Review and critique my sales page

It sounds rather illegal.

Badly Needs a Graphical Makeover, Check my Sig, I can help you

Thunders, matey! Arggh!

I second Jack Sparrow, definitely needs a makeover!

Kind of ironic though - how to get things for free on the internet, only $39.95

See my sig for some ideas..

Ouch, to be honest I wouldn't be interested if I just stumbled into this. Definitely needs some makeover.

I'm with Judy on this one - sounds illegal.

The only qualm I have is the use of color. Why do you need to have 2 different colors on each side? In fact, you can do better without it.

1. site take to long to load. 3min@28.8bps Some folks are still using dialup- Not by choice

2. Your copy really sucks! sorry about that remark... I know that you probably spent several hours writing your copy but... it reads like you threw it up. sorry again

3. Headline doesn't pull me into your copy. However, you are on the right track with the leangth of your headline.

4. If you took the headline with the image and turn it into a bumper sticker... you might sell more of them than the book.

5. Another thing about your copy it is all centered. Your copy should read like a personal message to a friend.

6. Why not give your book away for free and use it as a lose leader instead. Or write a 12 page report to give away for free to sell your 32 page ebook?

I couldn't resist to re-visit this subject.
tell me why should I purchase your book?
Why will it benefit me?

Okay, I'll focus my recommendations on the site, but you will probably upset some warriors with a site like this ... especially if they knew some of their work ends up on some of the forums you speak of. Just thought I'd mention it...

Now, to your site. To begin with, you may do better to create a background with a color like blue or gray. Then set the main page in the center.

Eliminate the links to the left. When creating a sales page, you do not want to distract your reader from your message. Any links they are able to click that take them away from your sales message is a mistake.

The blue type should also be changed to black. It is very easy for readers to see the blue type and assume there is a link. That brief moment of curiosity, over and over, can distract readers from the flow of your message.

To get some ideas on how your page should look go to -- successdoctor.com/services/ -- once there, scroll down the page and go to the section on the right that says "Check Out Actual Samples Of Our Work." You will find links to 16 sales pages that you can view. This will give you a visual of how you can format your page (not instructions or a tutorial, but a visual idea of what looks right).

As for the copy on your page, rather than give a line by line critique, I will offer a couple of recommendations for help.

First, you can learn some important tips by going to -- makepeacetotalpackage.com -- Focus on the headline. There are several helpful tips on this site that you will benefit from.

If you are looking for a quick fix for improving your site, that carries a reasonable price tag, go to -- fastfoodcopywriting.com -- This is a quality yet inexpensive resource.

I am curious about one thing ... I am familiar with some of the forums you are referring to ... Have you searched those forums for ebooks/software to help with setting up your web page? No big deal, I'm just curious.

Anyway, I hope something here helps.

Kelly