What Do You Guys Think Graphically?

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Is it TOO much or just right?

#graphic review #graphically #guys
  • Profile picture of the author coog
    I like it, just the right amount IMO. I don't like the lock and key under secure ordering, looks out of place to me. Took me a minute to figure out what it was But see what others think...
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  • Profile picture of the author rawservices
    @coog: I totally forgot to take a new screen shot, that lock is long gone lol. I change the design minute by minute, its amazing how much it can change in 15 mins.
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  • Profile picture of the author WarriorMaster82
    Yeah, you need to 'announce' it more. I had to take a few seconds to realize what this offer was for. But it's graphically amazing.
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  • Profile picture of the author vrostad
    Yes, it looks very professional

    I also agree with warriormaster that it should tell the visitor right away, what you are selling. The "back pain relief" is visable, but not the first thing you see.

    Warmest regards,

    Victor A. Roestad
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  • Profile picture of the author Wasim
    I think the quality is very good but the eyes just don't settle anywhere. I mean that the visitor needs their eyes to atleast settle on something and at the moment it feels as though my eyes panic around the page instead of feeling relaxed and directed.
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  • Profile picture of the author bobmcalister
    me too...the headlline needs to say something like
    NO MORE BACK PAIN>>>EVER
    I had to play detective to find out the solution you offered ...I love the graphics ...is that a cpa offer ? if so , sign me up !
    Signature

    free facebook ad trials . proof before payment

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  • Profile picture of the author rawservices
    Yes it is a cpa offer, and I do agree with everyone about the eyes being thrown around the page.. ugg, it's hard to get everything in that I need.

    I'll try and simplify it, here is what I've done as of this moment, looks kinda different.

    www.backrevolutionsystem.com


    Any more advice would be GREATLY appreciated, it is my first sales page.
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    • Profile picture of the author Wasim
      Just spotted a grammatical error. Sorry to be picky but at the bottom you've written 'It's with you from the time your born'

      It should either read, "It's with you from the time you are born"
      or use the shortened word, "It's with you from the time you're born"
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  • Profile picture of the author rawservices
    fixed, thank you wasim!
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  • Profile picture of the author opx4real
    Lookin Great actually. Very consistent.
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    • Profile picture of the author Wasim
      That looks much better and less cluttered. You've used the word 'the' 2 time at the bottom.

      There was a sentence that you had used, "A cost effective solution to improve the quality of life". I know that you've removed it now but I had an idea about rewording it, but because it was too much to explain I made a tutorial about the importance of words, called, 'The Splitting of Sentences'

      I think the tutorial may come in handy for people who want to word their sentences to be a little more effective in the way that it is read and also visually too.

      I'm just uploading it to youtube now and will let you guys know when they're done if you're interested?
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  • Profile picture of the author rawservices
    Sure, would love to see it wasim
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    • Profile picture of the author Wasim
      Hi guys,

      You can go to my website below in my signature or Youtube Channel. I tried to post a link but I have not posted enough in this forum to be allowed. (I'm still a baby in this forum ..... )

      On my site, the post is called,"Splitting of Sentences"

      I've made a 2 part tutorial about how to split sentences for more effectiveness. Hopefully this helps a few people out. Hope you don't mind ''rawservices" but I used your sentence as an example and how it could be improved.

      PS: I'm a little stuttery when I talk so a little patience might be needed !!!!
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  • Profile picture of the author rawservices
    Nice vid Wasim, thank you for that!
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  • Profile picture of the author Ashley Ann
    The design is great. Love it. TEST TEST TEST.
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  • Profile picture of the author rawservices
    Thank you Ashley!

    I appreciate it very much.
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