Squeeze Page Review Please

I think your squeeze page looks great...
but I agree with the others...your page takes a looooooong time to load.

I didn't see any graphics on your page that would cause it to load so slowly,
so it might be a problem with the web server your hosting your page on.
This tends to happen a lot on shared servers.

If the problem persist, you might want to contact the site administrator
or upgrade to a dedicated server.

aesthetically speaking.. the graphics look great! great work.

as for the text/copy.. needs work. Here's big tip I'd recommend..

#1. Be more specific.. about EVERYTHING..

don't just tell people they'll be successful.. tell them you'll teach them a little known youtube hack to bank $543.34 using free traffic..

Vague:

How to become a profitable affiliate?
what is profitable? 10 cents? 50 cents? $3? $50?

Step-By-Step checklist to affiliate success ?
what is affiliate success? what does that mean?

Headline of 'free guide to entrepeneur millionaire today ? what does that mean.. why do I want it.. etc.

So do you see where specifics really make it sound like you have a plan and know what you're talking about..


Headline -

"Free Guide to Become an Entrepeneur Millionaire Today'

could be something like:

Discover 1 Weird ancient Japanese secret to 3x your Profit In 2013 in The Next 2 Weeks."

"Shocking Report Reveals How a Redneck Broke Farmer Banked $532,305 and Became an Entrepenaire in Just 30 days!"


Free Report: Reveals a 3 Step Formula to ________ in just ____ Using the Little Known Entreprenaire Method!"

< see the specificity? Specific times. Specific dates. Specific Numbers.


Build Your Online Fortune With Entreprenaire's Affiliate Blueprint! Get it now FREE!

Nobody want's to build anything.. that sounds like work

Discover the Unconventional Method to to Create a Massive Online Empire In Just ___! Hurry Limited Time Offer...



Affiliate Blueprint < change this to something that sounds more exciting.

Affiliate Espionage Blueprint..
Commission Payday Blueprint
Commission Killer Formula
Massive Commission Siphon
Commission Tsunami..


Bullet Points - Use the examples of stuff I just came up with to come up with your own.


'Get Your Ebook Now'

An 'ebook' has very low perceived value... so I try to use words like ' Guide / System / Report / formula / etc. '

Claim Your Free Guide Now!
Claim this Controversial Guide While you still Can!


Email Address / Name.

I don't ever ask for Name anymore. it really decreases your opt in rate..
and is unnecessary. Having their first name is cool for sending out emails with it either in the subject line or email copy.. but it's really not as effective as it used to be. most people are immune to it and realize it's just mass email / spam.

So I'd recommend just asking for email address and watch as your opt in rate soars.


I did a whole video series for on how to make bad ass squeeze pages..


There ya go. yours free

you just got hooked up.

-Jarrett