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Unread 23rd Apr 2009, 01:22 PM   #1
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Alternative to high-priced copy... Video Crits by up-n-coming copywriter (Limit of 10 @ this price)
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Attn: Website Owner...

Get A Pro Copywriter's Full Attention on Your Website... And Find The Handful Of Tweaks That Will Improve Your Website's Performance!

Everyone knows you should be testing... but just what should you be testing? You now have the opportunity for a pro critique at a rock bottom price... that you will never see again!

[EDIT: I decided to run this again. Look what David McGimpsey said about his critique a few posts down.]

Dear Warrior,
You know your website could be performing better. Problem: it's hard to know what to change. After all, it's your baby... and you've looked at it so many times that you don't know where to begin making changes.

You don't want to make a change that will hurt performance either.

And you can always post a critique request on this or another forum, but you don't really know whether to trust those you are hearing from, or not.

Let me tell you what makes me qualified to critique your copy:
  • I took Ray Edwards' Web Copywriting Explained course the first time he offered it, entered and won his "Copy Cub" contest, and have since been hired by Ray to write sales copy.
  • Copy that I wrote contributed to Joel Comm's book Click Here To Order reaching #16 on Amazon on launch day.
  • I was invited by Perry Marshall to serve an expert copywriter for his unique Autoresponder Seminar in Chicago, and have been thereafter hired to consult with his some of clients on their copy.
  • As a serious student of copywriting and marketing, I have read not only the standard works but continuously look for any new material that will give me an "edge".
  • As a full-time marketer for over one-year, this is not something I do in my spare time or on the side... I live it!

Bottom line: I'm not only a serious student of copy, I have also been "behind the scenes" with some of the most respected and successful internet marketers.

Think I might be able to bring some of that perspective to bear with YOUR website?
Get ready because you're going to get:
A Copywriting Video Critique of Your Website!
(limited to the first 10 who sign up)


My critique will be specifically focused on the handful of areas you should test.

I'll go through your site and give you my recommendations about where to get the most leverage from your website tweaks.
Here's what top copywriter Ray Edwards has to say about my work:


My goal is to provide so much value that you just can't say "no".


OK, OK, What's My Investment?


Let me ask you this question: how much would it be worth to you if you had one more sale per week, or even per day?

Go ahead and do some conservative calculations, and then check out my no-brainer offer:

Video Critique - Just $47


(limited to the first 10 who sign up)

I'll be frank with you... one of the reasons I'm doing this for such a low price is to get some really good testimonials. I figure the best way to do that is to target business owners with existing websites that are making some money, and providing services that will help them increase their profits.
Therefore, I'll be asking you to provide a testimonial about the quality of what I give you.

Don't wait, I'm not going to keep this offer up forever and I just might come to my senses and pull it tomorrow!





** Here's my guarantee to you ** :

I'm certain that you will be thrilled with my critique and that you will be given several items that will improve the performance of your website. However, if for any reason you are unhappy with my service, just let me know and I will cheerfully refund your money.

I can't be any fairer than that!



BONUS: My "Website Revenue Optimizer"

This is a spreadsheet I create for you to perform "what if" analysis for your website metrics. Easily get an estimate of how your revenue will increase if you improve your optin ratio, sales page conversion ratio, or order page conversion ratio by whatever percentage you want to plug in.

The spreadsheet will be my gift to you for purchasing this package.

Here's a screenshot of the spreadsheet:





Darrel Hawes is a no-nonsense, well-trained, highly cooperative copywriter. His accounting background gives him a tone and style that’s much more appropriate for Business To Business markets than most other copywriters and his no-nonsense view of the world mean his work projects substance and solidity.

He can assemble products and promotions and I recommend him for any copywriting project that has a serious, results-driven audience.



- Perry Marshall


Still not sure?



Here Are More Reasons Your Should Take Me Up On This Offer...

  • Improvements to your website will continue bringing in additional revenue for months, even years to come.
  • Do you really want to study copy yourself... and buy hundreds of dollars worth of books and spend thousands on copywriting courses? Let me do the heavy lifting!.
  • This offer will only be available for a limited time and you should not expect to see it again!



Questions you may have...


Q1. How much information will you need from me?

A1. Once you pay for the service, I'll ask you to supply me with your website URL. I'll be able to glean most of what I need from there. If I need more information, my assistant will follow up with you to get it.


Q2. How long will it take to get my critique?

A2. Give me at least two weeks. Those who sign up first will be at the front of the line, obviously.


Q3. Can I pay for more than one critique?

A3. Yes, although when I have reached the maximum I want to do at this price, I'll pull this WSO. So, don't delay.


Q4. Am I a good candidate for your video critique service?

A4. The best fit for this service is a business owner with an existing sales letter that is already making sales. If that doesn't describe you... let's talk anyway and we'll may be able to make a deal that works for both of us.


-->>Click Here To Order Your Video Critique Now!<<--



If you have any more questions, please ask away.

To your success,




Darrel Hawes

P.S. I can't guarantee that I will ever make this offer again, at this price. If you are at all interested, even if you want to have a critique prepared for a future website, then claim your place right now!





Darrel was recommended to us by a trusted friend in the internet marketing industry. We used a team approach on this project and found Darrel to be easy to work with and flexible.

The final copy converted very well for us and the book we were promoting “Click Here To Order: Stories of the World’s Most Successful Internet Marketing Entrepreneurs” reached #16 overall on Amazon! Thanks Darrel!



- Joel Comm


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Unread 23rd Apr 2009, 10:29 PM   #2
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Hi Darrell,

Just paid and email sent.

Regards,
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Unread 23rd Apr 2009, 10:37 PM   #3
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Thanks David!
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**Edit**
Sorry... that was meant for the other WSO

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To anybody who is considering a copy critique, jump on this. I received mine today. The critique is over 25 minutes and shared a lot of copy secrets and suggestions that I can't wait to test out! Probably the best money I've ever spent online. Thanks Darrel.
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Are spaces still open (in the 10)?
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Yep. Have at it.

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Hey Darrel! Just purchased, and sent you an email
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Got it!

Thanks Ben.

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I am amazed this hasn't sold out already. Darrel is very professional and knows his stuff! This is a steal for $47, and definitely a "no-brainer". Thanks for the awesome copy critique!
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Thanks Ben! And I saw you purchased an autoresponder package too...
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Originally Posted by Darrel Hawes View Post

Thanks Ben! And I saw you purchased an autoresponder package too...
yep sure did! lol. We are going to go over it a bit more tomorrow to decide how we want to use it. Looking forward to that as well!
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Ben, look for an email from me.
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Thanks Craig!
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