PeterBenson

I am not a web designer or a copy writer however I need a honest opinion of my website that has taken me me almost 2 months to complete. I am not acquainted with html I just used 90secondswebsitebuilder. Please, advice me, let me know what changes will improve my website. My website address is EarnMillionsOffline.com

Peter Benson

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chaumi

First things I noticed, sorry it's negative but will help you:

Page took a long time to load, if I was a normal searcher would probably have given up. It's probably caused by the images.

Handful of spelling mistakes.

One or two of the blocks containing text are not positioned properly.

All adds up to a likely perception from a visitor that the site is not professional/trustworthy.

Anrkist

It's bad... real bad. Tell me, why do you think this will make you money? I'm genuinely curious. You have no concept of what making a website is about. You spent 2 months with a program called "90secondwebsitebuilder"? You would have better spent your time learning real HTML/CSS along with understanding what a website is about.

I get it though, this forum is full of spam.

Kezz

Ouch that was a wee bit harsh!

I understand. Web design isn't easy, and I think everyone can look back at their first site and see how much their design style has evolved over time. I do web design full time for a living, and the sites I make now are very different from my very first site. That site, in fact, is better than my own first site, which was also make with a site building program.

Well done for taking the initiative to make your own site. The hard part is writing the copy. You can easily swap in some fresh graphics and change up the look if you so desire.

A few constructive suggestions for you. Try to avoid using primary colours like standard red, green, blue and yellow. It's always best to use shades and keep the number of colours used in your site graphics to around three at most. You can then just vary the shades of those colours.

chaumi's advice is also good to ease up on the images. For one, it will speed up the load time of your site, and secondly sometimes less is more with web design. Sometimes if you hold back a little and try to be a bit subtle, you can create more of an impression that you are in demand. That is, you are giving people the opportunity to come to you, rather than you are chasing them.

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Good luck with your site!

geekspeak

I'd suggest giving the visitor the ability to buy your product a number of times in your copy rather than just at the bottom.
Good luck.

lb1234

check out yahoo site builder. See if that is much easier for you.

talewins

You do have a lot of pictures and they do definitely slow down delivery. Kezz gives some good advice and great support. I would suggest moving your pictures way down the page. Move the section with your picture way up the page, and then concentrate on telling your story in text for at least the first fold.
Ideally you should break this page up into 3 or 4 sections with links to them from the front page. Give away a free bonus just for visiting those new sections.

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dollardomainstore

Ay Chihuahua! That's not a testimonial they'd want to put on their site!

On a serious note, I suggest you reduce some space between the steps. It almost looks like 200px of white space before it continues the content.

Adjusting the spacing will make the content more digestible because when a site loads and the scroll bar is small (meaning...there's a LOT to scroll through), people sometimes get discouraged.

I like your headlines. They're big and you can't miss em.

PeterBenson

I really appreciate all your suggestions besides one warrior "Anrkist" was extremely critical missing the point. I am not here to spam, my intention is to get help.

I did some major changes please let me know what you think, be professionally critical and to the point.

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LastWarrior

I see several changes that I would suggest. I'll jot just a few down:

1.) Term "millions" is over used and now has negative connotations, more or less because it sounds far-fetched and reaches a dollar amount most people think is beyond their capabilities. If you could narrow down a specific amount, like "Make $14,737 in your first month...", that would sound more credible, reasonable and attainable. I know it's built into the site and the package offered, but seems to me the emphasis should be more about what's in it for the buyer.(didn't read all of sales message)

2.) Once your website loads and you see it within your window... if you drew a line across the bottom of the viewing window, this is called the fold. The area above the fold is the most valuable eProperty on your site. Statistics vary, but the average guy will look at your site and read/observe for about 10 seconds and if you don't get his attention, he'll leave. And if you a woman sees your site, will leave in 7 seconds if not interested. LOL! In that area above the fold, you have to present a strong message(headline) that segues into a sub-headline that pulls the reader further into the site process.

3.) Might help to find similar products, ie, software, reports, manuals or eBooks and offer them as bonuses along with the asking price. Over delivering is hardly something the purchaser complains about. Looks like you have bonuses, but they're easy to overlook because there's no pictures or dollar values attached to them.

4.) Statistics vary, but states the buyer must see a sales message 7-11 times before a purchase decision is made. Most likely a potential buyer will check out your site, if they get past the fold and never come back... unless you do something. However, if create a hot offer via an optin form, you can use an autoresponder to keep track of their name and eMail, so that later you can market to them again with well thought and written sales messages, etc. Have the optin message compelling, something free and have it above the fold if possible and if not, close to it. Create a folder, call it "swipe file" and go out and see other people's optin messages and copy/simulate the ones you like. Place this info into the folder for later use.

5.) Yes, several spelling and grammar errors. Tighten this up. Maybe by asking what and where are the errors. I know virtuall should only have one l. Goldmine is usually used as a compound word.

6.) For various reasons, I need to right-click on a page... maybe to save info or something similar. Honestly, in my opinion, the disable text script accomplishes little in terms of security. There's usually a work around for these. If I wanted graphics or pics, I could simply do a printscreen, crop/edit & save it.

There are many good things in the site I see and like, but you wanted a critique, so there's my nickel's worth. LOL! It's not bad.

Take care and good luck,

LastWarrior

Kezz

Good on you for sticking at it despite some pretty harsh feedback Peter. It's not easy! That kind of perseverance will get you results, guaranteed.

It's definitely MUCH MUCH better than before. Well done! It's a great choice to increase the amount of whitespace in your site. It instantly strikes me as much more professional.

I see you went ahead and pulled back on the primary color usage, which is much better. I'd still like to see a different shade of green than the one you have. If you pick a less standard green it will make things look a little less 'out-of-the-box'.

It's also WAAAY better with the reduced image count. Your use of images is much much better this time around. Nice job.

That's a lot of really great feedback from Last Warrior. I would certainly listen to all his points. Particularly about the content above the fold. Reducing the font size of those initial messages would take you part way to getting more of a hook in above the fold.

Overall, good work and kudos to you for sticking at it.

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luckystar

Hello,
I really appreciate your effort. the fault i can talk of is that the colours are so shouting and is like blog instead of website.

Improve in spelling and reduce the content as not everybody can or will be ready to read all those things.

The fact is that you did a nice job going by your level.

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Wow brother a lot of big stuffs there. Make them little and split in pages.

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PeterBenson

Thanks for your suggestions especially the "Last warrior' and "Kezz". I will implement these suggestions over the weekend. As a matter of fact English is not my first language so finally I must hire a proof reader.
Once more thank you for your professional criticism and encouragement.

Peter Benson

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PeterBenson

I've done some changes on my website after help from some very kind warriors, please can you give me further suggestions?
I am really grateful for all your support.

Peter Benson

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Kezz

Hey Peter,

Really great work and persistence. It's very cool seeing the site improve stage by stage every time you post back here. You've done a great job incorporating the feedback everyone has given you.

Goodbye bright green, have a nice trip!

I think everything is much more on the mark now. I think probably the best thing you could do to keep polishing up is to get some graphics for it that are a little more sharp. Sometimes its easier to just get some ready made graphics and use them in your design.

For example, your Step 1 circular graphics has some pretty harsh pixelation around the edges. I'm sure it's the best that can be generated with the tools available, but this is one case where it might be better to get a premade "1" graphic and insert it. There's a tonne of stuff around that you can use. You'll find plenty with a few google searches. Some nice premade graphics can really make a website pop.

Great work again Peter, I'm impressed!

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Pixulated

IMO it's alright but it's not fluid enough and it looks as if you've just dumped a load of pictures just anywhere.

Paul McCormick

yeah, i agree with the previous comments about the pictures looking misplaced, I didnt find any problems with the load time though, it came up on my machine straight away...

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Page took a little longer than expected to load for me too.

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jimisan

If this is your first website, Peter, I think you did well...Just like a newborn baby...we don't walk and run the moment we came out of our mother's womb. Comparatively, you're very much better than me with your website building. I've a full time job and I don't depend on the internet for income. I just started to learn for fun and hoping to gain some experiences.

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Hi peter,
I looked at your website and the very first thing that struck me was, oh Dear, No Form.
Without a Form you have absolutely no chance of gathering Names and Addresses and building your List.

bigdollarsnow

Peter,

My first glance of your website reminded me of the early days. I think that you need to scrap the sitebuilder and use Wordpress or Joomla.

They will give you a more professional look. It still looks to scamish.

I truly believe that you are wasting a lot of time. SCRAP IT and start over. You have some experience and lots of people to help.

I know that change is hard.

jeffdean9297

I've given this tip to many people, but I feel I really need to say it here. If you have a business, or are trying to make money online, don't do things you're not good at. It took you 2 months to do that, and honestly it's not good. I'm not going to sugar coat it. Hire a professional and you'll have something nice in a weeks time and you'll have saved yourself all that time and hassle, AND you'll have a site that does what it's supposed to do. Sell. Hope this helps!!

francesro

Colors kind of loud. I felt like i needed sunglasses. Also reminds me of Christmas although that's not necessarily a bad thing.

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