tried my hand at doing a pre-video page BUT..

by edmltw 2 replies
Hey professional copywriters!! I need your comments.. Right now i did up this simple picture pre-video page ( yes it means, i am pre-selling the idea into the view even before the squeeze page, something like a Pre-squeeze SQUEEZE page). I need your criticisms! I just started trying this copywriting skill not long ago and i don't think I am up to the cut yet.. Any comments will be deeply appreciated! Thanks! Oh, the link is on my signature..

Regards,
Edmund
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  • Profile picture of the author David Raybould
    Edmund-

    I kind of like the idea of the page,
    but the way it's laid out is going to
    sabotage it right from the start.

    To at least give it a fair chance at
    being successful, you need to put
    the images and text in one central
    table. Otherwise, your text is too
    wide, people won't bother reading it.

    And also, the table would help stop
    the background interfering.

    Have a look at a few successful sales
    pages online, and see how they have
    everything positioned into one central
    table, with the background around it.

    Generally they'll use a table about 650
    to 700 px wide, and it makes the whole
    page easier to read. And more readers
    will usually equal more sales/clicks/whatever.

    Hope that helps.

    -David Raybould
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    • Profile picture of the author edmltw
      Hey David,

      Thanks for the suggestions! I did as what you told me.. I created a simple table and placed all the stuffs inside.. People should be able to read the content better now. Now I got a problem.. Is my copywriting too little? The reason why I put the pictures I hope that it would literally "speak a thousand words". Would it be better if i added more copywriting in? Hope to hear from you soon!

      Btw, I added in a script to track the amount of traffic and another script to see the conversion rate for that page, if the concept works I will PM you. Cause you bothered to help. Thanks again David.

      Regards,
      Edmund

      Originally Posted by David Raybould View Post

      Edmund-

      I kind of like the idea of the page,
      but the way it's laid out is going to
      sabotage it right from the start.

      To at least give it a fair chance at
      being successful, you need to put
      the images and text in one central
      table. Otherwise, your text is too
      wide, people won't bother reading it.

      And also, the table would help stop
      the background interfering.

      Have a look at a few successful sales
      pages online, and see how they have
      everything positioned into one central
      table, with the background around it.

      Generally they'll use a table about 650
      to 700 px wide, and it makes the whole
      page easier to read. And more readers
      will usually equal more sales/clicks/whatever.

      Hope that helps.

      -David Raybould
      Signature

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