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Hai there ,

This site will be my first time I be promoting affiliate via email marketing since most internet marketer says is a good way to start .

I am promoting an internet marketing niche where one ( even beginners ) can start up business almost immediately .

Please let me know if you guys have ways on improving it .

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I'll be honest. This doesn't earn my trust. I'll tell you why.

The picture is 6/10. I understand your target are people who want to make more money and you want to address to them a message: "This is what you will get if you sign up. Nice blue sea and big house nearby". Well, this picture tells me that I will get a house with a blue paint at the top. (First think that most people would look at) Basically nice place, but it doesn't really attracts your potential clients needs and desires. Besides that, this is not the top quality image. It may be better.

I'm not native English speaker, but small letters at the top doesn't look well in English. Either you write it whole with uppercase or you start each word with it. I don't want to judge how correct this is (I'm from Europe [non-UK] and our time have native English copywriters for this) but I feel like there are some mistakes. Maybe somebody could do proofreading for you.

Spaces before punctation marks make it look unprofessional.

You don't give any sign of proof to potential customer that he can trust that you know what you're doing. Of course, it may depend on the previous website he saw (Where he clicked it). But on this page nothing prove you can be the person who can answer that question.

From my experience, if you didn't change it, you will get very poor conversion, even if you get a high quality traffic.

I hope you do not take offense and you are open to constructive criticism.
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Since I am putting here, of course I willing to listen to some ideas. To be honest I am a bit limited in my budget. Anyway here is what I think when I do that.

Hmm, perhaps some part you are right. I will change some of my design. And if my budget allow. I will put a video for it. Regarding about the punctuation, I used to put a spacing between punctuation is because I thought it be neater . I didn't realize the mistake.

Anyway, thank you for all the points.
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Answer this question: "I'm going to help you increase your income by..."

Be as detailed as possible in your answer. Then figure out the most concise and impactful way to make the same claim in your headline. You now have a differentiated attention grabber that won't instantly turn people off. Good luck!

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Thats nice tips. Thank you
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Originally Posted by andreasleo View Post

Hai there ,

This site will be my first time I be promoting affiliate via email marketing since most internet marketer says is a good way to start .

I am promoting an internet marketing niche where one ( even beginners ) can start up business almost immediately .

Please let me know if you guys have ways on improving it .

Internet Income Program

Thank you
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Let me ask you this, are you actually currently making money online and is that CB screenshot yours?
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Hey you !
I think you have shared this in the last week asked same question.
And I told that color is littile bit dull , need to change that. and call for action can be moved towards up . So that without scrolling down users can able to see that to fill the details.
These are the major changes i can say from my side.

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Originally Posted by melchidex88 View Post

Let me ask you this, are you actually currently making money online and is that CB screenshot yours?
No. I am just starting out my first email marketing campaign. This screenshot is taken from the sales page of the product I am going to pitch in my email.

I went to the product creator talk himself and I find he is a very experienced when comes to IM due to he even venture currently to apps. There is more about him but I cant put all of his details here.

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Hey you !
I think you have shared this in the last week asked same question.
And I told that color is littile bit dull , need to change that. and call for action can be moved towards up . So that without scrolling down users can able to see that to fill the details.
These are the major changes i can say from my side.
What color are you suggesting? Yes, I know its green and not so strong compare to most IM landing page (I believe) but it is more eye soothing.

The CTA is completely fine. I don't have to scroll down to put the details. I am running on a Chrome and 15.6 inch monitor.
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Hey andreasleo

I was struggling with my squeeze and sales page and got useful tips from some of the warriors and I am completely restructuring my approach for the better I believe. On that basis I have continued to research and I have a much clearer picture on the strategies and techniques needed to optimise my customer experience and in-turn get more opt-ins and a better sales conversion.

Regarding you page Internet Income Program I initially viewed it around 7 days ago when you had the greek/spanish style coastal background and I agreed with the comments that it lacked a lot of trust and did not look appealing at all to be honest. I just wanted to say that the current page (lady on laptop with the green theme) is much warmer and inviting, I hope its getting you better results. And never stop testing and improving.
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Originally Posted by Samuelo1984 View Post

Hey andreasleo

I was struggling with my squeeze and sales page and got useful tips from some of the warriors and I am completely restructuring my approach for the better I believe. On that basis I have continued to research and I have a much clearer picture on the strategies and techniques needed to optimise my customer experience and in-turn get more opt-ins and a better sales conversion.

Regarding you page Internet Income Program I initially viewed it around 7 days ago when you had the greek/spanish style coastal background and I agreed with the comments that it lacked a lot of trust and did not look appealing at all to be honest. I just wanted to say that the current page (lady on laptop with the green theme) is much warmer and inviting, I hope its getting you better results. And never stop testing and improving.
Thank you very much. Indeed I agree that was too simple and I needed to improvise. I hired someone to do that for me actually and I provide them with the necessary material. You are right about testing. Sadly due to my limited budget I wish I could do more such as put a nice white board video to explain.

Anyway thanks for your support. Currently I am thinking if I should get a solo ads or a cheaper blasting ads.
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good landing pages, its simple design
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Good landing page. But it would be better if you could add a little bit of more colors to it and make it a bit more interactive.
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Thanks again for all the review out there. As up to current date, my conversion is really poor. Less than 1% and I been wondering what could be my mistake at this point. I narrow down to possible of 3 points.

1.) My landing page is not converting.
2.) I need to reword my offer.
3.) My traffic sources are not reliable.
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Originally Posted by andreasleo View Post

Thanks again for all the review out there. As up to current date, my conversion is really poor. Less than 1% and I been wondering what could be my mistake at this point. I narrow down to possible of 3 points.

1.) My landing page is not converting.
2.) I need to reword my offer.
3.) My traffic sources are not reliable.
Btw #3 is not a reason at all... it will pan out in one of the other 3 or 4 possible issues.

Lets start with #4 first. the bait to get them to the page. how many people see it and how often is it clicked? THIS is the most critical number of them all... if this is not converting then the page will never convert well.

How many people are actually making it to your landing page? Again very critical.

Does the message in the bait and the landing page match? if there is a mix up in message here that will greatly reduce the effect of the landing page. End user clicking on 7 easy steps to learning wordpress and then the landing page is 4 steps to learning wordpress is a mismatch in message ( only an example )

Once you have these numbers then you can start looking at the landing page itself.

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I like your landing page. but i dont understand target peiple do you want
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Btw #3 is not a reason at all... it will pan out in one of the other 3 or 4 possible issues.

Lets start with #4 first. the bait to get them to the page. how many people see it and how often is it clicked? THIS is the most critical number of them all... if this is not converting then the page will never convert well.

How many people are actually making it to your landing page? Again very critical.

Does the message in the bait and the landing page match? if there is a mix up in message here that will greatly reduce the effect of the landing page. End user clicking on 7 easy steps to learning wordpress and then the landing page is 4 steps to learning wordpress is a mismatch in message ( only an example )

Once you have these numbers then you can start looking at the landing page itself.
Thank you for spending your time to read my story.

Alright here's the thing if you want to know.

1.) According to my getresponse view and my google analytic. There is total of 800 users (which I assume 50% of them are unique visitors) in 5 days. But the average session is 3 seconds. How can someone that have interested will visit my site and leave in such a short time?
Even the traffic referral from our forum/ this forum have 10 seconds or longer of view. 3 seconds is seriously like you blink your eyes twice then off you go without reading.

2.) The message in the bait and the landing page does have 80% match. The bait is actually simplified message of what the actual squeeze page that you see. I did not change the obvious like earn money in 3 steps in bait and 4 in my landing page. Because I learnt that in order for my conversation and my ads to work, it must have suitable and relevant to what I am offering. You are right to concern about that.

Hence I have been thinking it for sometime now. One of the highest possibly problem is at the traffic itself. And I am using quite (cheap) ads compared to solo ads. Not only that, the traffic I bought is definitely from the IM niche as the seller claims since I am promoting IM products.

So what do you think the missing element could be? By far I can only think of is my traffic is 70% of the problem.
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You take them down one path at the beginning...

"START EARNING INCOME ONLINE IN 4 EASY STEPS"

then you take them down another path on the
second sentence.

Huh?

Talk about confusing!

Then sending non buyers to that
and you can kiss your money goodbye.

Best,
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The first thing I would so is separate the paid traffic to its own separate lander. I am a way big fan of traffic isolation. It allows you to look at these things a lot more accurately ( and easily )

I would start looking at where it is coming from. Is the source of the repeat traffic from the paid traffic? ( I will assume it is not... just based on the fact this thread has 775 views this morning and I personally have probably looked at your page 4 times by now )

The very first thing I would do is move your analytics code up into the head section of your code.. what this would help determine is if there is a page load issue. IE the 3 second page view all of the sudden gets longer. - right now your analytics is loaded last on the page ( this is fine - I do the same thing - but for the sake of testing issues such as this to move it to load first can be insightful )

Can you see a pattern in the 3 second page views - Country, time of day, OS, Mobile / Desktop etc.

The statement "the traffic I bought is definitely from the IM niche as the seller claims since I am promoting IM products" The seller of the traffic is claiming it.. or have you looked to see where the traffic is coming from specifically and know for sure?

If you are paying the traffic source by the click.. and you can find patterns to indicate some amount of false traffic then sure traffic is an issue. but if those things are not there, and again it is either going to stick out like a sore thumb ( All of the bounce traffic is using the same OS, or coming from the same approximate IP region happens at the same time every day ) or that really is not an issue.

The biggest issue is the 50% repeat. so you only have 400 uniques and how many of those came from here? 300? So of the 100 from the paid traffic source how many were 3 second bounces?


Originally Posted by andreasleo View Post

Thank you for spending your time to read my story.

Alright here's the thing if you want to know.

1.) According to my getresponse view and my google analytic. There is total of 800 users (which I assume 50% of them are unique visitors) in 5 days. But the average session is 3 seconds. How can someone that have interested will visit my site and leave in such a short time?
Even the traffic referral from our forum/ this forum have 10 seconds or longer of view. 3 seconds is seriously like you blink your eyes twice then off you go without reading.

2.) The message in the bait and the landing page does have 80% match. The bait is actually simplified message of what the actual squeeze page that you see. I did not change the obvious like earn money in 3 steps in bait and 4 in my landing page. Because I learnt that in order for my conversation and my ads to work, it must have suitable and relevant to what I am offering. You are right to concern about that.

Hence I have been thinking it for sometime now. One of the highest possibly problem is at the traffic itself. And I am using quite (cheap) ads compared to solo ads. Not only that, the traffic I bought is definitely from the IM niche as the seller claims since I am promoting IM products.

So what do you think the missing element could be? By far I can only think of is my traffic is 70% of the problem.

Success is an ACT not an idea
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Originally Posted by ewenmack View Post

You take them down one path at the beginning...

"START EARNING INCOME ONLINE IN 4 EASY STEPS"

then you take them down another path on the
second sentence.

Huh?

Talk about confusing!

Then sending non buyers to that
and you can kiss your money goodbye.

Best,
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Alright then, I will take your advise and reword my sentence. Which part did I send non buyers? Please enlighten me. Thanks

Originally Posted by savidge4 View Post

The first thing I would so is separate the paid traffic to its own separate lander. I am a way big fan of traffic isolation. It allows you to look at these things a lot more accurately ( and easily )

I would start looking at where it is coming from. Is the source of the repeat traffic from the paid traffic? ( I will assume it is not... just based on the fact this thread has 775 views this morning and I personally have probably looked at your page 4 times by now )

The very first thing I would do is move your analytics code up into the head section of your code.. what this would help determine is if there is a page load issue. IE the 3 second page view all of the sudden gets longer. - right now your analytics is loaded last on the page ( this is fine - I do the same thing - but for the sake of testing issues such as this to move it to load first can be insightful )

Can you see a pattern in the 3 second page views - Country, time of day, OS, Mobile / Desktop etc.

The statement "the traffic I bought is definitely from the IM niche as the seller claims since I am promoting IM products" The seller of the traffic is claiming it.. or have you looked to see where the traffic is coming from specifically and know for sure?

If you are paying the traffic source by the click.. and you can find patterns to indicate some amount of false traffic then sure traffic is an issue. but if those things are not there, and again it is either going to stick out like a sore thumb ( All of the bounce traffic is using the same OS, or coming from the same approximate IP region happens at the same time every day ) or that really is not an issue.

The biggest issue is the 50% repeat. so you only have 400 uniques and how many of those came from here? 300? So of the 100 from the paid traffic source how many were 3 second bounces?
Please check on the attachment to look at one part of my analytic result. Before I tell you about the figure 800. I already make some deduction from warrior forum and myself to make sure I have a clear picture. The actual figure was 1100+

Here are the things I am trying to highlight:

1.) I don't think I have issue in loading my page for any web browser because forum member like you have no trouble of loading it. Besides, I tested Chrome, Firefox, even IE. All have no problem. So page loading problem is definitely not the problem.

2.) Most people drop out at 3 seconds or less. It would mean that they not even loading the page. So here's the part I trying to find out:

a. If someone did click on my ads, it means that they are interested but not even 1 seconds of load? Something is fishy.

b. If someone did load and find that my content does not match my ads. Then, yes ewenmack does make his point right. But doesn't that take at least 5- 7 seconds before they leave?

What do you think? I will reword again my landing page soon.
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