Looking for criticism/feedback on a landing page.

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Hello friends,

Soft-launching a USDA Organic Skincare Line & Selfcare Ritual.

It's for all Genders and Skin types, but the brand is more male-trait dominant/focused.

The purpose is e-mail sign-ups, to be notified when the product is available for pre-order and discount. Small batch first run for a Serum. The product itself is incredibly powerful. Over a year of R&D. The ritual is also very powerful for people that are focused on creating their best day, and honing their mindset to build their ultimate life.

Right now... It feels like the landing page issues are:
- Too focused on the brand and not enough on avatar/pains
- Not creating enough intrigue/interest with the Headline/Subhead/Offer

Crit appreciated! Thank you.
#criticism or feedback #landing #page
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  • Profile picture of the author Karp44
    what is the landing page?
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  • Profile picture of the author Brendan Hal
    As Karp44 said, where can I see the landing page? Or am I missing something?
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