I love the colors and graphics although I wouldn't mind a little more brightness/glow on the top of the logo. But it's a small matter.

On the whole, I feel it reads well. There are some typos (?)/mistakes with language but again, no real damage done. (That said, if it were mine, I'd make the changes).

But really, it's great work!

Best of luck!

Some layout notes:

Kill the gold main headline and go with black (#000) or red (#c00). You can try testing gold v. black but we have yet to see a headline color out-perform black/red in thousands of test for sales letters.

Get rid of the black background and use white or off white.

Lose the header image or at least test it versus a non-header style.

Some copy notes:

Tell me EARLY ON why I should trust you and what the payoff is going to be for me to read your sales letter.

Create sub-headlines that are centered, interesting and draw the eye to the page when scanned.

Replace all your "I" statements with "you" statements.

Show proof of every personal claim you make. Do you have traffic? Show me a screenshot.

Get some testimonials--the more specific results oriented the better.

Change the orientation of your sales copy. Right now it sounds as if it is coming from YOUR perspective. Nobody cares about you except your mom. Write it from the prospect's perspective. "You already know how hard it is to drive traffic to a site..." "I was just like you..." "Until I discovered..." "You can put the same tactics to work--without the heart-ache I went through..."

These changes will greatly improve the conversion rate for your page.