✔✔✔ LANDING PAGES Re-Written for $100. Yep now $100. HARRY HAD A PROBLEM...

Metronicity · 03-31-2009, 11:49 AM

Meet Harry. He's an internet marketer. Harry has a BIG problem. He's lost his Mojo - he's not making any sales. He has a great-looking site with all the bells and whistles. He's got the traffic. He has excellent CTR on his PPC campaign but it's not converting - no-one's buying.

Why? Because his landing page copy stinks. It fact, it not only stinks - it reeks. It's long and it's boring. Harry wrote it himself. And you can tell. He threw up a headline he found in a cheap ebook - WHO ELSE WANTS BLUE WIDGETS? it screams in garish red caps. Followed by 2,000 words of waffle.

Who else wants blue widgets? As it happens - no-one. That tired old, hackneyed line is enough to put anyone off. Harry compounds the problem by adding what he thinks is some really cool copy. Does Size Matter? reads the sub-head. Nothing to do with blue widgets but Harry figures most of his customers are guys anyway. And they'll get a chuckle out of it. He's wrong. They're clicking off the page in droves.

Oh Harry. What are we going to do with you? Look, if you want to sell stuff on the net you can't muck around - you have to go for the jugular. You've got seconds to get your reader's interest and seconds to sell them.

You want HOT COPY? Copy that sells. Cut to the chase. Tell 'em what you have. Tell 'em why they shouldn't be without it. Tell 'em the price. Tell 'em where to get it. To use another cliché - it's not rocket science.

Harry's blue widget campaign was in the hole until he met me - Malkie the Landing Page King. For starters I changed his "Who Else Wants Blue Widgets?" to The Other Guy's Blue Widgets Are A Bit Cheaper Than Ours ....but ours are American-Made with Platinum inners that won't screw-up your hard-drive like those cheap sweatshop imports he's flogging. Know what I mean? It's a no-brainer. Order yours today by clicking on the button below - buy before the end of the month and you'll pay $49 instead of our usual $59".

Now look what's happened - Harry's converting like crazy. And not just to the guys. That's one of his happy customers above.

Are your landing pages Dead Ducks like Harry's? Here's the deal. Send me your under-performing landing pages and I'll tweak them and re-write them so they convert like crazy. For just 100 bucks. Yep...one hundred George Washingtons. How good's that? Normally I charge at least $300 for my magic touch. But for you brave Warriors it's just 100 smackeroos. (It was just $10 last week but all the creatures came crawling out of the swamp).

What's my style? I can write in any style you want but normally I just like to shoot from the hip. Like this. I write plain vanilla-style copy - no embellishments - no padding - I just tell it like it is. In so many words. My Landing Pages work their butts off. Get me to re-do yours and I'll give you two variations so you can split-test. Hot Copy delivered fresh to your door. Just hit the button - you'll be so glad you did. And your teeth will stay whiter all day.

BTW Harry went on to marry that babe - now that's what I call a conversion!

Go to my site for the PayPal button

After you've paid, email or PM me your landing page and let's get started!

Rajul kaushik · 03-31-2009, 01:17 PM

My friend,
How do we pay?

Metronicity · 03-31-2009, 01:23 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Rajul kaushik

My friend,
How do we pay?

Hi Rajul, does the PayPal button not work? PM or email me please.

Metronicity · 03-31-2009, 01:32 PM

I had the pics set to "private" by mistake. I could see them but apparently no-one else could. Can you see them now? Harry & Babe at the top - PayPal button below?

Rajul kaushik · 03-31-2009, 01:46 PM

I am getting an error: https://www.paypal.com/fr/cgi-bin/we...7b0ecd252eac84

Metronicity · 03-31-2009, 02:04 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Rajul kaushik

I am getting an error: https://www.paypal.com/fr/cgi-bin/we...7b0ecd252eac84

Yeah seems I haven't done the button properly. Putting up hyperlink.

Melody · 03-31-2009, 02:08 PM

Quick question - what do you consider a landing page vs a full sales page? Is this basically for a short landing page that gets the customer to click through to the sales page or affiliate offer?

Thanks!

Melody

Fernando Veloso · 03-31-2009, 02:10 PM

Hello,

Paypal button not working at the moment BUT Grab a space for me!

Metronicity · 03-31-2009, 02:15 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Fernando Veloso

Hello,

Paypal button not working at the moment BUT Grab a space for me!

Damn pesky PayPal button. I have the HTML code for it - can't figure out how to put in on this site - normally you just drop the code in and get a hyperlinked button. The help here is abysmal.

Metronicity · 03-31-2009, 02:17 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Melody

Quick question - what do you consider a landing page vs a full sales page? Is this basically for a short landing page that gets the customer to click through to the sales page or affiliate offer?

Thanks!

Melody

You're gonna be pushing the envelope if you send me a sales page with 10,000 words on it. But yeah...some landing pages are awful long - "reverse funnel" and all that. Let's have a look. Send me 1 page.

Now if I could just figure out how to get the PayPal merchant button working properly. Cheers, Mal.

Marian · 03-31-2009, 02:19 PM

Can't you just make the paypal link outside the WF??

Marian

Metronicity · 03-31-2009, 04:53 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Melody

Quick question - what do you consider a landing page vs a full sales page? Is this basically for a short landing page that gets the customer to click through to the sales page or affiliate offer?

Thanks!

Melody

Shorter the better.

But I'll look at anything. Like I said...normally I charge in the hundreds. Cheers, Malkie, Gay Paree.

hernan10 · 04-01-2009, 05:17 AM

Mal's copies rock!!!
His writing style is unique and has this ability to create excitement in the prospect.... which is exactly what I was looking for. I still cannot believe I got an A grade copy for just 10 bucks... Will def order more!

Fernando Veloso · 04-01-2009, 05:28 PM

Got my revised sales page up and running, will see how it performs next 4 weeks.

Cheers Mal,

Fernando

HungMoon · 04-01-2009, 11:23 PM

Do you have examples of landing pages that you have written/revised previously?

Metronicity · 04-02-2009, 01:06 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by HungMoon

Do you have examples of landing pages that you have written/revised previously?

Sure. I'll send them to you by PM.

Metronicity · 04-02-2009, 06:16 AM

Sorry Warriors. Price has now gone up to $100. Unbelievable what some people expect for ten bucks. I might be generous...but I'm not crazy.

hernan10 · 04-05-2009, 07:40 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Metronicity

Sorry Warriors. Price has now gone up to $100. Unbelievable what some people expect for ten bucks. I might be generous...but I'm not crazy.

and there I was thinking that christmas was here to stay

03-31-2009, 11:49 AM	#1
Metronicity Whacked-Out Copywriter War Room Member Join Date: Jan 2009 Location: Paris via Sydney Posts: 654 Blog Entries: 1 Thanks: 138 Thanked 114 Times in 75 Posts Social Networking Contact Info	✔✔✔ LANDING PAGES Re-Written for $100. Yep now $100. HARRY HAD A PROBLEM... Meet Harry. He's an internet marketer. Harry has a BIG problem. He's lost his Mojo - he's not making any sales. He has a great-looking site with all the bells and whistles. He's got the traffic. He has excellent CTR on his PPC campaign but it's not converting - no-one's buying. Why? Because his landing page copy stinks. It fact, it not only stinks - it reeks. It's long and it's boring. Harry wrote it himself. And you can tell. He threw up a headline he found in a cheap ebook - WHO ELSE WANTS BLUE WIDGETS? it screams in garish red caps. Followed by 2,000 words of waffle. Who else wants blue widgets? As it happens - no-one. That tired old, hackneyed line is enough to put anyone off. Harry compounds the problem by adding what he thinks is some really cool copy. Does Size Matter? reads the sub-head. Nothing to do with blue widgets but Harry figures most of his customers are guys anyway. And they'll get a chuckle out of it. He's wrong. They're clicking off the page in droves. Oh Harry. What are we going to do with you? Look, if you want to sell stuff on the net you can't muck around - you have to go for the jugular. You've got seconds to get your reader's interest and seconds to sell them. You want HOT COPY? Copy that sells. Cut to the chase. Tell 'em what you have. Tell 'em why they shouldn't be without it. Tell 'em the price. Tell 'em where to get it. To use another cliché - it's not rocket science. Harry's blue widget campaign was in the hole until he met me - Malkie the Landing Page King. For starters I changed his "Who Else Wants Blue Widgets?" to The Other Guy's Blue Widgets Are A Bit Cheaper Than Ours ....but ours are American-Made with Platinum inners that won't screw-up your hard-drive like those cheap sweatshop imports he's flogging. Know what I mean? It's a no-brainer. Order yours today by clicking on the button below - buy before the end of the month and you'll pay $49 instead of our usual $59". Now look what's happened - Harry's converting like crazy. And not just to the guys. That's one of his happy customers above. Are your landing pages Dead Ducks like Harry's? Here's the deal. Send me your under-performing landing pages and I'll tweak them and re-write them so they convert like crazy. For just 100 bucks. Yep...one hundred George Washingtons. How good's that? Normally I charge at least $300 for my magic touch. But for you brave Warriors it's just 100 smackeroos. (It was just $10 last week but all the creatures came crawling out of the swamp). What's my style? I can write in any style you want but normally I just like to shoot from the hip. Like this. I write plain vanilla-style copy - no embellishments - no padding - I just tell it like it is. In so many words. My Landing Pages work their butts off. Get me to re-do yours and I'll give you two variations so you can split-test. Hot Copy delivered fresh to your door. Just hit the button - you'll be so glad you did. And your teeth will stay whiter all day. BTW Harry went on to marry that babe - now that's what I call a conversion! Go to my site for the PayPal button After you've paid, email or PM me your landing page and let's get started!
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03-31-2009, 01:17 PM	#2
Rajul kaushik Blogsmith Join Date: Aug 2008 Location: Dubai Posts: 438 Thanks: 14 Thanked 27 Times in 24 Posts Contact Info	Re: Harry Had a Problem My friend, How do we pay?
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03-31-2009, 01:32 PM	#4
Metronicity Whacked-Out Copywriter War Room Member Join Date: Jan 2009 Location: Paris via Sydney Posts: 654 Blog Entries: 1 Thanks: 138 Thanked 114 Times in 75 Posts Social Networking Contact Info	Re: Harry Had a Problem I had the pics set to "private" by mistake. I could see them but apparently no-one else could. Can you see them now? Harry & Babe at the top - PayPal button below?
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03-31-2009, 01:46 PM	#5
Rajul kaushik Blogsmith Join Date: Aug 2008 Location: Dubai Posts: 438 Thanks: 14 Thanked 27 Times in 24 Posts Contact Info	Re: Harry Had a Problem I am getting an error: https://www.paypal.com/fr/cgi-bin/we...7b0ecd252eac84
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03-31-2009, 02:08 PM	#7
Melody Senior Warrior Member War Room Member Join Date: Jun 2004 Location: Cincinnati, OH , USA. Posts: 2,505 Thanks: 142 Thanked 216 Times in 97 Posts	Re: Harry Had a Problem Quick question - what do you consider a landing page vs a full sales page? Is this basically for a short landing page that gets the customer to click through to the sales page or affiliate offer? Thanks! Melody
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03-31-2009, 02:10 PM	#8
Fernando Veloso Portuguese Warrior War Room Member Join Date: Nov 2008 Location: Good Old Europe Posts: 1,095 Blog Entries: 1 Thanks: 348 Thanked 131 Times in 93 Posts Social Networking	Re: Harry Had a Problem Hello, Paypal button not working at the moment BUT Grab a space for me!
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03-31-2009, 02:19 PM	#11
Marian Senior Warrior Member War Room Member Join Date: Oct 2004 Location: EU Posts: 1,173 Blog Entries: 2 Thanks: 20 Thanked 23 Times in 23 Posts Social Networking	Re: Harry Had a Problem Can't you just make the paypal link outside the WF?? Marian
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04-01-2009, 05:17 AM	#13
hernan10 Banned Join Date: Apr 2008 Location: Dubai, UAE Posts: 175 Thanks: 55 Thanked 43 Times in 16 Posts	Re: ➽➽ Landing Pages Re-Written for $10. I'm Losing It. Harry Had a Problem Mal's copies rock!!! His writing style is unique and has this ability to create excitement in the prospect.... which is exactly what I was looking for. I still cannot believe I got an A grade copy for just 10 bucks... Will def order more!

04-01-2009, 05:28 PM	#14
Fernando Veloso Portuguese Warrior War Room Member Join Date: Nov 2008 Location: Good Old Europe Posts: 1,095 Blog Entries: 1 Thanks: 348 Thanked 131 Times in 93 Posts Social Networking	Re: ₩©₩ LANDING PAGES Re-Written for $10. I'm Losing It. HARRY HAD A PROBLEM... Got my revised sales page up and running, will see how it performs next 4 weeks. Cheers Mal, Fernando
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04-02-2009, 06:16 AM	#17
Metronicity Whacked-Out Copywriter War Room Member Join Date: Jan 2009 Location: Paris via Sydney Posts: 654 Blog Entries: 1 Thanks: 138 Thanked 114 Times in 75 Posts Social Networking Contact Info	Re: ₩©₩ LANDING PAGES Re-Written for $100. Yep now $100. HARRY HAD A PROBLEM... Sorry Warriors. Price has now gone up to $100. Unbelievable what some people expect for ten bucks. I might be generous...but I'm not crazy.
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