Want to do a good deed for the day? Help a beginner out!

ZachAttack09 · 4th Aug 2016, 03:47 PM

I'm totally new to web design and fairly new to copywriting, so keep that in mind. Feel free to be as harsh as necessary, but I would appreciate if you gave some suggestions when you rip it apart! Here's the site:

Screenwriting School | Film School Tricks Without the Price Tag

Thanks in advance!

Cookie Monster · 5th Aug 2016, 01:58 AM

Here's some advice:

* align the big headline to the top
* enlarge the text size and maybe align it to the left
* put some color / graphics on the page
* READ EVERYTHING YOU CAN ABOUT THE SUBJECT ON THIS SITE because there are HUNDREDS of things you can (and probably will) do to this page until it's effective and done.

Good luck!

high_plains_drifter · 5th Aug 2016, 04:18 PM

Far too text heavy and I can't see how you are qualified to give this information, Have you written scripts for films?

savidge4 · 5th Aug 2016, 10:57 PM

Originally Posted by high_plains_drifter

Far too text heavy and I can't see how you are qualified to give this information, Have you written scripts for films?

And the bold is what I was going to say exactly... Technically this would be a "pre-sell" page.. you are not selling the product, you are selling YOUR expertise behind the product. Sell THAT, and they will move onto the next page to actually buy.

james flynn · 15th Sep 2016, 03:15 PM

Originally Posted by ZachAttack09

I'm totally new to web design and fairly new to copywriting, so keep that in mind. Feel free to be as harsh as necessary, but I would appreciate if you gave some suggestions when you rip it apart! Here's the site:

Screenwriting School | Film School Tricks Without the Price Tag

Thanks in advance!

Colour selection somehow correlates with the context but the design is kind of a turn off. Insert some video content or images to make it more attractive and suitable with what you're trying to convey.

Cheers-James

Sven300 · 2nd Oct 2016, 12:29 PM

I cannot access you webpage: http://www.schoolofscreenwriting.com/

I just get a blank page.

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