I'd love your opinion. It's my first Landing page.

9 years ago

Originally Posted by LifeCases

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Sliders are dead.

I'd add the word "HOW" to the front of those questions.

You need page depth and some story to grab people to even want to go further..

You need some help with with good copy that will engage the person to read a story and then realise they can share theirs.

There will be a ton of people that can help and I'm sure that will weigh in with their comments.

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The Copy Nazi

Banned 9 years ago

What do I think? I think you need to hire an English native language copywriter for starters. This is terrible. I see what you're trying to do but it's not working.

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LifeCases

9 years ago

Thanks for the feedback!

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Olympio

9 years ago

Originally Posted by LifeCases

Hi,
What do you think? Become an Author | LifeCases.me I will be grateful for any feedback, comments and suggestions, thank you.

You will not get people attention with these slides in your landing page. People are lazy today , they don't want to make lot of effort to read or make attention. Change your landing page in static page. You will get high result.

Olympio

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JonMills

9 years ago

Originally Posted by Olympio

You will not get people attention with these slides in your landing page. People are lazy today , they don't want to make lot of effort to read or make attention. Change your landing page in static page. You will get high result.

Olympio

Exactly

Imagine your reader as having the brain the size of pea, and the attention span of a gnat!

That sums up most people online.

Do as much for them as possible.

Don't expect them to click anything

Don't expect them to be as excited about anything as you are

Don't expect them to understand what you think is clear ( spell it out, like you were teaching a 5 year old)

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Nahawee A

9 years ago

Originally Posted by JonMills

Exactly

Imagine your reader as having the brain the size of pea, and the attention span of a gnat!

That sums up most people online.

Do as much for them as possible.

Don't expect them to click anything

Don't expect them to be as excited about anything as you are

Don't expect them to understand what you think is clear ( spell it out, like you were teaching a 5 year old)

Not very encouraging!! Hopefully they can click on the buy now button!!

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LifeCases

9 years ago

OK. Thanks, I think you're right, perhaps we will follow your advice.

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dddougal

9 years ago

Change your page to a static page and put more descriptive text on there....Its nowhere near clear what your offer is or what you are actually selling

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sethczerepak

9 years ago

Seriously? The language is like a parking meter that came to life and tried to become a ballerina...clunky, awkward, practically requires a translator in some parts.

Get someone who speaks English for God's sake. Until then, this is a waste of our time to critique.

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joe golfer

9 years ago

Clear as mud. It took me awhile to figure out what the site is about and why. Still not totally clear on the value proposition. Regular visitors will just click off.

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Webbro 9 years ago

Well, so far pretty much everyone's comments have been negative, however I think this is wrong, I completely agree with everyone stating that you need to work on the content and if this is something you can not do very well then, yes hire a copywriter.

I think the design of your landing page and website is very nice, it is clean and and looks professional.

If that is something you have designed and developed yourself then well done.

I think they are also right about the slider, maybe make it smaller and more to the point, getting your message across, It is a little hard to understand what you are trying to achieve or what the website is about.

I think it is a good first attempt and just needs guidance and some more work. I expect that is why you have added it to here for feedback and helpful tips.

Good luck on perfecting your design
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- angiecolee 9 years ago
  
  Originally Posted by Webbro
  
  Well, so far pretty much everyone's comments have been negative, however I think this is wrong,
  
  Because so many people often commit the same marketing sins, it becomes a gigantic time suck to try and compliment sandwich everyone. Most of us just deliver blunt info in as few words as possible because we're trying to help but aren't going to hold hands to do it.
  
  Smart would-be marketers can see beyond "negativity" and "tone" to the seeds of truth and know what to fix.
  
  Meanwhile people who are sensitive fall by the wayside to make room for those of us who have business to take care of.
  
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- sethczerepak 9 years ago
  
  Originally Posted by Webbro
  
  Well, so far pretty much everyone's comments have been negative,
  
  So what?
  
  It's only negative if the OP ignores it...or if it's not specific enough to be acted on.
  
  In this case, getting a good English speaking writer is the smartest move the OP could make.
  
  Until then, any suggestions about content, message, flow, design...well, it's like putting perfume on a pig.
  
  Make some bacon instead.
  
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LifeCases

9 years ago

Thank you all for your feedback! In fact, I appreciate the feedback both positive and negative, because ones give emotional support and others give a chance to make things better and develop.

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cwf 9 years ago

I don't mean to be an ass but:
1. Whoever talks about authorship should have its English right (I don't)
2. No idea what the site is about after looking at it for 10 seconds (eternity in internet time)
3. Site takes too long to load

I hope this helps.

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gokulmaba

9 years ago

Pretty cool site. Why didn't you use more special Logo ? The name is quiet simple and not very attractive

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trinity571

9 years ago

I agree with the above about the English. You can get a proofreader on Fiverr to do that for you. Otherwise, your copy will just be embarrassing. Attractive design though.

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Web Work Horse

9 years ago

I think in concept the site can work, but you have a ways to go.
Yes, you need better copy.

Also, remember the '5 second rule'...you have 5 seconds to let them know who you are and what you do. 2 seconds is better, or instantly with the right image. YOur takes much longer to understand your site.

Also, $15 after 100 reviews sound really tough...

"investors"...i didnt understand this at all...if it's
how you plan to make money, remove it until you have a steady place on the SERP.

Good luck, I do like the overall idea, though I think it will be very tough for google to figure out and place, except for very clearly defined articles with perfect titles.

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