Give me your expert opinion on these two headlines

George, are these for the same product? The first one doesn't even mention that it's a WP plugin, so if it is, that's pretty important to mention.

Neither of them are great.

Thanks guys. I have added a third headline in my first post, based on your feedback.

Let me know what you think.

Thanks!

George

Yeah, I like #2, but I'd change the word "autopilot" to "automatic". My two cents.

Dude, those are wayyyy too long and pretty complicated. I suggest editing them to make them sound simpler and easy to understand. Remember, users love shorter and easy to digest content nowadays.

That being said, the first headline sounds better, though you're better off picking the third one.

Your headline itself is good, the only problem with it is that it's vague. People want to know when they land on the page exactly what benefits they're going to get from reading it, and why it's worth their time to read.

What I mean here is, when you land on the pager going to think one of two things:

1) this person wants to try and sell me something ( especially marketers, where trained in the stuff, so we're able to recognize this type of tactic a mile away whereas many people won't)

2) this page is going to offer me useful advice, and is worth staying on the page to read.

For example, if I write a headline that says, "discover how to lose ten pounds of weight in fifteen days"

Or...

"on this page, you're going to learn a step-by-step technique for losing 10 pounds in fifteen 15 days"

The differences incredibly subtle, but the difference is that instead of just offering a product, being vague, and making it look like you're going to advertise a product, you're actually promising that you're going to give them something useful by reading THAT piece of content.

If there's no incentive for them to read that page, they're just expecting a sales letter, and don't see anything to be directly gained by reading that page without buying something, most of them are just going to leave and look for the information elsewhere for free.

Using the headline checker at Advanced Marketing Institute, I have found out that the first headline is the best. It has an Emotional Marketing Value of 60%, while the 2nd headline has 35% only.

The 3rd headline has 38% EMV, and it is definitely better than the 2nd headline. But the best among the three is Headline #1.

"Newbie Friendly WordPress Plugin Creates Amazon Money Sites in 49 Seconds"

-Ray Edwards

Oh shoot. The headline analyzer gave me a poor score for my headline:

"They Laughed When I Sat Down at the Piano but When I Started to Play"
Your Headline's EMV Score:

2 or 3. They're both direct and to the point. Discover, almost adds an extra step.

The honest truth (if that's what you want) is that the problem with all 3 of your headlines is that you're treating your prospective clients like morons because you're trying to dress up a piece of crap and sell it to them as the holy grail of making easy money - like the other 9,999,999 similar products out there, that all say the same thing (and actually deliver the same thing - NADA).

You're saying one thing, but the underlying message that you're really sending out is this headline:

Hey Dickheads - Think You Can Get Rich Quick Without Doing Anything Or Knowing Anything? Good - Give Me Your Money For My Amazing Bullshit Plugin. It's Awesome!

Honestly, some people are stuck in time warp of trying to regurgitate the same tired old crap to the same tired old people.

Maybe it's time for a new paradigm - actually selling people things that are actually useful!

Too difficult?

I'll Show You How, Buy My No BS, No More BS Program And Get Rich Super Quick And Super Easy.

It's So Super Easy Even A Woman can do it...."

I used to be a woman, down on my luck, etc.

I would probably go with the first one because it has some mystique about it, but I do agree with the others. It is a bit too long and I got bored reading them. You need to settle on one idea and just concentrate on that idea to get the customers attention. If they get bored just like me, you are going to have issues with getting people to go with you. I think it would be better to shorten this to just a small sentence to save time and get more people in.

I would go for #2

I've actually been looking for a plugin that automatically takes regular amazon urls and adds your affiliate link to them so I don't have to alter them (I have people submit product reviews on my site sometimes)
I found a few words I would look for when looking for this product

easy,
stress-free,
straightforward,
effortless,
uncomplicated,
minimal,

Little Known WordPress Plugin For Amazon Affiliate Program Creates High Ranking Sites With Minimal Work.


Personally I'd take out the even if you're a newbie but if you want people who don't know how to add a plugin then keep it.

I'd like a copy when it's ready. Can I read the product description?