What else does my sales page need?

adding up images, improvement for the design itself and the fonts would be much better for your site

I wouldn't expect this to convert well at your price point.

The headline is weak. I guess you're expecting your video
to sell the offer.

Mostly you should be using left justify. The copy is hard to
read due to awkward formatting and font choices, and not
inspired. The "close" is poor, an afterthought.

Your ecover rendering is cheesy at this price point. Lots
of room for improvement here. If you're fixed on doing
it all yourself, you've got your work cut out for you.

Nuclear,..........i don't buy it.

convince me to buy your product.

Make your sales page longer,

make longer "what you get in the product" benefit list

catchier title

give me some relevant information, actually, make me feel like you can relate to me.

Tell me about your story...

"To Men who Want Women To Fight Over Them;
You Are About To Transform your Life..."

To vague...
i would say
"Women Would Fight Over you....only if you learn these 'secrets'"

and subtitle "But too many suckers would pass them by..."

Just throwing out some ideas at you

Why is $196 in larger font? Is that the price?

And $290 is in yellow.... oh, that's the price!

Nope, there it is... small in black and for $94... I'm confused...

And what do I get?

I get an ebook that takes me 60 minutes to read?

Oh, I see, there are modules... 7 modules.. how are these delivered? video? another ebook? I'm confused...

Sorry, nuclear81, you've got a lot of work to do here.... you should probably think about hiring a copywriter, or learn the skill of copywriting and get a copywriting course from Jason Fladlein....

Really work on your benefits and make sure bullets are more benefits....

And your offer needs to be a no brainer, irrestible offer... Don't just include video modules... include mp3s so the guys can listen on their iPods or mp3 players any time and anywhere.... and include transcripts of the videos... some guys will want to print these out, read and make notes ... you can do all this with the click of a button on Camtasia...

And include the testimonials on a sidebar so the visitor reads them as he reads down the sales letter...

And I'm confused with your ordering button... it looks like just an opt in form so I can get some free information... but above the box, way above the optin box is some text that tells me that after filling in the box with my email address, I will be taken to an order form?

Huh? An ordering button that looks like an opt in box?

Don't confuse your visitor. Put on the page a big "Add to Shopping Cart" button.

Hope this helps.

Mike D.

i try my mini sales latter page,very seo friendly with google,yahoo,and bing but i must try this script,maybe you can include a simpel clean graphic