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Unread 7th August 2013, 06:32 AM   #1
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Default Mywebgrid.com - please criticize our landing page

We would like to try to to replace two mass services - Google Reader and iGoogle and couple of other services.

However we are still working on the backend, we prepared the whole new landing page (http://mywebgrid.com)

Do you think it is cool? We tried to be funny, but we the question is whether it is funny :-). We plan to launch later a "serious version", this should be used for a viral marketing.

We will appreciate any kind of feedback before we promote it. Thank you!



PS: This is not a Socialbakers' project :-)

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Unread 7th August 2013, 07:12 AM   #2
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I find the "humor" far too crude to be funny, but that's just me and a lot of other people. The rest of the world may enjoy it though, I guess they will need to chime in.

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Unread 7th August 2013, 07:58 AM   #3
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We would like to try to to replace two mass services - Google Reader and iGoogle and couple of other services.
That's very ambitious, but highly unlikely.

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Do you think it is cool?
Nope! Not cool at all.

1. The use of language seems geared towards the age range of 12 to 15.
Is that your target audience?

2. Your not so funny marketing strategy may have some legal implications "if" it goes viral, as it becomes a tad more serious than a simple non commercial "Google sucks" blog post by some kid. I'm not a lawyer, but I'm quite certain that marketing a product by "publicly" insulting, peeing on, and slaying a competitor might result in a "not so funny" reponse from them. You might want to look into that?

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We tried to be funny, but we the question is whether it is funny :-).
Nope! Not funny at all. It was leaning more towards "sad".

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Alrright, thanks for the feedback.

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I agree with both above comments. Always keep it professional and keep your reputation winning so people will take your business and you serious.
All the best.

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Unread 7th August 2013, 12:28 PM   #6
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That's very ambitious, but highly unlikely.
It is very likely as we already have it done.

We have a team of very skillful programmers. And maybe I should point out we did not start with developing those tools yesterday, but we are working on it for a couple of months (and getting to the final stage).

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Unread 7th August 2013, 12:44 PM   #7
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It is very likely as we already have it done.

We have a team of very skillful programmers. And maybe I should point out we did not start with developing those tools yesterday, but we are working on it for a couple of months (and getting to the final stage).
I don't think they were saying that it's unlikely you'd create the service itself - anyone could hire a freelancer to do that or even use some of the premade clones that thousands of other websites have used to try to copy iGoogle and Google Reader.

What is unlikely is that you'll actually succeed in replacing them or gaining any significant market share.

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I don't think they were saying that it's unlikely you'd create the service itself - anyone could hire a freelancer to do that or even use some of the premade clones that thousands of other websites have used to try to copy iGoogle and Google Reader.

What is unlikely is that you'll actually succeed in replacing them or gaining any significant market share.
Maybe that is why we simple do not do the clone. If you check our website, you will know what additional services we will offer to our users.

We did several global project and succeed. I do not know why we should not succeed there as well. But we will see in couple of months .

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That landing page is terrible. Bad jokes aside, I've got absolutely no idea what you're trying to sell and the only hint is what you wrote in this thread.

When I land on your page I should know straight away what you are selling or offering and there should be a clear flow and call to action.

(I just noticed the small and faded "iGoogle replacement" in the header. This should be front and centre - and work off it from there. This isn't an info product selling a dream that has to rely on flowery words and manipulation, you just have to tell your audience that Mywebgrid is the superior iGoogle replacement - and why).

Good luck - I'd start from scratch.

Oh, no one cares about your crew, unless they are a superstar with an instantly recognisable name. More effort has gone into their profiles than the useful copy. Use that space for testimonials from some popular bloggers with a lot of reach.

Oh, and I just saw that footer. Are you serious? ::

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Oh, and I just saw that footer. Are you serious? ::
I think it is obvious that we did not intend to be serious.

To be honest we actually do not sell anything. So maybe that is why you did not get it....

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Unread 8th August 2013, 06:11 AM   #11
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Sorry, It does nothing for me.

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Unread 8th August 2013, 08:06 AM   #12
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The page was far too weird for me.

I left after bout 10 seconds of trying to figure out what the page was actually about. Others will do the same.

If you have something worth while for people then tell them exactly what it is and how it's going to make their life easier. If people can't tell within about 3 seconds of landing on the page what it's all about, they will leave.

You could have the greatest product in the world but if no one knows what it does, you won't have any users.

Get rid of all the fluff. I didn't find it funny or 'viral-worthy' either. Just get back to telling people what your tool does for them.

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The rest of the world may enjoy it though, I guess they will need to chime in.
Glad to see I'm wrong on this point. After reading the profiles and footer (Which I hadn't before), I have changed my mind on what I think...

I no longer think it's merely a crude attempt at humor, I think it's one of the best examples of what not to do I possibly have ever seen.

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What's with all the profanity? This is suppose to be serious. I cannot recommend this service. Yeah, it is NSFW or Not Safe For Work man. Get a clue and get rid of the gray.

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Default Re: Mywebgrid.com - please criticize our landing page

Humor is very tricky to use in marketing copy. You're likely
to get some people not finding it funny. Also if the humor
hides your message (as in this case), then it become a handicap
rather than a help.

You don't have to do a lot of education on your tool since
your competition is so well known. But a quick comparative
chart with these competitors will go a long, long way into
getting your message across.

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Unread 8th August 2013, 08:52 AM   #16
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I will leave the critisizing of not so funny humor to the other folks above. Your landing page has too many exit points to get the idea out of focus from visitors mind. I had to think what exactly this guy is trying to say. Not sure if that is what your marketing message is.

A landing page should give clear vision of what the whole stuff is about, give few strong benefits and and a simple (not so strong) call to action. If you have testimonies do include.

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My instinct as a potential user is that you need to scrap the racism and the like (shemale? Seriously?) and hire a native English speaker to rewrite your copy. I'm not adverse to humor (I like the little graveyard), but this reads as nonsensical, not clever.

If you're going to pull the humor card, you need to impress me. Executed well (though I'm not sure if there are legal ramifications to name dropping Joffrey directly) this could be entertaining, but there's no margin for error. Left as is, nobody is going to take you seriously.

And yeah, a swear or two in conversation is fine, but they don't belong on your website. It's too jarring.
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I think it is obvious that we did not intend to be serious.
Oh, I know it was meant to be funny, but it's not; it is racist.

Selling or free? It doesn't matter. I don't think there are many here who understood what you're offering and that's the main problem with your landing page.

Have a read of Landing Page and Conversion Optimization Blog | Unbounce and Learning Zone | Conversion Rate Experts and pay attention to the simplicity and straight to the point nature a successful landing page usually has.

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I get it.
It was cool and fun.
Fresh, but not dark fresh.

The graphics look more like Halloween than
the death of iG. The top graphic looks
like something they "G" would use on on the
homepage at Halloween.

Replace the shemale concept with something
dualistic about iG. Be the bigger guy. Replace
alot of "what some here may deem as bad taste"
with less vocab and more expensive words. Make
fun of their faults more, like how obsolete the
platform has become. lol now that's funny.

The first peekaboo box? Telling someone to
google it, is as dumb as asking a question
these days.

I mean, I see the king is dead but, I don't buy it.
I think it's the graphics, they are good. But the
grown up kids your targeting have to already
know you to take this seriously, that's because
the design over shadows ,that huge header.

sidenot my opinion means absolutely nothing
and can change upon re-visiting the site.


I could go on because, I'm nit picky, but alas it's a fault I have to deal with.

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To make a long story short.... your landing page sucks. It really does.
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I'd be pressed to see that a target audience with money to spend are in the same group of people that will enjoy your copywriting skills. If you have a serious offering I'd seriously consider a re-write - and perhaps pull that page before it gets overly indexed!
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Honestly, there's nothing I need to say further, the above posts did a great job in giving honest opinions about your landing page

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I am going to follow this and use it as a case study for how not to launch an SAAS. Listen to what the people here are saying.

Case in point, your footer might be considered borderline racist by most Westerners:

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