Frankly, I don't have much of a clue of how good this is, but I know it needs lots of improvement. I know a 100 heads are better than one so here is my sales page:
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Please critique it for me, especially the general structure, the headings and the header. Thanks a lot for all the help you can possibly give, you guys (and girls) really are the best!