First of all, I gotta thank everyone who helped me with my last copy-writing issue. I just finished writing the sales letter for that project, so I'd like to post it on here for anyone to critique.
This is my first attempt at this, but I can handle criticism, so don't go easy . If there's something that needs fixing, I need to know in order to fix it.
Here's the link: Mentor Mission
Thanks to anyone who helps! And a shoutout to Semmy for an awesome minisite design!
P.S. Not that it would matter I think, but there aren't any live links on that page yet since only part of the site is up.. Ok, rock on.
EDIT: So after seeing the responses thus far, I think anyone and everyone should look at this thread and the suggestions given. Not to sucker you into reading my sales page or anything, but the ideas and suggestions as to changes I should make will definitely help a lot of people in writing copy, whatever it's for.
I posted my initial sales letter knowing full well it needed tons of work, and the advice I got will definitely take it to another level. If you apply what these people have said already into your own sales letters, it will elevate your copy for sure.
So yeah.. I just think a ton of super important issues were covered in this thread (so far) that will most certainly help people out, so give it a look and take notes or something on the suggestions people make