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My new squeeze page- Need critics

by swatz89
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Hello. This is my first squeeze page and I want you to critcize my site and point out the mistake which is done in my squeeze page. Also pls tell me how to rectify the mistake. The thing I wanna know are:-

1) Is my title catchy?
2) Hows the theme that I used?
3) Placement of the image of ebook.
4) Fonts and colours uses.
5) Bullet points.
6) Any other mistakes.

I havent included autoresponder in my squeeze page and also I havent removed the "Just another Wordpress". So pls ignore them. My site is still in updating phase. Also if u know how to remove content missing, archives by category and archives by month things then pls help me.

This is my link Insane Instant Cash
Cheers.
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  • Profile picture of the author Shaun OReilly
    So, your headline is:
    This Step by Step Insane Blueprint Will Flood your Inbox with $100-$200 within 48 hours instantly.
    Notice anything about that headline?

    Like...

    It's full of hype.

    It's not credible.

    It's ridiculous.

    Why would any semi-intelligent visitor read any further?

    If you're going to set-up a squeeze page then do it on
    a topic you know something about.

    Until you do that, it's doesn't matter what you put on
    the page.

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    • Profile picture of the author swatz89
      Originally Posted by Shaun OReilly View Post

      So, your headline is:

      Notice anything about that headline?

      Like...

      It's full of hype.

      It's not credible.

      It's ridiculous.

      Why would any semi-intelligent visitor read any further?

      If you're going to set-up a squeeze page then do it on
      a topic you know something about.

      Until you do that, it's doesn't matter what you put on
      the page.

      Dedicated to mutual success,

      Shaun
      ok so i should remove it. can u give example of any good headline.
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  • Profile picture of the author Cataclysm1987
    I particularly take issue with the word insane. Huh? What? Are you in a straight jacket making money online because your strategy is so effective?
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    • Profile picture of the author swatz89
      Originally Posted by Cataclysm1987 View Post

      I particularly take issue with the word insane. Huh? What? Are you in a straight jacket making money online because your strategy is so effective?
      ok thanks for the opinion? i will change it. anything else other then that. cheers.
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  • Profile picture of the author JeremiahSay
    Hi there, I've seen your squeeze page and I've 3 advise for you:

    1) Headline can certainly be improve..
    2) A use of better template.. Specifically for squeeze-page FREE Video - It's Time to Work Smart Instead of Just Working Hardautomated-passive-income.com <-- example.
    3) Your freebie image quality isn't good at all.. should probably think of changing or improving it.

    Hope this help,
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    • Profile picture of the author swatz89
      Originally Posted by JeremiahSay View Post

      Hi there, I've seen your squeeze page and I've 3 advise for you:

      1) Headline can certainly be improve..
      2) A use of better template.. Specifically for squeeze-page FREE Video - It's Time to Work Smart Instead of Just Working Hardautomated-passive-income.com <-- example.
      3) Your freebie image quality isn't good at all.. should probably think of changing or improving it.

      Hope this help,
      Jeremiah
      u know i m noob at css and i found this template simple. i dont know how to remove menu tabs such as home, about, etc so in this template i havent found things like that. its a one column template. talking abt pic, yes i was also thinking of changing it. thnx for ur opinion.
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  • Profile picture of the author KevinW
    I think it needs a lot of work. In IE the text and images aren't centered. No optin fields can be seen.
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    • Profile picture of the author swatz89
      Originally Posted by KevinW View Post

      I think it needs a lot of work. In IE the text and images aren't centered. No optin fields can be seen.
      yeah i know that it needs work, thats y i asked the opinion. i alread mentioned that i haven't included autoresponder form. cheers.
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  • Profile picture of the author Mike Hill
    Man this is the definition of what the FTC doesn't want to see. It reeks of scum!

    1) False claims
    2) Blurry product image
    3) No optin form
    4) No call to action
    5) No proof elements
    6) No overcoming objections

    You're missing quite a bit, not to mention the visual appeal is horrific.
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    • Profile picture of the author swatz89
      Originally Posted by Mike Hill View Post

      Man this is the definition of what the FTC doesn't want to see. It reeks of scum!

      1) False claims
      2) Blurry product image
      3) No optin form
      4) No call to action
      5) No proof elements
      6) No overcoming objections

      You're missing quite a bit, not to mention the visual appeal is horrific.
      thanks for pointing out the mistakes.
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  • Profile picture of the author jamesrich1
    Mike Hill covered just about everything. My suggestion is to get optimize press. My 11 year old daughter can make more appealing squeeze pages half awake. No insult to you just letting you know how easy it is to create appealing squeeze pages. After I started using optimize press I honestly do not know how I got by before.
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    • Profile picture of the author swatz89
      Originally Posted by jamesrich1 View Post

      Mike Hill covered just about everything. My suggestion is to get optimize press. My 11 year old daughter can make more appealing squeeze pages half awake. No insult to you just letting you know how easy it is to create appealing squeeze pages. After I started using optimize press I honestly do not know how I got by before.
      thanks for ur suggestion, but i dnt have cash to buy it. thnx.
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  • Profile picture of the author ifeanyiboy
    Everybody is so ruthless here. But amazing advice nonetheless
    Take a look at as much squeeze pages as you can and do your best to emulate those. Only instead of using the original cliche language that so many internet marketers use. Be original. The more honest you are then the more people will be interested because honesty in this area is unheard of.
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  • Profile picture of the author fenixpro
    Yes, mike did seem to cover it all. I would use a solid and proven converting page. Just google it or look here, there are plenty. Also, for some reason, all your copy is squared to the left instead of down the middle. It looks more like a paper you are writing than a squeeze page. Again, look at examples of successful pages and base from there. They are not hard to find. There are also free squeeze page creators out there. Squeeze Page Creator - Get Yours Now For Free!

    Just a reference. Not my site
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    • Profile picture of the author swatz89
      Originally Posted by fenixpro View Post

      Yes, mike did seem to cover it all. I would use a solid and proven converting page. Just google it or look here, there are plenty. Also, for some reason, all your copy is squared to the left instead of down the middle. It looks more like a paper you are writing than a squeeze page. Again, look at examples of successful pages and base from there. They are not hard to find. There are also free squeeze page creators out there. Squeeze Page Creator - Get Yours Now For Free!

      Just a reference. Not my site
      i know abt the squeeze page creator, but i dont know abt how to install it on server. can u help me out, if u can give me tutorial link it will be helpful to me. cheers.
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  • Profile picture of the author HelpingYouBeAnExpert
    I would get a template like optimize press you can get much better looking squeeze pages. Let me know if you need an affiliate link i can send you one
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  • Profile picture of the author christinelong
    1) Is my title catchy? - You need this to be the most attention grabbing of all. It doesn't make sense to recieve within 48 hours INSTANTLY....
    2) Hows the theme that I used? Squeeze pages really shouldn't be a Wordpress theme, you can use a standard html page. Google this: Fresh Squeeze - it's a nice looking free template
    3) Placement of the image of ebook. The image should preferably be at the top by the form. Also, it looks a little blurry.
    4) Fonts and colours uses. - Fonts should remain consistent, yours are all different. It's ok to use different fonts for your images, but try to stick with standard fonts like Verdana for your text.
    5) Bullet points. - Use some checkmarks or stars for your bulletpoints to make them stand out more.
    6) Any other mistakes. - If you are going to use color for your fonts, use it for the headline. Keep fonts and colors consistent.

    Looks alot better than my first page!
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