Critique my intro email? Is it good? bad? or pretty ugly?
I'm ramping things up at the moment and purchased PLP to blast 150+ emails out per day. I'm not expecting a massive response but 0.5% would yield an additional 3-4 leads per week.
Anyway... what do you think about this email? Too short / too long / not a strong enough call to action / weak offer? I will be changing it slightly for each industry I target... Would love to hear your thoughts
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Hi there,
I came across your website while searching for a cleaning company online. I was curious about whether you were looking to take on additional work over the following months, as we are looking to start a campaign to generate more enquiries through your website.
We do this by attracting people from Google who are searching for a carpet cleaner, commercial/domestic cleaning company, upholstery cleaner, etc, locally to where you operate.
We have worked with several different types of businesses in the past, and testimonials can be found on our Free Index page - XXXXXXXXX
Unfortunately we can only work with one type of cleaning company in each location (or one national brand), because if we work with two there will be a clear conflict of interest. If you're not interested, please advise and I can offer this opportunity to another company.
However, if you would like to discuss further, I would be happy to provide a free consultation to explain what we could achieve. If so, I can be reached at XXXXX.
Sincerely,
MY NAME
JOB TITLE
XXX.com
XXX - Direct number
XXX - Office Freephone
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What do you think?
Thanks guys!
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