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Feedback on website

by JustG
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Hi There

I posted before about an e-book I have written. I have made a website for this now. The links to the various clickable elements do not work as yet. But I was wondering if people thought this was ok or there were improvements that could be made etc.

All feedback welcome

How to **** It Up

G
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  • Profile picture of the author RecessionPROOF
    Originally Posted by JustG View Post

    Hi There

    I posted before about an e-book I have written. I have made a website for this now. The links to the various clickable elements do not work as yet. But I was wondering if people thought this was ok or there were improvements that could be made etc.

    All feedback welcome

    How to **** It Up

    G

    Catchy title, but you have spelling error, not good.
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    • Profile picture of the author JustG
      ah not done a spell check yet - thanks for the heads up
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  • Profile picture of the author Jason Kanigan
    As soon as you say "stone" you identify as in the UK.

    Americans are unlikely to know what the term means.

    I'd put both total pounds and stone/pounds on there.

    Layout is fine.

    "Family" is the typo.

    Change your CTA from "this book could be for you" to "this book is for you".

    You need a closing quotes for the book title in Ruben's quotation. I would put quotation marks at the beginning and end of each testimonial, to make it obvious that they are testimonials.

    Fix the punctuation issues in your About the Author part.

    Really, hire a proofreader/editor for $5 from fiverr.

    The Pantomime Cow image is just baffling as one scrolls down. "What the heck is this?!" Needs a headline over it or an explanatory noun underneath. It's totally disconnected from the rest of the book offer and that's an issue.
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    • Profile picture of the author JustG
      Originally Posted by Jason Kanigan View Post

      As soon as you say "stone" you identify as in the UK.

      Americans are unlikely to know what the term means.

      I'd put both total pounds and stone/pounds on there.

      Layout is fine.

      "Family" is the typo.

      Change your CTA from "this book could be for you" to "this book is for you".

      You need a closing quotes for the book title in Ruben's quotation. I would put quotation marks at the beginning and end of each testimonial, to make it obvious that they are testimonials.

      Fix the punctuation issues in your About the Author part.

      Really, hire a proofreader/editor for $5 from fiverr.

      The Pantomime Cow image is just baffling as one scrolls down. "What the heck is this?!" Needs a headline over it or an explanatory noun underneath. It's totally disconnected from the rest of the book offer and that's an issue.
      Hi Jason

      Thanks for the feedback - the Pantomime Cow thing was just aimed at a special offer I am giving away on web hosting for people buying the book. I am in the process of building a page under the Pantomime Cow brand (the Pantomime thing might be a bit too English) - Pantomime Cows being traditionally made up of a back end and front end - ie we can host front end and back end websites.
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  • Profile picture of the author Barry Unruh
    What is the point of the before and after pictures for weight loss?

    It seems out of context with the rest of the page.
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    • Profile picture of the author JustG
      Originally Posted by Barry Unruh View Post

      What is the point of the before and after pictures for weight loss?

      It seems out of context with the rest of the page.
      Hi Barry

      Now I look at it with fresh eyes I see your point but it references it in the second paragraph - of about the author. They whole book is about the transformation of the things I have done wrong including huge weight gain

      Thanks for the input - I think I need to make the link stronger
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    • Profile picture of the author totalprocessing.net
      Originally Posted by Barry Unruh View Post

      What is the point of the before and after pictures for weight loss?

      It seems out of context with the rest of the page.
      Yea the pics before/after needs to be just the after
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  • Profile picture of the author nupur1
    Spell check yet...
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    • Profile picture of the author JustG
      Originally Posted by nupur1 View Post

      Spell check yet...
      Hi, Yes I have just done this but think the site still needs quite a bit of work after feedback on here. Back to the drawing board.

      Regards

      G
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  • Profile picture of the author dummycandoit
    You seem like you know what your doing. Except for the URL,
    "howtoeffitup.com " I don't like it. You'll match for search engine title searches, but who the hell is going to remember how to spell this? It's too confusing, " how toe" after that it's over. Nice page though.
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    • Profile picture of the author JustG
      What domain name would you suggest I did struggle with this.

      :-)

      G
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      • Profile picture of the author jackcolton
        Initial thoughts are...

        1) Title needs to be How to NOT f**k it up. Without the "not," it doesn't seem like a motivational book off the cuff.

        2) I like the simplicity of the design and how the book jumps out at you.

        3) The copy on the page is missing compelling reasons for me to want to buy the book. You need to better communicate your transformation on the sales page, also to give more samples of what readers can expect to find within.

        4) I'm American, have no clue what a stone equates too, haha.
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        • Profile picture of the author JustG
          Originally Posted by jackcolton View Post

          Initial thoughts are...

          1) Title needs to be How to NOT f**k it up. Without the "not," it doesn't seem like a motivational book off the cuff.

          2) I like the simplicity of the design and how the book jumps out at you.

          3) The copy on the page is missing compelling reasons for me to want to buy the book. You need to better communicate your transformation on the sales page, also to give more samples of what readers can expect to find within.

          4) I'm American, have no clue what a stone equates too, haha.
          Hi thanks for this feedback on this. I did think that about adding NOT into the title but I was taking inspiration from How to be a Complete and Utter Failure in Life,...How to be a Complete and Utter Failure in Life,...
          I think you are right in what you say about giving people a reason to buy the book and perhaps more about talking about the transformation. Im going on holiday so have some good thinking time to get this cracked

          Yes I do need to think about using stones lol

          Thanks again

          G
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  • Profile picture of the author prestonp
    Check your website in developer tool under console section. Some style.css is returning 404.
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    • Profile picture of the author JustG
      Thanks for the heads up on that I was not aware.

      G
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