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Need Help on My PostCard Headline

by jspmedia
14 replies
Hi,

I am trying to create post card for mobile site design service...

but I need a help on headline sales statement...

I am using "Do you have Mobile Site for Your Business?"

can you share your thought?
#headline #offline #postcard
  • Profile picture of the author Mike Grant
    It's not engaging.
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  • Profile picture of the author ADukes81
    I am working on a flier for the same thing and am having the same problem.

    I'll let you know with what I come up with
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    • Profile picture of the author Lee M
      If you wanted to go with a "news" type headline ... here's an idea:

      "Small Businesses Using New Channels To Attract Mobile-Obsessed Customers!"
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  • Profile picture of the author davechan
    300 Million Websites ... 5.3 BILLION Cell Phones ... Isn't It Time You Mobilized?

    Heck, I might even use this myself
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  • Profile picture of the author Doran Peck
    Go look up the stats that show the percentage of google searches done from mobile devices. (its something like 40%)

    That is an eye catching statistic
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    Effective Solutions - Unique Mobile Marketing
    ..........your sub title here now that i have your attention.


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  • Profile picture of the author James Foster
    "How Much Are You Losing By Not Using Moblie Marketing?"
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  • Profile picture of the author Voasi
    "New Mobile Site Made $1000 First Day!"
    "Mobile Website Delivers 50 Sales in 24 Hours!"
    "60 Million People with Smartphones... You Should Get Smart and Advertise TO THEM!"

    ...of course, these require you to have case studies.
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  • Profile picture of the author leeannprice
    Do you want know how much money you're losing by not having a mobile website?
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  • Profile picture of the author TimCastleman
    Lame.

    Look who are you going after (target market)?

    What is the benefits they get from having a mobile site?

    What features do mobile sites offer?

    What is your offer to them?

    Until we know those things we (and you) won't have the best headline possible.

    Tim
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    • Profile picture of the author ewenmack
      Why don't you use what's in your classified ad report?

      You gotta write a damn good headline to make classified ads work,
      just like postcards.

      To get a better response to your mailing, phone and speak
      to the person you would like to send it to.

      Ask for permission to send a sample of what a website looks like
      that brings in more leads and more sales from those people who use mobile devices.

      You can do it by email, saving time and money.

      Plus you are only sending out to interested people.

      By asking permission to send, you have started off the relationship
      on a very positive note.

      Best,
      Ewen
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  • Profile picture of the author MarketingMembers
    My cell phone is a money magnet!

    Mobile sites make headlines in news.

    I try not to ask questions. Come up with something that doesn't sound like your trying to sell them a product or service.

    Provide as much proof as possible and know that the majority of your post cards will be trashed or never delivered in the first place.

    Good luck.

    Daniel
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