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Help me re-write my affiliate review

by Jacob Martus
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Hi everyone.
I got one of my affiliate review pages to the first page of Google for a decent keyword. The keyword is: best gaming mouse. I am getting a pretty decent amount of traffic, but so far no sales. I know this is a buying market and the keyword is one of the best ones I could target. So my thinking is that is has to be my review. Now I know its not the best by any means, but I struggle trying to find the best way to lay out the products benefits, and write a compelling headline.

I really need some help. I have good traffic that I want to take advantage of, so please help me re-write this affiliate review. This is my first go at the online marketing thing so I need all the help I can get.

Heres the review: The Logitech G7 Laser Mouse has all the features without the cord. | GamingTech.org

Thanks in advance to anyone who can help me convert my traffic.

Much appreciation,


Jacob Martus
#affiliate #review #rewrite
  • Profile picture of the author Jacob Martus
    I'm even willing to pay for an experienced copywriter to give me a good affiliate review so I'm not wasting all this traffic I'm getting. The traffic is pretty much useless right now because its not converting.

    It wouldn't require too much work and I'll pay well for anyone that can help me with this.


    Please help me convert my traffic.


    Thanks,


    Jacob Martus
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  • Profile picture of the author kfk2003
    Personally I'm not into deceiving people by
    dressing up an affiliate sales pitch as a review.
    It's misleading at best and a downright scam
    at worst.

    I doubt you'll get many responses here for that
    reason. Integrity is vitally important to a copywriter
    and I'd hope it would be for any other IMer.
    Although with this and the 'is it OK to lie about
    deadlines' thread maybe I'm a little naive.

    The only tip I'll give you is that your 'review' reads
    like it was taken straight from the manufacturer's site.
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      • Profile picture of the author Jacob Martus
        Ok. So how should I go about clearly labeling my affiliate links?

        Should I include a disclaimer after every affiliate link saying, "I am an affiliate of this product, ands hould this review result in you buying the product, I will earn a commission."?

        And you're also saying that doing some niche research and finding a niche that isn't super competitive and then ranking for it on Google makes a person a lying money grabbing cheat.

        How else could someone make money from affiliate marketing?
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        • Profile picture of the author kfk2003
          Originally Posted by Jacob Martus View Post

          Ok. So how should I go about clearly labeling my affiliate links?

          Should I include a disclaimer after every affiliate link saying, "I am an affiliate of this product, ands hould this review result in you buying the product, I will earn a commission."?
          Maybe a box at the bottom of each 'review' saying something like if you buy through my links you're helping to support this site.

          And you're also saying that doing some niche research and finding a niche that isn't super competitive and then ranking for it on Google makes a person a lying money grabbing cheat.
          I prefaced that with "When the only criteria for a positive review is......". Meaning the 'cheat' comment only applies if you're going to give a good review to whatever product you can rank for in order to make commission. I didn't mean it to be specifically targeted at you as I'm aware Logitech make top notch gear, I was more replying to Ken's comment.

          For you, I think you just need to write a real review and inject it with some personality. And get a decent 'about page' up with a photo of yourself. Show your reader that you are a real person who they can trust.

          Reviews and copywriting are two different things but advice that does transfer across is that you need to tell the reader the benefits (not features) of the mouse. For example, most people will have no clue what 400/2000 dpi means so write about what they actually are and how they'd help the reader. Write it all like you're explaining it to a friend. Your keyboard review seems like a step in the right direction.

          Apologies for my harsh comments and I hope some of that helps you.
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          • Profile picture of the author traderfx
            Originally Posted by kfk2003 View Post

            Maybe a box at the bottom of each 'review' saying something like if you buy through my links you're helping to support this site.

            I prefaced that with "When the only criteria for a positive review is......". Meaning the 'cheat' comment only applies if you're going to give a good review to whatever product you can rank for in order to make commission. I didn't mean it to be specifically targeted at you as I'm aware Logitech make top notch gear, I was more replying to Ken's comment.

            For you, I think you just need to write a real review and inject it with some personality. And get a decent 'about page' up with a photo of yourself. Show your reader that you are a real person who they can trust.

            Reviews and copywriting are two different things but advice that does transfer across is that you need to tell the reader the benefits (not features) of the mouse. For example, most people will have no clue what 400/2000 dpi means so write about what they actually are and how they'd help the reader. Write it all like you're explaining it to a friend. Your keyboard review seems like a step in the right direction.

            Apologies for my harsh comments and I hope some of that helps you.
            I agree, your copy is dry and boring.
            Add some personality to it, tell a story, how will this new mouse benefit me?

            Since you are selling to the gaming community, what would someone who is into gaming have a problem with their mouse to effect play or score?

            Look at you reviews for the answer.

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          • Profile picture of the author Mr. Enthusiastic
            Originally Posted by kfk2003 View Post

            Maybe a box at the bottom of each 'review' saying something like if you buy through my links you're helping to support this site.
            I like that too.

            I don't see anything at all that you personally added to the spec sheet, beyond the suggestion to use two batteries.

            To really have a review, you need to
            start with what matters to the user - in this case, mastering their games and playing better than their opponents - that probably matters more than the history of Logitech
            discuss the problem - wireless mice are nice for the office, but they've been slow and klunky, not smooth and reliable enough for gamers
            the solution - part 1, the sensors are excellent, part 2, the wireless connection is excellent
            the result - excellent gameplay, no apologies, plus the comfort and convenience of wireless
            drawback - short battery life, here's the facts on how long it lasts, and the workarounds (wouldn't a gamer be worried that the mouse might die partway through a hot session?)
            suggestion - get this one of a kind mouse and unplug while you blast away

            Then you recommend Amazon, with a note that buying through your link helps support this review site.

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  • Profile picture of the author kfk2003
    If it's a genuine, honest review with the
    affiliate links clearly labeled then fair
    enough, but the OP's review seemed more
    like a press release with a 'best mouse in
    the world ever' line pasted to the bottom.

    When the only criteria for a positive review
    is 'can I rank on Google for it?' and 'does it
    have a large comission?' you become a lying,
    money-grabbing cheat.

    Taking advantage of people for a few dollars
    is sickening.
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  • Profile picture of the author travlinguy
    Okay Jacob...
    Your page reads like a product description in some stuffy old electronics catalog. What I'd do is put up a compelling story written by someone who loves the logitech whatever it is.

    Have them go into detail about how they're able to blast away more aliens or bandits or whatever you blast with a slick mouse button. Make it juicy. Make the reader want to pull out his credit card and get a couple of logitechs just in case he burns one up from so much super duper high powered mouse clicking blasting action...

    And if you make your appeal forceful enough, you can place a statement at the bottom of the page in the full light of everyone including the FTC and God that you are occasionally compensated (only when someone buys) for writing juicy reviews about logitech and NO ONE will give a flyin' mouse click. Shoot me a PM if you want some pointers.
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