I've revised my sales letter, please critique it for me :)
A little while ago, I posted a sales letter I am going to send out, and I asked you to critique it for me. I made some changes to it, and would like to see your thoughts. Please be as brutal as you need to be.
Thanks!
Matt
Hello!
My name is Matt Scherrah, I am a partner/co-owner of One Sun Media Group, a video production company in Pittsburgh. I am writing you today, because while looking for XYZ Businesses, I found your Google Places site, and I noticed you do not have any videos on the listing!
Google Places is a very important tool for marketing yourself and your services. When people are looking for local results, Google Places is the best place to look for information, directions, services, and, most importantly, reviews and testimonials!
One of the best ways to use Google Places to your advantage is to provide searchers with the most information possible. Give them your hours, your address, phone number, and more. Another important feature that many people leave out of their Google Places listing is video.
Adding video to your Google Places listing makes your listing more viable to the person searching for you. They are able to see you, your business, service, etc. They get the feeling they can connect with you better than they can with those other "faceless" competitors.
A great way to add video to your Google Places listing while also providing people with information about you and your services is through video testimonials.
Video testimonials allow searchers to see first-hand what satisfied customers have to say about you and your business! Many times, these testimonials alone are what will bring more business to your doorstep!
If you would like to learn more about how video tutorials can help you bring more business through your doorstep, and help you become a more trusted business, please contact me.
Sincerely,
Matt Scherrah
Partner/Co-owner
One Sun Media Group
www.onesunmediagroup.com
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