article is good or not ?

by rain21

Posted: 12 years ago 10 replies

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I wrote an article. Someone said me it is very bad. Can any one read it and tell me whether it is very bad or not ? any comment ?

here is the place I wrote the article (my blog)... Im not going to post it here because it has about 500 words. Please note that, I'm not trying to get any visitor to my site by doing this. Just want to know the quality of the article.

Tiger Airways Singapore

Joseph Robinson Banned 12 years ago

If it is meant to target the English speaking market then yes, it is very bad I'm afraid.
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rain21 12 years ago

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thanks for the input
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- MissTerraK 12 years ago
  
  I'm sorry, but your very first sentence sets the pace of the whole article which isn't good English usage at all.
  
  Before several days I travelled from China to Singapore...
  
  Traveled is misspelled and I think what you were trying to say was, "Several days ago I traveled to Singapore..."
  
  I'm afraid I didn't read much more than that as it was an awkward read.
  
  If you are targeting an English speaking market, I recommend you have it rewritten by a native English speaker.
  
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  Kay King 12 years ago
  
  I read the entire article - and, no, I don't think it's bad at all for what you are targeting.
  
  Isn't Tiger airline an Asian based company? The English has some errors - but the content of the article is good and the information is well presented.
  
  If you are targeting the Asian visitor who can read English - I think the writing is fine to use. If I'm right and this is an Asian company - you aren't targeting the U.S. anyway...so perfect grammatical English is not necessary.
  
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  Joseph Robinson Banned 12 years ago
  
  Originally Posted by MissTerraK
  
  Traveled is misspelled
  
  In American English, yes. British English adds another "l".
  
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  MissTerraK 12 years ago
  
  Originally Posted by Joseph Robinson
  
  In American English, yes. British English adds another "l".
  
  While that is true, I saw no other words in the article indicating British English was being spoken.
  
  Over and beyond that, as Kay suggests, if it is targeting English speaking Asians, it really doesn't matter.
  
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  Joseph Robinson Banned 12 years ago
  
  Originally Posted by MissTerraK
  
  While that is true, I saw no other words in the article indicating British English was being spoken.
  
  Not splitting hairs over it, just pointing out that it is not a black/white situation. The OP can verify which standard of English is taught in Russia better than I can.
  
  Originally Posted by MissTerraK
  
  Over and beyond that, as Kay suggests, if it is targeting English speaking Asians, it really doesn't matter.
  
  Terra
  
  Then why mention it at all ?
  
  Also:
  Anecdotal Evidence Claiming British
  Conflicting anecdotal evidence stating both are used (probably what OP was subjected to)
  
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  MissTerraK 12 years ago
  
  Originally Posted by Joseph Robinson
  
  Then why mention it at all ?
  
  Because when I did, I hadn't thought of it yet. I only thought of it after Kay posted.
  
  Ouch! I felt you splitting my hairs. :p
  
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rain21 12 years ago

thanks every 1 for reading my article and give me some valuable comments . Yes, the article targets the Asian community and wanted to share some of my previous experiences with others.

someone said, I used very simple English. But I wonder why I should use very complex English for the articles since all readers are not native English speakers. By the way next time need to care more about writing. Thanks all for the quick reviews. Appreciate that very much.
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rain21 12 years ago

I think English in Russia is a mix of both US and UK. So people speak as they prefer. However I studied in UK for masters, 2 years. My professors didn't tell me that my English is a mix of both.
I did the dissertation last year and got a credit. Unluckily couldn't go for a Distinction.
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