Site review requested

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Please review following site


http://franchisetwo.com

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  • Profile picture of the author K Meier
    Very plain and vide took too long to load.

    If I wouldn't have visited the website for a review, I would have clicked away within 3 seconds. Nothing there to catch my eye, no graphics, no color, no text standing out and it took over 10 seconds for the video to load.
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    • Hey op,

      I am agree with K Meier.
      Pls recheck once before to give a start..

      Originally Posted by K Meier View Post

      Very plain and vide took too long to load.

      If I wouldn't have visited the website for a review, I would have clicked away within 3 seconds. Nothing there to catch my eye, no graphics, no color, no text standing out and it took over 10 seconds for the video to load.
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  • Please check now. Video should load very fast now.
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  • Profile picture of the author Ron Killian
    Since there's not much of a design, seems this is more to get people to your site
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    • Originally Posted by Ron Killian View Post

      Since there's not much of a design, seems this is more to get people to your site
      Really? You insult me.

      Go back to what ever it is you do.
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  • Profile picture of the author zubizubi
    You need to give importance to your website loading time.
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  • Profile picture of the author Kingfish85
    Unfortunately, I wouldn't subscribe to or purchase anything at that site. The design is plain black/white that reminds me of something I'd see in a spam email, or on TV at 3 in the morning.

    I would think about changing the picture in your presentation as well.....

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  • Profile picture of the author Crimson Penguin
    I'm afraid I would have to agree with the rest of the comments here. Calling it a 'site' would be a little generous as you only have a few pages, as far as I can tell. The design is plain and simple and not in the good minimalist way but in the bad spammy way. Sorry to sound harsh but it's probably best to be honest.

    Visually it's not very appealing and the content doesn't appear to be very attractive or attention grabbing. Also I couldn't see any controls for the video which actually caused me to navigate away from your page because it seemed a bit spammy. If I were you I wouldn't have the video autoplay at the start. I know you want people to view it but assuming people are searching for what you are selling, I'm sure they will play it on their own accord. Having the video playing straight away without any control distracts the viewer from reading your content. Admittedly there is not much content on the page but then this is probably something you should also address.
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  • Profile picture of the author Shack0812
    The only improvement I can tell is the header, or that top part with Attention. Make it a title or something that stands-out. It has no readability.
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    • Profile picture of the author arny660
      Hi Thomas

      The site took too long to load up. I definitely would have not have waited for it if it wasn't for the fact that I was going to review it.

      When it did load up, my first thoughts were that it was too plain. I did not find it an attractive site and, to be honest, I would have left the site more or less immediately.

      I really do intend to be negative just for the sake of it, but the voice on the video didn't appeal to me either - I'm not sure if it's your own voice or not, but there was just something I didn't trust trust about. Of course that's just my opinion and the tone of the voice probably brings up a memory for me that others won't have. The person spoke to fast and I felt like I was being ordered around.

      I would definitely think of re-jigging the whole site. Speed up the loading time and make the site a bit more colorful. It would not appeal to me in its present form.

      Arny
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  • Profile picture of the author Blindbiz
    I agree with all the comments. I am an expert in Business Opportunities and Franchisees. The FTC will stop you from using the term franchise in any of your marketing. I know I've franchisees 2 different companies. You are setting yourself up for a bunch of trouble, 27 states each have different rules regarding franchisees. It makes NO difference if you are the anti franchise the don't buy a franchise or a faux franchise. If you use the word your telling the public your a franchise. Get legal advice first and start over. Next month the rules change for business opportunities and you are defiantly in violation of the new rules.
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  • Profile picture of the author patco
    Looks great, but it is loading a little bit slow, you can check why is this // Congrats for the great website
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    • Originally Posted by patco View Post

      Looks great, but it is loading a little bit slow, you can check why is this // Congrats for the great website
      I checked it with 3rd party sites and it loads in 1.54 seconds in general. However, I want .5 or better
      So new domain, new keywords, edited video and more servers
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      • Profile picture of the author Kingfish85
        Originally Posted by Thomas Prendergast View Post

        I checked it with 3rd party sites and it loads in 1.54 seconds in general. However, I want .5 or better
        So new domain, new keywords, edited video and more servers
        It's not the site itself. They are talking about the flash video.

        Here's what I suggest you do.

        1. Look at some other sites that are in this same "type" of marketing scheme. I don't know exactly what it's called.

        2. Try to make is less "spammy". Any site that says ATTENTION: YOU'RE GETTING MILLIONS OF DOLLARS OF INFO FOR FREE or BECOME A MILLIONAIRE BY BUYING THIS PRODUCT will end up pushing people away.

        3. Scrap the site & consult with a web designer. Don't mean to sound harsh, but that's my opinion.
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        • Originally Posted by Kingfish85 View Post

          2. Try to make is less "spammy". Any site that says ATTENTION: YOU'RE GETTING MILLIONS OF DOLLARS OF INFO FOR FREE or BECOME A MILLIONAIRE BY BUYING THIS PRODUCT will end up pushing people away.

          3. Scrap the site & consult with a web designer. Don't mean to sound harsh, but that's my opinion.
          Where does it say that?

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          3. Scrap the site & consult with a web designer. Don't mean to sound harsh, but that's my opinion.
          You know what they say about opinions, like a** holes, everyone has one.
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          • Profile picture of the author Kingfish85
            Originally Posted by Thomas Prendergast View Post

            Where does it say that?

            RE:

            I was using that saying as an example. Here's what your site actually says:

            ATTENTION: THE FOLLOWING PRESENTATION EXPOSES IMPORTANT ADVANCEMENTS FROM THE TRADITIONAL BUSINESS FRANCHISE MODEL.
            Further information by invitation only.


            Originally Posted by Thomas Prendergast View Post

            You know what they say about opinions, like a** holes, everyone has one.
            It is what it is. You posted here asking for a review of your site. I gave you a review, and told you what I thought. Judging by the other sites in your signature, I personally would think they are either a joke, or some kind of scam. Why don't you take your sites over to an actual web design forum and ask what they think? That is what you posted in the "Website Design > Site Review Requested" forum for correct? Seems to me like you don't like criticism, even though you ask for other peoples opinions.

            If you don't like the comments, then don't post here asking for them. Pretty simple.
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            • Originally Posted by Kingfish85 View Post

              I was using that saying as an example. Here's what your site actually says:

              ATTENTION: THE FOLLOWING PRESENTATION EXPOSES IMPORTANT ADVANCEMENTS FROM THE TRADITIONAL BUSINESS FRANCHISE MODEL.
              Further information by invitation only.




              It is what it is. You posted here asking for a review of your site. I gave you a review, and told you what I thought. Judging by the other sites in your signature, I personally would think they are either a joke, or some kind of scam. Why don't you take your sites over to an actual web design forum and ask what they think? That is what you posted in the "Website Design > Site Review Requested" forum for correct? Seems to me like you don't like criticism, even though you ask for other peoples opinions.

              If you don't like the comments, then don't post here asking for them. Pretty simple.
              Pretty thin skinned aren't you? Yes I asked for critical contributions and I have been receiving them, except you. Your comments are rude and offer no relevant value. Just bug off.
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              • Profile picture of the author Kingfish85
                Originally Posted by Thomas Prendergast View Post

                Pretty thin skinned aren't you? Yes I asked for critical contributions and I have been receiving them, except you. Your comments are rude and offer no relevant value. Just bug off.
                What exactly about my feedback offered "no relevant value"? I told you exactly what I thought of your site.
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                • Originally Posted by Kingfish85 View Post

                  What exactly about my feedback offered "no relevant value"? I told you exactly what I thought of your site.
                  My last reply to you. "I have no desire to engage you in any form of communication. Your ego is off the scale and there is no value to continue this foolish diatribe with the likes of you".

                  Drop it.
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                  • Profile picture of the author Kingfish85
                    Originally Posted by Thomas Prendergast View Post

                    My last reply to you. "I have no desire to engage you in any form of communication. Your ego is off the scale and there is no value to continue this foolish diatribe with the likes of you".

                    Drop it.
                    Ego is off the scale... Like I said, go over to a web design forum and ask them. They will validate everything I told you.
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  • Profile picture of the author juny0909
    Your site looks good, its clean, simple, and to the point.
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  • Profile picture of the author jleavitt13
    I agree with a lot of the advice you have been given here. But why dont you just use a wordpress template to add a little bit more design to the site. I very much understand what you are trying to accomplish with it, but it needs a little more.... Just some contextual framing, there are so many free wordpress themes for sale pages and opt-in pages and they are easy to use.
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  • No thank you WP is the last thing I need. I am a student of David Ogilvy. Thank you for your kind advice.
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