Please Critique My Squeeze Pages.

by Devin X Banned 12 replies
Hey Warriors,

I just created 2 new squeeze pages and so far they are converting pretty well. But I'd obviously like to increase them. (2-3% right now)

I plan on adding video to them soon because I know that's hot right now, but I just wanted to get them up to build my lists.

Please take a look and tell me where I could add more/remove some and whether or not it's enticing. (Or if I just need the video, whatever)

Thanks in advance, and have a great one.


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  • Profile picture of the author MattGoffrey
    The actual sign up form is "below the fold" which isn't good. Right off the bat, if you simply reduced the size of your text a little and got rid of some of the white space between everything it would do better. You could probably shrink the top banner more than a little and not lose anything also.

    Seriously, bottom line, you really bad need to get the sign up form higher on the page.

    Do you have a way of split testing your headline? My gut tells me you could probably improve your conversion rate with a different headline ... but then I'm not sure who your target is either (and please don't say "anyone that wants to make money")

    What you might want to think about doing also is finding a squeeze page you really like and swiping that format.

    HTH
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    • Profile picture of the author Devin X
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      Originally Posted by MattGoffrey View Post

      The actual sign up form is "below the fold" which isn't good. Right off the bat, if you simply reduced the size of your text a little and got rid of some of the white space between everything it would do better. You could probably shrink the top banner more than a little and not lose anything also.

      Seriously, bottom line, you really bad need to get the sign up form higher on the page.

      Do you have a way of split testing your headline? My gut tells me you could probably improve your conversion rate with a different headline ... but then I'm not sure who your target is either (and please don't say "anyone that wants to make money")

      What you might want to think about doing also is finding a squeeze page you really like and swiping that format.

      HTH

      Thanks Matt, I'll look into it. I'm gonna add video and I'll play with it some more through split tests. Thanks again for the feedback.
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  • Profile picture of the author MaryKathan
    Hi
    I agree that you need the opt-in part where they will see it right away (above the fold). I would also show a picture of what they get for free above the fold.

    On the muscle one, I think that your before and after pictures are very effective - people always want to improve how they look. Maybe if you move things around a little so the opt-in is to the right of the pictures / above the fold.
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  • Profile picture of the author Mark72
    Here are my suggestions:-

    1. Move your optin box above the fold

    2. Try asking only for the email address and nothing else

    3. Use basic bullet points with a headline

    4. Try ditching all graphics except for an ebook cover
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  • Profile picture of the author KevinW
    The comments about "below the fold" are right on the money. The banner is cool but it is way to big. Cut the banner and pull up some bullet points, video, slideshow and the optin form.
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  • Profile picture of the author SamuelUherek
    The opt in boxes are not as clear as they should be. I almost didn't notice them. You should definitely work on that. They should stand out so people will know what you want them to do.
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  • Profile picture of the author Taniwha
    You really don't need the top graphic.
    With your ectomorph-buff site. The picture is to the point and the message is clear, but i'm not a fan of that blue, it makes me want to look away as it's unpleasant on the eyes.
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  • Profile picture of the author Devin X
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    Thank you all for the feedback! =)

    I will definitely give them a makeover and hopefully I'll notice the conversions increase.

    Thanks again everyone, and hope you're all doing well.
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  • Profile picture of the author absolutelee
    You basically need to fit it all in, or most of it in, above the fold. The graphics are okay, but take up too much space vertically. Most folk's monitors are wise now. So, broaden out the site so you can see more content when you land.
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  • Profile picture of the author iRunThis
    I hesitated to post, because everybody else covered everything that I would say, but I'll say it anyways. lol

    When I clicked on the first page, the banner took all of my attention. Some people might click off the page right there. I would decrease the size of that by about 50%. Decrease the red text (only a little bit) also, fix the typo in the red text. It says "Withinthe" with no space.

    Another BIG one, I would say add a picture of what they're getting. You mention that you're giving away an e-book, maybe put an ebook cover above or beside the opt-in form.

    For the second page, again, the pictures take all of my attention, you don't want this. You want the headline to catch peoples attention. I would move the before/after pictures down below the headline maybe and refer to it. Ah I just checked, and you did refer to it, I would put it below "WOULD YOU LIKE TO TRANSFORM YOUR BODY LIKE I DID?" and then you go into introducing yourself after the pictures.

    I'm not sure if EVERYTHING that I posted was already mentioned before, but I hope I helped.

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  • Profile picture of the author RichardDean
    fbradical

    First thing I noticed is the two people don't look a like... They look close... then the second thing is the year 08 to 10 ok they might be the same person? But it is a question... If I can't see right off the bat that two people are the same I pass.

    then you say build muscle fast but the photo are 2 years apart 2 years is not fast. I pass again...

    The design is too skinny and long you have all the words centered just the headline sun line should be center.

    Your copy don't sell me either.. I pass again

    You need a disclaimer that your not selling my name. I pass again

    Covered this but you should not have to scroll to sign up.

    The colors are not professional need to work on the color and design.

    Lots of good templates out there to give you a better start if your not up to have the design skills.

    hope that helps

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  • Profile picture of the author petemcal
    Lots of good tips here for squeeze design in general. Thanks.
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