Critique my direct mail copy!
How: We take their merchant processing in exchange for putting them in a local co-op mailer. The merchant processing (credit card processing) company pays us, and we use a portion of those revenues to get their offers out. Earns more than collecting checks and it's a great foot in the door for the other services we offer.
Inspiration: EWEN MACK!!! THANK YOU FOR SHARING YOUR GENIUS!
Goal: To get them to call in. I do not want them e-mailing or even visiting the site until they have called in first.
Copy:
You do not think that spending money to be featured next to your competitors makes much sense.If you answered yes to any of the questions above, you might be interested in speaking with me about turning one of those annoying monthly bills into a money maker.
You are not excited about shelling out the cash but feel like you must in order to stay competitive.
You think that spending a ton of money to get people in waving coupons for steep discounts is slightly absurd.
You think the only real winners on these deals are the people who cash the checks you write to them.
You are open to other options as long as they do not cost you any money.
Call me and I will walk you through the process of getting your offers into 10,000 to 50,000 local mailboxes without spending any money, and without the presence of your competition.
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