Need a review of my landing page

DR0832 · 4th Oct 2015, 08:16 AM

I am looking for somebody with experience to review my landing page click here

It's a work in progress...

rdimabuyu · 9th Oct 2015, 02:34 AM

I would consider more powerful wordings, or more direct ones. No more extras.

This Simple System Turns Penny Stocks Into Enormous Profits Overnight!

"Turns Penny Stocks Into Enormous Profits Overnight!"

To Beat The Learning Curve And Start Profiting, Download Our Free Trading E-book Right Now!

"Beat The Learning Curve And Start Profiting, Download Our Free Trading E-book Right Now!"

More direct, more engaging, and it's like commanding them to get started.

Just saying..

DR0832 · 9th Oct 2015, 03:02 PM

Thanks. Anymore comments?

The Cypher · 9th Oct 2015, 04:43 PM

It's god awful.

Not to sound mean, but no one cares about your product. They never do. They care about their result.

My simple system. Your strategies. There's not enough focus on the end result. No curiosity on your page.

You are blatantly selling something. No one likes to be sold. Unless you're doing a good amount of preselling before they hit this page ... It looks like the other 10,000s trading landin pages out there.

If you'd like I can point out some fantastic landers in this niche that is compelling and builds tons of curiosity

DR0832 · 10th Oct 2015, 07:59 AM

Yes point them out please. My old sales page sold about $100k of my product but I need help for sure.

exoro · 10th Oct 2015, 07:54 PM

Sounds like a traditional internet scam to me. "SIMPLE trading system turns penny stocks into ENORMOUS profits OVERNIGHT". Please...

If you're having a tough time pulling profits out of this product, how do you expect your customers to pull a profit?

allegandro · 11th Oct 2015, 03:10 AM

First of all, I'm not interested in your product at all, so when I came to your page, I expected nothing.
They layout didn't make it better, but I decided to click on the video.

And what happened, I liked the video, even if I know nothing about your product and I'm also not in the market the video was pretty good.

Very simple and for those who are in to penny stocks, it will trigger them.

So my advice, show the video, improve it when you can and that is it.

Forget the rest, just the video and a call to action button.

DR0832 · 11th Oct 2015, 06:58 AM

Did you read what I said extoro? I Sold $100k and that's just from my first product because I offer something very few people do: A real way to extract profits from the stock market. There is no problem with my product. There's literally 10k trading relating products out there that are complete scams, so your comment is not needed. I agree I would like to put a headline that doesn't sound like this but people ignore you. A headline like Want Real Results? Download This Free 60 page Trading E-book Right Now And Start Profiting.

The Cypher · 11th Oct 2015, 08:57 AM

Hey DR0832,

Sorry for the late reply. Got tremendously busy in the past few days. So I wanted to add a lot of ideas to this post for you and I'll also take screenshots of examples and PM you them by the end of the day.

As a disclaimer, I'm not in the financial market myself, but I have studied Agora extensively. When they launch a product or a newsletter and it doesn't hit over $1M in its first week, its a failure. So that's kind of how I'm approaching this.

What your page seems like, because of the headline, is more of a make money quick scheme than legitimate trading advice. If you can tap into what your prospects are into and move away from the scheme and closer to trading advice, you'll double your reach and profits easily.

I know you have a good amount of sales already, and without knowledge of your product I can't really say what your ideal prospect is... But I'm guessing that the low-mid tier trader is more your speed.

So look at your ideal prospect. Whether you realize this or not, a day trader or a serious financial investor is constantly checking and updating themselves on recent news. Especially in the, you guessed it, financial markets. Change your ad and your lead to look and feel like a news headline and I guarantee you that it will pull better, assuming you are marketing in the correct places.

Agora had an ad a long time ago that read something similar to,

How I infiltrated the Richest Circles of America and Stole Their Secrets.

The headline to the VSL was something like,

My Secret Double Life: How I infiltrated the Richest Circles in America

See how this is news related? See how it generates curiosity rather than focusing on a benefit?

Why did he infiltrate the circle?
What did he learn?
What secrets?
How did he do it?

To come full circle if you go on Stansberry Research now, there is a banner add running towards the top, with Ron Paul talking about his predictions on America he made years ago. Once again. It's a news article nothing else.

What you have in your market is an undeniable thrist for information. Any serious trader honestly scourges the internet and news as often as he can to get the first look or insider scoop. If you can tap into this information hungry your market has, you're golden.

Another thing to note, is that you don't need to have aa typical 'lead magnet'. You don't need to offer them a eBook in exchange for their email. Daily Insider Secrets would be enough to get people to part with their email as long as the curiosity is there.

To sum everything up. You're using a benefit driven headline that a lot of the market has seen before. Their sophistication has grown, and so must you. The ability to tap into their thirst for knowledge I believe is key to you continued success.

DR0832 · 11th Oct 2015, 04:38 PM

Thank you for taking the time to post. I agree with what you said cypher. The funny thing is Agora media and Stansberry Reasearch are stock promotion websites. They are essentially frauds that get paid to promote useless companies (aka pump and dumps) and useless trading products. None the less their advertising works because there are many suckers out there that buy into their bs,

Platt · 16th Oct 2015, 05:29 AM

It doesn't look that good if I'm honest.
The title is too long, there's no information about what your company does, the letter types are not appealing to read ...

Adam Yunker · 16th Oct 2015, 08:10 AM

Hey DR0832,

I know you already got a lot of advice on here so I'll keep mine short.. Frankly because there's not much I don't like about it!

Anyways, I know you have a "Get Started" button, but I think what'll increase conversions is to already have the information that they need to provide already there in front of them (and try to require as little information as possible)

So for instance just add a little "email address" bubble next to it so people can see all they need to do is enter their email address.

I know it's a quick tip, but honestly I love it!

I think it looks amazing.

Hope this helped in a way

Adam

Latoon Technologies · 16th Oct 2015, 04:03 PM

Could be make more direct and to the point.
- Heading could be made more effective
- Text can be minimize

Especially with the designing perspective, It could be make waaaay better.
- No text alignment
- Sections are jumbled up
- Scroll can be minimized or can be created with zero scroll

What I like is the video, Short and comprehensive.

Regards

BrandonKaws · 20th Oct 2015, 12:35 PM

That was an awesome reply Cypher. You just upgraded my strategy with that gem.

kursat · 20th Oct 2015, 03:23 PM

Originally Posted by The Cypher

Hey DR0832,

To sum everything up. You're using a benefit driven headline that a lot of the market has seen before. Their sophistication has grown, and so must you. The ability to tap into their thirst for knowledge I believe is key to you continued success.

Great advice and nice tips...thank you. really enjoyed reading it.

LydiaHuang · 9th Nov 2015, 05:52 AM

Put the benefit on top! and tell them you are the solution to bring that to them. Do market the product. Market the solution! make people resonate with your wordings

4th Oct 2015, 08:16 AM	#1
DR0832 HyperActive Warrior Registered Member Join Date: 2012 Location: Providence Posts: 123 Thanks: 2 Thanked 13 Times in 9 Posts	Need a review of my landing page Share on: I am looking for somebody with experience to review my landing page click here It's a work in progress...
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9th Oct 2015, 02:34 AM	#2
rdimabuyu Active Warrior Join Date: 2014 Posts: 69 Thanks: 3 Thanked 3 Times in 3 Posts	Re: Need a review of my landing page Share on: I would consider more powerful wordings, or more direct ones. No more extras. This Simple System Turns Penny Stocks Into Enormous Profits Overnight! "Turns Penny Stocks Into Enormous Profits Overnight!" To Beat The Learning Curve And Start Profiting, Download Our Free Trading E-book Right Now! "Beat The Learning Curve And Start Profiting, Download Our Free Trading E-book Right Now!" More direct, more engaging, and it's like commanding them to get started. Just saying..

9th Oct 2015, 03:02 PM	#3
DR0832 HyperActive Warrior Registered Member Join Date: 2012 Location: Providence Posts: 123 Thanks: 2 Thanked 13 Times in 9 Posts	Re: Need a review of my landing page Share on: Thanks. Anymore comments?
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9th Oct 2015, 04:43 PM	#4
The Cypher HyperActive Warrior Join Date: 2015 Posts: 110 Thanks: 3 Thanked 67 Times in 40 Posts	Re: Need a review of my landing page Share on: It's god awful. Not to sound mean, but no one cares about your product. They never do. They care about their result. My simple system. Your strategies. There's not enough focus on the end result. No curiosity on your page. You are blatantly selling something. No one likes to be sold. Unless you're doing a good amount of preselling before they hit this page ... It looks like the other 10,000s trading landin pages out there. If you'd like I can point out some fantastic landers in this niche that is compelling and builds tons of curiosity

10th Oct 2015, 07:59 AM	#5
DR0832 HyperActive Warrior Registered Member Join Date: 2012 Location: Providence Posts: 123 Thanks: 2 Thanked 13 Times in 9 Posts	Re: Need a review of my landing page Share on: Yes point them out please. My old sales page sold about $100k of my product but I need help for sure.
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10th Oct 2015, 07:54 PM	#6
exoro Active Warrior Join Date: 2015 Posts: 71 Thanks: 15 Thanked 2 Times in 2 Posts	Re: Need a review of my landing page Share on: Sounds like a traditional internet scam to me. "SIMPLE trading system turns penny stocks into ENORMOUS profits OVERNIGHT". Please... If you're having a tough time pulling profits out of this product, how do you expect your customers to pull a profit?

11th Oct 2015, 03:10 AM	#7
allegandro Data Feed Expert Registered Member War Room Member Join Date: 2013 Location: Venlo - Netherlands Posts: 668 Thanks: 274 Thanked 277 Times in 146 Posts	Re: Need a review of my landing page Share on: First of all, I'm not interested in your product at all, so when I came to your page, I expected nothing. They layout didn't make it better, but I decided to click on the video. And what happened, I liked the video, even if I know nothing about your product and I'm also not in the market the video was pretty good. Very simple and for those who are in to penny stocks, it will trigger them. So my advice, show the video, improve it when you can and that is it. Forget the rest, just the video and a call to action button.

11th Oct 2015, 06:58 AM	#8
DR0832 HyperActive Warrior Registered Member Join Date: 2012 Location: Providence Posts: 123 Thanks: 2 Thanked 13 Times in 9 Posts	Re: Need a review of my landing page Share on: Did you read what I said extoro? I Sold $100k and that's just from my first product because I offer something very few people do: A real way to extract profits from the stock market. There is no problem with my product. There's literally 10k trading relating products out there that are complete scams, so your comment is not needed. I agree I would like to put a headline that doesn't sound like this but people ignore you. A headline like Want Real Results? Download This Free 60 page Trading E-book Right Now And Start Profiting.
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11th Oct 2015, 08:57 AM	#9
The Cypher HyperActive Warrior Join Date: 2015 Posts: 110 Thanks: 3 Thanked 67 Times in 40 Posts	Re: Need a review of my landing page Share on: Hey DR0832, Sorry for the late reply. Got tremendously busy in the past few days. So I wanted to add a lot of ideas to this post for you and I'll also take screenshots of examples and PM you them by the end of the day. As a disclaimer, I'm not in the financial market myself, but I have studied Agora extensively. When they launch a product or a newsletter and it doesn't hit over $1M in its first week, its a failure. So that's kind of how I'm approaching this. What your page seems like, because of the headline, is more of a make money quick scheme than legitimate trading advice. If you can tap into what your prospects are into and move away from the scheme and closer to trading advice, you'll double your reach and profits easily. I know you have a good amount of sales already, and without knowledge of your product I can't really say what your ideal prospect is... But I'm guessing that the low-mid tier trader is more your speed. So look at your ideal prospect. Whether you realize this or not, a day trader or a serious financial investor is constantly checking and updating themselves on recent news. Especially in the, you guessed it, financial markets. Change your ad and your lead to look and feel like a news headline and I guarantee you that it will pull better, assuming you are marketing in the correct places. Agora had an ad a long time ago that read something similar to, How I infiltrated the Richest Circles of America and Stole Their Secrets. The headline to the VSL was something like, My Secret Double Life: How I infiltrated the Richest Circles in America See how this is news related? See how it generates curiosity rather than focusing on a benefit? Why did he infiltrate the circle? What did he learn? What secrets? How did he do it? To come full circle if you go on Stansberry Research now, there is a banner add running towards the top, with Ron Paul talking about his predictions on America he made years ago. Once again. It's a news article nothing else. What you have in your market is an undeniable thrist for information. Any serious trader honestly scourges the internet and news as often as he can to get the first look or insider scoop. If you can tap into this information hungry your market has, you're golden. Another thing to note, is that you don't need to have aa typical 'lead magnet'. You don't need to offer them a eBook in exchange for their email. Daily Insider Secrets would be enough to get people to part with their email as long as the curiosity is there. To sum everything up. You're using a benefit driven headline that a lot of the market has seen before. Their sophistication has grown, and so must you. The ability to tap into their thirst for knowledge I believe is key to you continued success.

11th Oct 2015, 04:38 PM	#10
DR0832 HyperActive Warrior Registered Member Join Date: 2012 Location: Providence Posts: 123 Thanks: 2 Thanked 13 Times in 9 Posts	Re: Need a review of my landing page Share on: Thank you for taking the time to post. I agree with what you said cypher. The funny thing is Agora media and Stansberry Reasearch are stock promotion websites. They are essentially frauds that get paid to promote useless companies (aka pump and dumps) and useless trading products. None the less their advertising works because there are many suckers out there that buy into their bs,
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16th Oct 2015, 05:29 AM	#11
Platt HyperActive Warrior Join Date: 2015 Posts: 193 Thanks: 0 Thanked 18 Times in 17 Posts	Re: Need a review of my landing page Share on: It doesn't look that good if I'm honest. The title is too long, there's no information about what your company does, the letter types are not appealing to read ...

16th Oct 2015, 08:10 AM	#12
Adam Yunker HyperActive Warrior Join Date: 2015 Posts: 149 Thanks: 1 Thanked 33 Times in 30 Posts	Re: Need a review of my landing page Share on: Hey DR0832, I know you already got a lot of advice on here so I'll keep mine short.. Frankly because there's not much I don't like about it! Anyways, I know you have a "Get Started" button, but I think what'll increase conversions is to already have the information that they need to provide already there in front of them (and try to require as little information as possible) So for instance just add a little "email address" bubble next to it so people can see all they need to do is enter their email address. I know it's a quick tip, but honestly I love it! I think it looks amazing. Hope this helped in a way Adam
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16th Oct 2015, 04:03 PM	#13
Latoon Technologies HyperActive Warrior Join Date: 2015 Location: The land of pure people Posts: 475 Thanks: 71 Thanked 58 Times in 50 Posts	Re: Need a review of my landing page Share on: Could be make more direct and to the point. - Heading could be made more effective - Text can be minimize Especially with the designing perspective, It could be make waaaay better. - No text alignment - Sections are jumbled up - Scroll can be minimized or can be created with zero scroll What I like is the video, Short and comprehensive. Regards

20th Oct 2015, 12:35 PM	#14
BrandonKaws Warrior Member Join Date: 2015 Posts: 5 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	Re: Need a review of my landing page Share on: That was an awesome reply Cypher. You just upgraded my strategy with that gem.

9th Nov 2015, 05:52 AM	#16
LydiaHuang Warrior Member Join Date: 2015 Location: Singapore Posts: 15 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	Re: Need a review of my landing page Share on: Put the benefit on top! and tell them you are the solution to bring that to them. Do market the product. Market the solution! make people resonate with your wordings