of the author amaechi007
    I strongly suggest you do more work on your sales page. It got me clicking the delete button sooo fast.
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  • Profile picture of the author WD Mino
    You need to rework this big time,

    your headline is telling me nothing except your gonna make me money-how?

    You have your guarantee at the top which should be down. your order button is way up so they can buy immediately but still have no idea what they are buying just that it costs 1.95 but you have a comma in the place of the period 1,95 which should be 1.95

    You guarantee your going to make me money. Um ok why? if your maing money why help me to ?

    My overall impression of this sales page is no way I buy and I am left questioning at 1.95 how valuable could it possibly be sounds fishy to me .

    -WD
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  • Profile picture of the author n1c3m4n
    just try it.. better try than didn't do anything
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  • Profile picture of the author sgboston23
    Warning - This site redirected me automatically, not sure if it was a scam/spyware related or what - but don't click, and possibly ban OP.
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  • Profile picture of the author HealthBuff
    We always need to start some where. Good on you for starting.

    Yes the site does need a bit of polishing.

    $1,95 is not a common way of expressing monetary value on the net.
    It looks odd.

    Check out The W3C Markup Validation Service
    and get your coding straight.

    With best wishes in your endeavours.
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  • Profile picture of the author Sumit Menon
    Here's my thought:

    It's not a sales copy. It's barely a squeeze page. Write a longer one. Probably start with a story on how you struggled to make money online.

    Your product doesn't have a name! Decide on a name and get a matching domain. The current domain doesn't make sense.

    The order button should be in the centre of the page.

    The headline is wrong english. And it does not describe your product.

    You don't have bullets. The copy doesn't mention any of your product benefits. It does not even mention what techniques you are gonna use.

    Like the guys above said, it's 1.95$ not 1,95$.

    So, to sum it up, you have a lot of work to do on the copy.

    Sumit.
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  • Profile picture of the author jessharv
    Hi djrico01:

    Sgboston23 was right. I got redirected too. Honestly, after skimming through the first line, I wanted to get off that page but got redirected instead. Also, it is really short and not getting to the point of what is going on. Are you trying to sell something? Well, just look around at others that are trying to sell the same thing you are, look for the most successful ones and duplicate. Don't try to reinvent the wheel. Anyway, good luck and never give up.
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