Using Specifics In Your Sales Copy

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I know in copywriting it's always good to include specifics such as... "increase sales by 36%" or "loose weight in 1/2 the time by following this method" or "save up to 2 years of trial and error" or "make up to $4200 per month by following this system" etc. etc.

I'm wondering if these specifics need proof. A lot of the stats that people use in sales letters seem to be specific but really are not, such as "increase sales by 36%" Well, 36% over what? But claims to "make $4200 per month," IMO should be backed up by proof.

Here's a good example of a headline I found in a copywriting course recently where I'm thinking, where do these stats come from? This is an actual headline for a product:

"A Magic Little-Known Piece Of News That Makes A Stock Go Up In Price Within 3-6 Months Of Release - 86% Of The Time"

Now I'm thinking, is there some study somewhere that proofs stocks go up within 3-6 months of release 86% of the time - not 85% or 90%?

I'm wanting to use specific time periods or numbers in my sales copy, but I'm usually hesitant because MY first reaction when reading this is, where do these stats/numbers come from? Are they real? Should I make them up? Should I search for "studies" that have reported stats that I can use to back up my claims?

I know this kind of copy sells, so wondering how to approach it.

Thanks
Tony
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  • Profile picture of the author marciayudkin
    Tony,

    You are totally right in your instinct to include sources of the information you include in headlines or body copy. You don't have to add footnotes, just somewhere say, "According to a 1999 study at Stanford University" or "According to the most recent Centers for Disease Control statistics..."

    This greatly boosts your credibility.

    Above all, don't make up the numbers. That counts as lying.

    Marcia Yudkin
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  • Profile picture of the author Raydal
    Originally Posted by Tonester View Post

    I'm wanting to use specific time periods or numbers in my sales copy, but I'm usually hesitant because MY first reaction when reading this is, where do these stats/numbers come from? Are they real? Should I make them up? Should I search for "studies" that have reported stats that I can use to back up my claims?
    About in every market you can think of there are people who publish studies
    on that market. Find those studies and use them. Just make sure that your
    sources are respected by your target market. So for trading it may be the
    Wall Street Journal, or for health The New England Journal of Medicine etc.

    -Ray Edwards
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  • Profile picture of the author Jack Sarlo
    "Should I make them up?" obviously no.Saying something specific is good, but backing it up is even better (with some video, research study, screenshot, etc). Remember prospects are skeptics...

    Don't know if this is interesting to you: Instead of writing "increase sales by 36%" and then try to dig out proof, first find all real stats you can about your particular business, anything really and then try to use that data to create a headline. If you search well enough you're likely to find something good.
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  • Profile picture of the author Work1099
    Your definitely onto how the advice to be specific is usually misunderstood ... leading to lowered response. Being specific isn't simply a matter of having a number that isn't rounded to the nearest 10th or 100th place.

    To answer your other question: yes, it's worth having proof for as many of your claims as you can within your given deadline.
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