Need suggestions for a copy rewrite...
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This is the one that converts best. It's profitable but I'm far from satisfied with it. I'm convinced that the potential is much, much better.
I deal with a complicated topic with a lot of support material. Getting a long presentation right while not losing the visitor is proving a challenge.
I already have some ideas about the revision... the most important one being to move my story to the forefront and getting more out of it. I've followed recent discussions about the importance of storytelling and I'm sure I can do it a lot better than I've been doing.
Beyond that I'd be really grateful for your suggestions. How's my headline, for example?
I'm especially interested in things that may be losing me visitors. I get a lot of good feedback on the site so I think there may be some things preventing people from taking action, rather than just a case of bad copy.
By the way, I know it needs an opt-in box. It's being reworked and will be back shortly.
Looking forward to your comments!
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