Reworked the sales letter, need advice

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I tried really hard, this is the closest to professional i have ever gotten, im so excited haha

Let me know what you think!

I tried to get a little creative...
#advice #letter #reworked #sales
  • Profile picture of the author Alex Cohen
    Body copy states $125 value, text above "Add To Cart" button has $150 crossed through.

    Several punctuation errors.

    Sales letter could be a lot better, but it might be good enough to sell a $30 product. Give it a try.

    Alex
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  • Profile picture of the author RogozRazvan
    Got to admire the persistence ...
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  • Profile picture of the author angiecolee
    1) You keep repeating exposure but not really hyping the dream. I get it. Musicians want exposure. But what does it MEAN? Why do they (we - I'm also a musician) struggle so hard without it?

    2) I, as a musician, have no clue what those outlets are. Maybe it's only for musicians that want to go pro? I'm a casual, for fun player, not a career tour jockey.

    3) Your testimonials are not really testimonials. Someone promising to pay once the flood is over? I mean, it's more proof than the generic gloss-over of people you've worked with, and I suppose better than nothing. But is that really the best you've got? You might be better off walking us through your best results as a case study and at least vividly painting the dream result.
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