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Can someone test my sales letter for me?

by Daniel Brock
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Hello Warriors!

I am in need of assistance. I added some video to my sales letter, but I am not 100% that it is working for all browsers(IE is what I am most concerned about).

Can someone test out of my sales letter at:
HostLauncher - A complete step by step blueprint to starting your own web host.

and tell me if you can view the video(it's just below the top fold)?

Also, feel free to critique my sales letter, I could use some improvements.

Thank you for your time. I have no idea who else to ask!
#letter #sales
  • Profile picture of the author Ken Strong
    Just heading out the door, but I do see the video in Firefox. Maybe you should consider moving it above the fold?
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    • Profile picture of the author Daniel Brock
      Originally Posted by KenStrong View Post

      Just heading out the door, but I do see the video in Firefox. Maybe you should consider moving it above the fold?
      FireFox is the one I know that works.

      Internet explorer is the one I am most concerned about.

      And yes, you are right about moving the video up. That's on my list of my next improvements.

      Thank you,
      Daniel
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      Originally Posted by Paul McQuillan View Post

      Works for me

      Did you write the sales page?
      Yes, I wrote it. Took me freaking forever like 2 straight days.

      I had no idea sales letters were so time consuming.
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      • Profile picture of the author Daniel Brock
        Originally Posted by Paul McQuillan View Post

        2 days? That is pretty damned good for 2 days

        Good for you!
        Thank you sir
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        • Profile picture of the author Tina Golden
          Video worked fine for me in IE, Daniel. Honestly, I didn't read the sales letter as I'm not nearly qualified to give an opinion on copywriting. I do like the audio part of the video though - quite professional sounding.

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  • Profile picture of the author Mike Anthony
    Paul's right. thats pretty nice work for two days (even for a week). Don't know if you want to fall in with the new FTC rules as to claims of earnings (web hosting is much more competitive that even four years ago so that will probably not be an average result) and I don't think its really fair to claim running a lucrative hosting company is something that takes little work. I take it you outsourced support? Which can still leave you with headaches.

    Nice market though with plenty of upsells. Ton loads of people looking to get into web hosting ever week over on Webhostingtalk alone
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    • Profile picture of the author Daniel Brock
      Tina and Mike,

      Thanks for the compliments! It's interesting to see how much I have improved with my copywriting even after only writing 3 sales letters so far.

      My first one was atrocious. Looking back, my third letter isn't even in the same league as my first one.

      Mike,
      Web Hosting can be pretty easy work ONCE you have your system in place.

      I guess that is something I need to address better in my sales letter, that while it is really easy and automated once you get it to a certain point, getting it to that point does require work on your end.

      I will write up something to address that aspect.

      Thanks again!
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      • Profile picture of the author Mike Anthony
        Originally Posted by Daniel Brock View Post


        Mike,
        Web Hosting can be pretty easy work ONCE you have your system in place.

        I guess that is something I need to address better in my sales letter, that while it is really easy and automated once you get it to a certain point

        HI Daniel,

        As part of web programming I did a bit of hosting and you can never automate it fully. All you can do is hire support staff (which is outsourcing not automation), Hosting clients have questions, issues and problems which is why every good host I know has a ticketing system help desk.

        So watch where you may be overstating besides that i think you have a winner.
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