Another Sales Letter Critique Request
I've been writing for a long time (and getting paid to do so), but I'm finding it very, very difficult to get new clients--especially new clients that want to pay more than a few bucks for every ounce of blood, sweat, and tears I can pour into their copy. In my attempt to gain more clients, and hopefully more income, I'm gearing up to try "new" avenues for getting my name out there.
In that vein, I wrote the attached one page sales letter with the intention of sending it to targeted potential clients. Any chance anybody would be willing to give it a quick read and let me know if it's any good? I would really appreciate any and all feedback!
(Please keep in mind that I'd like to keep it as short as possible, but I'm open to expanding it a bit if that is the consensus.)
Paula
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