Can't decide which flyer to go with!

by Alexbarber 61 replies
Hello all! I'm new to this forum and came here looking for your professional opinions. I'm stuck on which flyer to go with. I would like Your opinions and will take ANY criticism. I came here because I believe and trust everyone here knows (or has a close idea lol) what works and what doesn't.

Here's the two proofs. Please note that there will be 2 runs for these flyers. The first (below) will be for attention only and the second run flyers will be modified with a grand opening date, special offers and a coupon.




Please I need your input on these as we need to get these printed asap!

Thanks in advance!



Alex
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  • Profile picture of the author Damien Brock
    easy. Second one
  • Profile picture of the author animal44
    Neither have anything to say why I should change my Barber... or even take the trouble of trying you out.

    Where's your compelling offer...?
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    • Profile picture of the author Alexbarber
      Thanks for replying. Good question and point! There will be 2 rounds of flyers. 1st round is just for attention and 2nd round will have a grand opening date and $5 off coupon . With that aside.. which one of the two would you prefer?

      Thanks in advance,

      Alex
  • Profile picture of the author SARubin
    OK, If you're gonna force me to choose between the two... I guess I'd pick #2

    The cartoon characters add a little cuteness, and personality. (and the cuteness is good, because you've got Al standing there with his cap on backwards, high top shoes, and a straight razor in his hands. And if it wasn't a cartoon, you'd probably be scaring people away )

    Also, your pre-headline could be more compelling. I think I get what you're trying to say, with the "independently owned" and "local neighborhood barber" angle.

    But neither one is making much of an offer, or solidly calling out your target audience. So in this case I'd say the shorter one is better.
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    • Profile picture of the author Alexbarber
      I REALLY appreciate your feedback! When you say you prefer the "shorter one " I assume you're referring to the headline? With regards to offers/ calling out target audience, this is the first run of flyers and it's going to be for attention only. On the second run of flyers were going to add pricing,hours, grand opening specials/ offers along with a coupon.

      Thanks again for your input it really helps a lot!!

      Alex
  • Profile picture of the author Oziboomer
    In both examples you are failing to use the real estate on the flyer.

    Any graphic artist will always stroke your ego by giving you a design where the business name and other business info is the most prominent.

    The only thing going for either is the end result photographs.

    If someone wants a cut like the photo they may be interested.

    Why would you waste valuable paper and distribution costs on an exercise promoting your ego?

    Think about calling out to people who want a haircut.

    "Hey Goldie, Are your locks looking dreadful?"

    "Want to change your look?"

    Anything to call out to people looking for a new cut.

    If you are going to make an offer don't waste a mailing or distribution without a solid offer from the first go.

    You will just waste money if you think it's cool to distribute something without an offer.

    There are three vital components you must consider.

    You need to find the right target market.

    You need a solid headline.

    You need a solid offer.

    If you think wasting a lot of space on BRANDING when you are new is a good idea then ignore my comments.

    When I started in business I could have put my business name as the biggest thing in all my signage and promotion but my name wasn't known.

    Instead I called out to the prospects.

    "Looking for a picture frame?"

    "Is your home picture-poor?"

    Once known you can do the fun stuff and ego stroking.

    When unknown the primary purpose of any communication is to get customers to come and try you out.

    I'd think carefully about the cost of printing and distribution.

    If I was a new barber I'd be offering FREE Haircuts.

    I'd be offering a prize for the person who shed the most locks.

    I'd be promoting to WOMEN who want their man to look good.

    Tell me....are you more likely to look at a picture of a guy with a hot girl running her fingers through his hair or some photos of guys sitting in the chair?

    Why do you think every rap video has hot women, hot cars, money, gold, jewellery etc?

    I wouldn't be doing the obvious things you are thinking.

    Best regards,

    Ozi
    • Profile picture of the author Alexbarber
      Very good and solid points! I can assure you this flyer has NOTHING to do with ego, but if that's how we're coming off then we got some rethinking to do! So question for you and everyone for that matter... Let's forget about the content for a moment and I want to hear what you think about the cartoon graphic. Please advise if we should go with or without and why?

      Thanks so much, this means a lot!!

      Alex
    • Profile picture of the author Ian Jackson
      Originally Posted by Oziboomer View Post

      In both examples you are failing to use the real estate on the flyer.

      Any graphic artist will always stroke your ego by giving you a design where the business name and other business info is the most prominent.

      The only thing going for either is the end result photographs.

      If someone wants a cut like the photo they may be interested.

      Why would you waste valuable paper and distribution costs on an exercise promoting your ego?

      Think about calling out to people who want a haircut.

      "Hey Goldie, Are your locks looking dreadful?"

      "Want to change your look?"

      Anything to call out to people looking for a new cut.

      If you are going to make an offer don't waste a mailing or distribution without a solid offer from the first go.

      You will just waste money if you think it's cool to distribute something without an offer.

      There are three vital components you must consider.

      You need to find the right target market.

      You need a solid headline.

      You need a solid offer.

      If you think wasting a lot of space on BRANDING when you are new is a good idea then ignore my comments.

      When I started in business I could have put my business name as the biggest thing in all my signage and promotion but my name wasn't known.

      Instead I called out to the prospects.

      "Looking for a picture frame?"

      "Is your home picture-poor?"

      Once known you can do the fun stuff and ego stroking.

      When unknown the primary purpose of any communication is to get customers to come and try you out.

      I'd think carefully about the cost of printing and distribution.

      If I was a new barber I'd be offering FREE Haircuts.

      I'd be offering a prize for the person who shed the most locks.

      I'd be promoting to WOMEN who want their man to look good.

      Tell me....are you more likely to look at a picture of a guy with a hot girl running her fingers through his hair or some photos of guys sitting in the chair?

      Why do you think every rap video has hot women, hot cars, money, gold, jewellery etc?

      I wouldn't be doing the obvious things you are thinking.

      Best regards,

      Ozi
      THIS is good, sound advice. It adds well-articulated flesh to what I was thinking...

      which was "there's no way I'd go anywhere near you because you look like nothing more than a couple of punks"

      No disrespect! I'm sure you're two well-meaning, hard working guys, but that's not what I get from the graphic.

      Good luck!
  • Profile picture of the author Claude Whitacre
    To make it simple, I would place the statements "Men's cuts.Seniors cuts..."etc at the top. It's not a great headline, but at least it tells what you do.

    "Independently owned. Come check out your new and known neighborhood barbers Al and Zee" isn't a headline. It offers no benefit, no reason to read further.

    What makes your barbershop different? Better? Is there an offer? A discount? A reason to get a hair cut from you, and not the guys down the street?

    "All haircuts include optional neck shave. Ask about our fresh fades" is at least part of an offer. It should go directly under the headline.

    My suggestion is that you don't get these printed as they are. It will feel like you are doing something, but these are not flyers that will get any results.

    The headline has to make an offer..a promise..that grabs attention.
    For example, "Make your first impression, a great impression"

    Or better yet, "Our Cuts Are All Designed To Get You Noticed" or even "Get Yourself Noticed!".

    "We won't just cut until you are done. We aren't done until you (and your friends) are impressed".

    And an offer...maybe a coupon that can be clipped out and handed in, would be a huge help. For example, "New customer special. Your first cut is only $5" And make it a coupon.

    There are a few copywriters here that could make this "brochure" really pay off.

    But if you print one of the ones you have, it's money wasted. I promise.
    • Profile picture of the author Alexbarber
      Awesome advise! We're definitely not doing these coming soon ones anymore. Just one with a now open that includes offers and what we do
  • Profile picture of the author Kay King
    Some excellent advice from Claude and others - but one more thing.

    "Coming Soon" is vague - am I supposed to keep checking to see if you have "arrived"? How about a date - or issuing flyers advertising your opening day or opening week?
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    • Profile picture of the author Claude Whitacre
      Originally Posted by Kay King View Post

      How about a date -
      Well........OK.

      Originally Posted by DABK View Post

      I understand that you're going to use the 1st flyer for awareness purposes. However, good offers really increase awareness.

      That's a very good point. Awareness can be a byproduct of a great offer. In fact, it will be easier to remember.

      And, I hate to say this...but every time I see an ad that is supposed to increase awareness, it's just a way for an ad rep...or graphic designer...to justify an ad's existence.


      Originally Posted by Oziboomer View Post


      "Looking for a picture frame?"
      That's a great headline. I'm serious. Just saying what you sell is better than just about any clever headline I've read. My single most profitable headline in my retail store is
      "Allergies? Pet Hair Problems? Have We Got A Vacuum Cleaner For You". It grabs the attention of the people we want to read the ad. And that's the purpose of a headline.


      Originally Posted by Oziboomer View Post

      If I was a new barber I'd be offering FREE Haircuts.
      Best idea, I think. Your costs are almost nothing, and as a marketing move...one of the most proven. I'd just give free haircuts for a month. You want lines around the corner..andf you want to take photos of the lines, to be used in later ads.

      The best graphic in an ad is a real photo of a long line around the building...of people trying to get in your store. In fact, a good line would be "We apologize for the wait. But it's worth it. Ask the guy leaving..with a big grin on his face"
    • Profile picture of the author Alexbarber
      Very valid point! We're only going to be doing a flyer that states "now open"

      Thanks and if you can give some input on the cartoon graphic that would be awesome!

      Alex
  • Profile picture of the author DABK
    I'd too not choose either one. For the reasons mentioned above. Also, because the color scheme makes things hard to read.

    Why is 'independently owned' the first thing on your flyer? (Nothing in the rest of the flyer refers to anything that has to do with independently owned.)

    I understand that you're going to use the 1st flyer for awareness purposes. However, good offers really increase awareness.
    • Profile picture of the author Alexbarber
      Thanks for your input! It's supposed actually state "independently owed and operated". Why state that? Because of all the franchises that have been popping up left right and center. Most people tend to stay away from those places and we want to make it clear we're not another franchise and promise to give more attention and quality. Especially because we're going in a neighborhood that was in dire need of a barbershop!.

      Can you also give some advise about the cartoon graphic?

      Thanks so much!

      Alex
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  • Profile picture of the author Kay King
    If you offer "free" - make it a smart "free"....

    "Bring a friend - pay for one - get one free"

    "Bring your son - get two for one."

    Use the free option or 1/2 off or whatever to get more heads in the door...

    You get the idea.
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  • Profile picture of the author ThePromotionalGuy
    Hellor Alexbarber,

    This may sound "Old School" but

    "GRAND OPENING - (DATE)" is still working in 2017.

    The public always and I mean ALWAYS wants to see the newest thing. They flock to grand openings.

    Grand openings with prizes is a grabber. Incorporate your flyer.

    "Bring this flyer in and receive...blah, blah blah."

    This allows you to track your results as well as grabbing attention.

    Then once you know your results from your first flyer campaign. This leads you to create a new flyer campaign.

    But remember this, always and I mean ALWAYS have an irresistible offer.

    Give your buyer a reason to get up from their couch, grab their keys and head over to your place of business.

    Chinchilla
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