Hi Warriors - I've been whacking away at honing my copy writing skills and one of the strategies I've been using is Dan Kennedy's "swipe and deploy". I would like my fellow warriors to please give me their thoughts on everything above the fold on my newest sales page. Of course, you're more than welcome to scroll down the page and tell me what you think of the body copy and sub heads too :-) A link to a DK sales letter wound up in my inbox - I lifted much of the text from his headline and subheads for my own letter - twisting it of course to fit my product. Anyhow, without influencing your opinion, I wanted to get your feedback specifically on the following -
Did Dan Kennedy do me justice here?
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Hi Warriors - I've been whacking away at honing my copy writing skills and one of the strategies I've been using is Dan Kennedy's "swipe and deploy". I would like my fellow warriors to please give me their thoughts on everything above the fold on my newest sales page. Of course, you're more than welcome to scroll down the page and tell me what you think of the body copy and sub heads too :-)
A link to a DK sales letter wound up in my inbox - I lifted much of the text from his headline and subheads for my own letter - twisting it of course to fit my product. Anyhow, without influencing your opinion, I wanted to get your feedback specifically on the following -
-The very top line - in one of his trainings DK talks about people want to belong to a group (for example: choosey moms choose Jiff) so that is why the opening line mentions "straight men" - good or no good?
- Is the top graphic too big? Taking up too much space?
- What do you think about having the price of my book right up there at the top? Should I make my readers go through the letter to see the price?
- Is it a bad idea to have an image of the book at the top? Maybe a photo of an attractive lady instead?
- Any other feedback you can give me on everything above the fold would be appreciated - of course with that being the most valuable real estate on a web sales page.
Thanks All!! Click here to have a look
- Dan
A link to a DK sales letter wound up in my inbox - I lifted much of the text from his headline and subheads for my own letter - twisting it of course to fit my product. Anyhow, without influencing your opinion, I wanted to get your feedback specifically on the following -
-The very top line - in one of his trainings DK talks about people want to belong to a group (for example: choosey moms choose Jiff) so that is why the opening line mentions "straight men" - good or no good?
- Is the top graphic too big? Taking up too much space?
- What do you think about having the price of my book right up there at the top? Should I make my readers go through the letter to see the price?
- Is it a bad idea to have an image of the book at the top? Maybe a photo of an attractive lady instead?
- Any other feedback you can give me on everything above the fold would be appreciated - of course with that being the most valuable real estate on a web sales page.
Thanks All!! Click here to have a look
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