Judge my ad

by Fitnessfreak158

Posted: 9 years ago 16 replies

OFFLINE MARKETING

So i've been getting reps into my business mostly through postcard marketing and other advertising. But have not been able to come up with one for just a product postcard.

I ended up writing this a few minutes ago it's kind of jumbled but can you give me your options on it?

Hello! We are currently seeking individuals across the USA who are interested in putting a wide variety of environmentally safe products into their homes.

Our products are safer for yourself, your home, the environment and cost less then what you could buy at the store.

If you would like to learn more about our products Please call Andrew @ phone number. We also would like to offer you a free catalog when you call.

By the way: Did I mention we pay you when you refer people to our products no supermarket does that only we do.

So don't wait and call now to learn more.

I was thinking of sending this to either catalog buyers or wellness and health seekers.

Give me your options please?

#adverters #judge #postcard

ewenmack

9 years ago

It will be easier for me to help you
the most by giving you this to model...

http://www.ecowasher.com/uploads/2/3..._2014_v3-4.pdf

Best,
Doctor E. Vile

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bizgrower

9 years ago

Originally Posted by ewenmack

It will be easier for me to help you
the most by giving you this to model...

http://www.ecowasher.com/uploads/2/3..._2014_v3-4.pdf

Best,
Doctor E. Vile

Small world. Great minds. Julius Toth wrote the Ecowasher piece and he's Claude's mentor I guess you could say...
http://www.warriorforum.com/offline-...l#post10326434

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Fitnessfreak158

9 years ago

Thank you guys i think i'm going to hire a copywriter for this one. Anyone know any good copywriters who have done product ads for postcards in the past and are familiar with the MLM industry?

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Ron Lafuddy

9 years ago

Originally Posted by Fitnessfreak158

Thank you guys i think i'm going to hire a copywriter for this one. Anyone know any good copywriters who have done product ads for postcards in the past and are familiar with the MLM industry?

What products?

Oh, that's right, you never said.

Guess it's not important, eh?

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macatum 8 years ago

everyone see the same problem for this article =)

Originally Posted by Ron Lafuddy

What products?

Oh, that's right, you never said.

Guess it's not important, eh?
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ewenmack

9 years ago

Originally Posted by Fitnessfreak158

Thank you guys i think i'm going to hire a copywriter for this one. Anyone know any good copywriters who have done product ads for postcards in the past and are familiar with the MLM industry?

Good move.

Make sure the copywriter gets you the right list,
as it's super important.

Talks you through the the right call to action.
It could be a recorded message that leads to
the next step.

Gives you the script for the recorded message.

Gives you the phone script when talking
one to one.

All this so it becomes a natural flow
for the prospects to come in and automate
as much of it as possible.

Best,
Doctor E. Vile

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Ron Lafuddy

9 years ago

Originally Posted by bizgrower

Small world. Great minds. Julius Toth wrote the Ecowasher piece and he's Claude's mentor I guess you could say...

Remarkable coincidence wouldn't you say?

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bizgrower

9 years ago

Originally Posted by Ron Lafuddy

Remarkable coincidence wouldn't you say?

Yes, sir. With Ewen being in New Zealand and Claude being in Ohio and just mentioning Julius now.
Dan

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Oziboomer

9 years ago

Originally Posted by bizgrower

Yes, sir. With Ewen being in New Zealand and Claude being in Ohio and just mentioning Julius now.
Dan

You'd be surprised with those inter webs things.

You know the bat phone?

Well good authority has it that all the cool people have these special communication devices and we all are networked everywhere.

NZ....OHIO.....OZ....ICELAND....NEW YORK....AIR FORCE ONE

Most of us don't even have to speak anymore....

...we just channel each other's thoughts.

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bizgrower

9 years ago

Originally Posted by Oziboomer

All research, techniques, and equipment funded by the "cost overruns" for the US Healthcare website.
You're not supposed to know about Air Force One, it's top secret outside the US.

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Claude Whitacre

8 years ago

Originally Posted by ewenmack

It will be easier for me to help you
the most by giving you this to model...

http://www.ecowasher.com/uploads/2/3..._2014_v3-4.pdf

Best,
Doctor E. Vile

Julius Toth went from being the single greatest retail vacuum cleaner salesman in the country, to being the single largest Eco Quest Air Purifier distributor in the world, to being a premier copywriter.

He's a true force of nature. And mad as a hatter. I'm honored to be his good friend. And he's honored to be mine.

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macatum

8 years ago

This article is really good.
I think the author should be more clear in his post. If you want to keep in secret your prodcts than the srticle should be short, if you want to explain everythong to your customer that it should be longer with more wide explonations.

Originally Posted by Claude Whitacre

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yukon

Banned 9 years ago

Originally Posted by Fitnessfreak158

Hello! We are currently seeking individuals across the USA who are interested in putting a wide variety of environmentally safe products into their homes.

Who is we?
Individuals? It reads like there's no support system.
USA? Reads like you're personally located in India. Niche it down to a more specific GEO location.
Environmentally safe products? A tree is environmentally safe, are you selling trees?

Originally Posted by Fitnessfreak158

Our products are safer for yourself, your home, the environment and cost less then what you could buy at the store.

Our products are safer for yourself? Safer than what, bottle rockets?
Cost less then what you could buy at the store? Less than what? What store, Dollar General?

Originally Posted by Fitnessfreak158

If you would like to learn more about our products Please call Andrew @ phone number. We also would like to offer you a free catalog when you call.

If you would like to learn more about our products? What products? Be specific or let traffic keep guessing.
We also would like to offer you a free catalog? What's in the catalog, fishing worms?

Originally Posted by Fitnessfreak158

By the way: Did I mention we pay you when you refer people to our products no supermarket does that only we do.

We pay you when you refer people to our products? Which products, trees or fishing worms?
No supermarket does that only we do? Try a Google search for Amway.

Originally Posted by Fitnessfreak158

So don't wait and call now to learn more.

So don't wait and call now to learn more? Learn more about what, trees or fishing worms?

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outlawdawg 9 years ago

I think your original rough draft was a good place to start. However, it was very general and left some things up for interpretation. Hiring a writer would be a great idea (a local college may have a student that would do it for cheap).
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- ewenmack 9 years ago
  
  Originally Posted by outlawdawg
  
  (a local college may have a student that would do it for cheap).
  
  Ouch!
  
  Interesting your first instinct is go for cheap.
  
  Best,
  Doctor E. Vile
  
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DWolfe 9 years ago

You may want to look around this section of the forum. Copywriting . And see if you can find a good copywriter. Take your time to avoid hiring the wrong copywriter. Try to stay away from cheap copy writers, like some one posted above. Cheap may cost you more in the long run.
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