Tell Me If You Hate This Ad!

I actually really like the ad...it focuses on the pain/desired pleasure and gives the pertinent details.

Good luck! Peace and prosperity, Stephanie.

I HATE..."Make Money Online". I just cringe when I hear those words together in a sentence.

Also, I'd change "Are you going to change the world or let it change you" to "Are you going to change with it, or let it change you" or something like that.

I think the design is great though and everything else I'd leave.

iYingHang, you have great information on the ad, but you really have two separate target markets. I’d suggest taking the time and create two separate ads.

The first workshop is for business owners to inform them on how they are missing out on clients by not having a website and how adding a website and related services, which of course you can provide, will help increases their business.

The second workshop for students, unemployed, etc. I’m guessing is an introduction to the world of online marketing where you will be giving away some free tips, but what are you ultimate goals with this workshop? Offer an expanded class to teach them online marketing for a fee, look for potential employees?

I have to agree with James (above) about the two different target markets. It really looks like to different ads stuck together.

Also, the ad is a bit busy. The reader has to look from left to right, top to bottom. It should be more streamline. Make it easy for the reader to find the information quickly.
And sorry,......... but using multiple fonts is considered amateurish. Too much use of the black background with white text. It should only be used sparingly. Take a look at a few of your favorite ads....copy what they do. Start collecting a swipe file for inspiration.

One a positive note...congrats having the guts to do seminars.

Good opening line but you have way too much stuff in there... makes it hard to follow and read.

This one is sooooo much better than the last......


I have so many things to point out... just not enough time right now...

But... While I am here. Let me ask you a question?

Is that you in the pic?

You want it to be.....

Having a picture of you on your marketing materials builds instant rapport. When they come to the work shop they will feel like they already know you. It has been repeatedly proven that people like to do business with people.

I guarantee you will close more sales by putting your mug on ALL your marketing materials. An integral part of the marketing process is to build trust. So if they already feel like they know you based on a picture of you.... they will trust you, and purchase your product or service.

I completely dominated my business niche in a former business based on the marketing principles I am sharing with you.

So I only speak from experience.

The thought of.... "Well. I am too fat... or too ugly..." came across my mind on several occassions when implementing these strategies. But really.... No one passed judgement on me. Only I did.

So give it a try... what do you have to lose.

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at the top combines a call to action with a benefit and offer.

Just another quick thought.

"Are You Making a FATAL BUSINESS MISTAKE?"


Don't know if I would mention web design at the top. You don't want to give them too much info in the Tag Line.

You want them to have to think. You want them to wonder what this work shop is about.

Just another thought. Never give up the goods right off the bat. Make them work for it. That way you can get them to read the whole thing and not say.... I have a website and pitch it with in the first 10 Seconds.....













I will come back to this thread later when I have more time.

Thank you guys for all the constructive ideas!

The 2 Big questions are "Are you actually making 10 000 Malaysian Ringgit/Month and have you actually been featured in Nan Yang?

Do you want to Grow YOUR BUSINESS?

"Make Money Online" just doesn't really sound right. If you think about it. Your potential reader may automatically think to themselves... I don't want to sell stuff on the internet. I already have a business model and my store or service is not something I can sell on the net.

Getting them to the Workshop so you can educate and inform them of their marketing needs... and how they can grow their current business, and how the net WILL fit into thier current biz model is the idea... right?

I would try and avoid anything that would give them the opportunity to shut you down before you have a chance to inform them of how it works... Just me....

My own experience.... I could be wrong.

Maybe it's just me but damn that thing is busy... WAAAY too much copy. My eyes have no idea where to look first and it just scares me off.

Try and focus on the main interest points, and get them to contact you. The point of an ad is never to sell... it's always to generate interest and get the prospect to call you.

Stream lining the content to not be so busy would work in your favor.

Reducing the amount of copy... will not.

The fact is... words sell , graphics tell.

As far as it being too busy... I do somewhat agree. There is a lot going on there. That is why I say streamline it.

Psychologically... people that read left to right... are automatically going to have their eyes go in that direction. Opposite for others.... but you get the idea.

Really... in any marketing peice. You want the readers eyes to be directed by you.

Andrew mentioned the "suitable for unemployed individuals"

Is that your target demographic? Love the one your with....

Each marketing peice should have ONE target demographic in mind to be effective.

Trying to market to everyone will alienate a portion of the original target and cause you to lose potential clients.

I almost want to do this flier for you.... but I think it is better for you to learn on your own.