Have read through the critique guidelines post and addressed some of the points in my copy. I own an SEO and Web Design Agency and looking to cold email businesses for SEO services.
My idea is to give a free Website SEO report and then use those that take up the free offer and warm call the leads. Anyway, here is the copy, if there is anything you might change or could offer some words of advice I'd really appreciate it.
I always use the industry I am targetting as the subject as I have found I get anywhere from 35-40% open rates doing this. I am guessing this is because they assume that it is a potential customer. Is this a good strategy or should I do something different?
Subject - Electrician
Hi *|FNAME|*,
Hope you don't mind the email out of the blue. We noticed your website on the Yello Pages and saw your Google rank could be slightly better and we'd love to help you with that.
But DON'T click out of the email without reading the next part!
We are doing SEO Audit Reports absolutely FREE for businesses such as *|MMERGE3|*.(company name)
You can use the report however you want. If you are currently doing your own website work, use the report to get your site ranking higher. Or send it over to your current agency and get them to do it for you.
We just wanted to introduce ourselves and our services to you.
Higher rankings means more clients, and more clients means more revenue for your business!
We are doing some great work for Lawyers, Accountants & Real Estate at the moment and are branching out into other trades.
If you are interested in the report, just hit reply saying I'm interested and I'll take care of the rest.
Regards,
XXX
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