Need feedback on my squeeze page

For squeezepage I think you should direct testing about how convert is your squeezepage. Feedback will bring you nothing. Just spy your real visitors for your champaign. Don't waste so much money just reading some people think like: "
oh your page need...this...that...don't this...don't that...etc"

Try condensing the page. When I open the page I have to scroll down.
Also try putting it into columns to make it look neater.
It doesn't look professional enough for me to consider giving you my email.

Hope the feedback helps.

Basically, pretty good. 2 thumbs up.

Not much to do except give your name and email address, that's really good. Lots of people get that part wrong, yours is good that way.

It might be good to keep the wording consistent, on the cover its says Great steps, on the for Forgotten steps. Have your tried everything - should be Have you tried everything.

There's an extra weasel phrase on the cover that you don't use anywhere else, "begin the process" and on the form side it says "Will bring back"

English is a funny language sometimes, the words Completely Free sound like you are going to get them back completely free, not get the ebook completely free.

The yellow color on your form does not look so hot on the gray background.

These are little things. Now that you have a squeeze page, you can test things out and see which works better. 2 thumbs up for doing this.

Quick feedback:

Your sign up form is below the fold. The action you want people to take should be visible without them having to scroll down to it IMO

Replace your logo, it is pixelated and this makes it look unprofessional. Either replace it or resize it to its native resolution and find a way of integrating it.

Overall there's a bit too much spacing between your paragraphs and points. I know you don't want to crowd the reader with info but I feel it's a bit to patchy at present.

Overall not a bad first effort but I think there are a couple of improvements to be made.Best of luck!

A few things I would change.

The main logo on your page looks a little pixelated around the edges. If you did it in Photoshop you may just need to change the anti-aliasing setting for the text.

The layout looks cluttered.

Your main selling point should be your book, "GetLoveBack." Right?

If it is, make it clear.

Instead, I see you're advertising the book "Get Love Back," then you're talking about another book, T"he 5 Forgotten Steps to Get Your Love Back," and then you talk about a Free Membership?

I would just focus on one thing.

Got dumped?

Desperate to get her back?

Here are 5 tricks that will make her CRAZY to get back with you.

Where do I send you my magic formula?

*Enter Email*

I'm sure you can think of something way better than that.

Just remember, your main objective is to quickly latch onto you victim's, err.. visitor's emotional triggers. You want them to immediately feel the need to want your information.

And don't bother asking them to enter their name for the opt in. It'll only lower your conversions. And you don't need it anyways.

Also, I see that you're using the AppSumo landing page template. I'd use the little question function built in instead of immediately asking for the opt in. Some people may see it as off-putting to see that big "enter your email" box when they arrive on a page.

Make it a stupid question any guy that just got dumped will be compelled to answer. And then unleash the optin box on them. Something like,

*How bad do you want her back?*

A. Meh, I'm doing alright
B. Kinda..
C. Are you kidding me? I'm miserable without her!

Then once they answer,

*So, tell me where to send you the guide*

That's just to get them in the mindset of completing steps. Step 1: Question, Step 2: Email.

One further point it's a UK (.co.uk) domain yet the pricing is in dollars this seems a little confusing to me.

Also, your ebook cover looks a bit, amateurish.

For around $5 you can get it done for you here, and it'll look a little better.

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Thanks for the feedback guys! Will take it all on board. Actually I know the ebook cover is not great ha, and also the logo is pixelated because I did scale it up, going to re-do both tonight so that they are CRISP and CLEAR.

Also thanks for feedback on the overall layout and wording, some FANTASTIC advice given and have really given me s ome great ideas I will be changing it up slightly later and will post back.

You may put a few emotional buttons in there about not only "Do you want them back?" but insert the emotion of how much better their life will be once they retrieve the person.

There a lot of things that call your attention but it doesn't resonate enough for me emotionally to go ahead and subscribe. Also try to avoid using light colored text over a lightly colored background.

ok, I have updated the squeeze page. It is now much more condensed and on my laptop at least I do not have to scroll. All the content is within the screen. I actually better check on lower resolutions...

Anyway I took the comments posted earlier and tried to put as many of them into effect as possible. Well still got the ebook cover to update as the current one looks TERRIBLE...

Again feedback would be great

p.s. like I said IGNORE THE EBOOK COVER!!

ok, the ebook has been updated...

So how is this working out for you, swiftstep? Getting many opt-ins?

Looks much better!

I like the contrasting navy/maroon colors, the bullet arrows, and the fact that your call to action is clear, and straight to the point.

Also, the ebook cover looks great. Awesome turnaround!

Its perfect.....and good idea to get subscribers!

best wishes

VGM

It looks good. But i would rather say "desperate to HER back" instead of using them. It's like you are telling someone to get all the girls men wants. A boy would only love one girl, isn't it? LOL Just a thought you that you might want to use HER instead of THEM. Make it sound like you are talking to someone like you know what is happening to him. But over all it looks good to me.

I will give the following ways to make it a good response taker....

Give your page a feel in the background which is i feel absent at the moment.
Give the page more details about who owns the page & what he is actually offering the traffic.

This way you can keep the readers for long & have them subscribed in good faith

ok so according to getresponse my page has had 159 views (some of them where probably me when testing the page etc) and have only managed ONE subscriber to join my list. thats TERRIBLE and must be because my squeeze page is crappy!

I need more feedback or some advice. Maybe this is normal? But I don't think so!

I would provide my squeeze page link but don't want to risk giving away too much. So I will PM it if you want to see the page.

thanks a bunch.