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Idea for my Piercing shop

by Omer Hay
6 replies
Hey all,
I'm looking for a nice sentence to print on my piercings shop package.
I have few ideas but not sure about it -
1. What your mind wants and your body needs.
2. Pierce yourself a little.
3. Making you whole.
4. Piercing beauty.
#idea #piercing #shop
  • Profile picture of the author Frank Donovan
    Originally Posted by Omer Hay View Post

    I'm looking for a nice sentence to print on my piercings shop package.
    I have few ideas but not sure about it -
    1. What your mind wants and your body needs.
    2. Pierce yourself a little.
    3. Making you whole.
    4. Piercing beauty.
    What about "Making you hole?"
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    • Profile picture of the author tryinhere
      A trusted, personal & professional service, that comes with a whole lotta love. mybdypeiercing.com

      or similar ?
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    • Profile picture of the author Omer Hay
      Haha it's cute but I don't want to have "sex" connotation.
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      • Profile picture of the author GordonJ
        Originally Posted by Omer Hay View Post

        Haha it's cute but I don't want to have "sex" connotation.
        Who is your target market? Is there an age group which gives you most of your business and what do they say is the reason why they want to get pierced? That might give you some better ideas.

        Piercing is personal. PERIOD !.

        How's that work?

        GordonJ
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  • Profile picture of the author poweredspeaker
    Yes it is similar to mybdypeiercing only. There is not too much difference in it.
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  • Profile picture of the author SARubin
    GordonJ beat me to the punch on this one. But I'll chime in anyway...


    It's kinda hard to offer opinions without more info...

    Like, what's your brand about? (or what type of branding are you trying to achieve with your business?)

    And, who's your ideal client?

    If you're selling to adults (like my wife who has 6 or 7 piercings in each ear) then something like
    "pierce your body - free your spirit" might resonate with her.

    But if you're selling to my 19 year old daughter who has multiple piercings and gauges in each ear, and a couple piercings in her nose, and one in her lip, then something along the lines of
    "pierce the veil of conformity" would probably get a better response from her, and her friends

    So, what do you want your brand to say? And who are your clients?

    Answer these questions, and then try to create a tagline that connects the two.

    Best of luck to you,
    SAR
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