Need some feedback on my copy
I wrote this copy with the goal of getting an initial contact from the visitor.
I'm sure it can be improved because I'm far from the best copywriter.
Here is the copy
Any feedback is appreciated.
Note: I can't add testimonials to the copy because it's a new company.
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