The fact that you opened this post means you are interested in helping me perfect my sales letter - so thank you very much for that! I've never had my copy critiqued by real copywriters before, so I'm anxious to see what you'll write.
Anyways, here's a link to a direct mail piece I recently wrote for a client:
(it's a PDF so you might have to give it a sec to load)
I've spent a lot of hours on this, but my feelings aren't easily hurt (well, they are, but I say that so you have no qualms about telling me what you really, really think/feel ).
I'm very serious about my copy, so any comments/questions/anything you might have I would greatly, greatly appreciate.
p.s. In the headline it says "30 new clients" - that's supposed to say "30 new prospective clients"
p.p.s. I may have already changed it by the time you read it, so maybe ignore that. Thanks again.