Please Critique My Letter!
So here's my follow up letter that includes my proposal. I need a couple of quick critiques as I'd like this letter to go out in today's mail, in about an hour.
Dear Brian, Hope you're doing well. I just wanted to thank you for taking the time to talk with me yesterday about your website development and promotion for http://xxxxx. Here are a couple of statistics I thought you might find interesting:
And here are a few business benefits to using my service:
My normal base rate for a website with initial Search Engine Optimization is $997. Monthly maintenance and promotion for each keyword phrase to get it ranking, and keep it ranking in the major search engines, is $200 per keyword phrase per month. For a geographic business listing and optimization in Google, I charge $497 (this includes photos and video that I will secure - again, no work on your part at all). What I am proposing to you is a barter of my services for your furniture. The advantage to you is that while I am bartering looking at the retail price of your furniture, you are bartering with the wholesale value of your furniture. What I envision for xxxxxxx is development of the website that I have created and optimized, which is already ranking in the #1 position for your business name. I've researched four keywords to target for xxxxxxxxxxxx, which I will promote for a term of three months, at which time, services can be renewed if you wish. The value of this package in total is $3397. What I propose is a barter for goods in the retail amount of $3000, and I will also completely optimize your geographic business listing absolutely free of charge. |
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