Leave some room for curiosity. :-)

i liked the last part, the first part confused me a little

You should phrase the first few words as a questions, seems too wordy.

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It's generic and reads like thousands of other headlines. I'm also with the others on the 'who else' wants opening. That one is pretty weather worn.

You need a hook in there... something that gets people's attention and helps it stand out from every other product of this nature.

-Dan

"Get Paid Cash For Taking A Survey!"
"Make Money Doing Online Surveys"
"Doing Easy Online Surveys Pays Cash Now!"
"Companies That Pay Cash For Your Opinion"
"Cash For Surveys"
"Companies That Pay Cash For Your Ideas"

Play with it, mold it, shape it.

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Put some specifics in there.

I can get paid? How much?

I can get rewards? What are
they?

Mention some specifics and
people will be more likely to
read further into the letter.

-David Raybould

You can use this headline -


I think this headline is still accurate considering people are getting paid for their opinions. It hits your target market accurately though it can be improvised a little bit as well. And people who are new to getting paid for filling online surveys will still want to read through. It inspires people to read through the sales letter.

The best part of this headline is it is simple, to-the-point, attractive, catchy and directly hitting your target audience.

Basically, a headline is the best way to market your sales offer by highlighting your USP within itself.

USP = headline. What's so special about your offer that no one else offers, that's your USP.

Unfortunately, I do not know what is your USP. The headline can be bettered by smartly inserting your USP in the headline.

I think you need to be hitting direct at your target market. Not everyone reading your sales page is your customer. There are a ton of people who would want to just do what you offer. You must target only those who are really inspired to get paid for their opinions.

If you still need further help, PM me. I will be glad to help you.

"Who Else Wants To Get Paid Just By Giving Your Opinion!" - Ithink this would be great.

"Who else wants to get laid"???...uh...sorry...my mistake..."paid". Note to self "Get stronger reading glasses". But in truth that's a stronger head than your lame "Who else wants to get paid?".

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